Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural, expressive and provides relevant supporting details. To improve further, tighten sentences to avoid minor redundancy (e.g., “I feel like” twice) and use more precise vocabulary and one linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences. Also correct minor phrasing ("non fictional" → "non-fiction").

例: I love reading, especially fantasy and non-fiction. When I read, I’m transported into another world and often imagine myself as the main character having exciting adventures, which helps me relax. As a result, reading gives me a pleasant, whimsical escape from everyday stress.

提案: Good content and reasons, but there is repetition and minor grammatical errors. Avoid repeating phrases ("rather than rather than") and improve cohesion with clearer linking words. Use precise phrasing ("I like because" → "I prefer it because") and limit to 3–4 concise sentences.

例: I prefer reading on paper because I enjoy the tactile feel of the pages. Moreover, screens tend to strain my eyes and blur my vision after prolonged use, so paper feels more comfortable and immersive for long reading sessions.

提案: The response addresses the question but ends abruptly and has an incomplete final sentence. Make the contrast clearer by using linking words ("however", "whereas") and finish the thought. Provide a brief example of casual reading to show specificity and keep sentences concise.

例: You should read carefully when dealing with important, official materials, such as contracts or government documents, because every clause can have consequences. However, when you're reading for pleasure, like a light novel or a magazine, skimming or a relaxed pace is usually fine.

提案: Clear and relevant answer with good contrast. To improve, streamline phrasing and use a linking phrase for clarity. Replace phrases like "for example" with more specific examples and avoid redundancy ("I think" repeated). Keep it to 2–3 sentences for concision.

例: It depends on the material: for leisure books I usually scan sections to keep the pace enjoyable, whereas for legal documents or contracts I read in detail to ensure I don’t miss important terms or obligations.

× I love reading, especially fantasy and non fictional books.

✓ I love reading, especially fantasy and non-fiction books.

'non fictional' should be hyphenated as 'non-fiction' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. This makes it a single adjectival phrase modifying 'books'. Use the hyphen to show the words function together; also 'non-fiction' is the standard form. Suggestion: write 'non-fiction books' or 'nonfiction books'.

× I feel like when I read I am taken to a different world where I can think of myself as a main character having all of these adventures.

✓ I feel that when I read, I am taken to a different world where I can imagine myself as the main character having all these adventures.

The phrase 'feel like when' is colloquial; 'feel that when' or simply 'when' is clearer. 'Think of myself as a main character' is acceptable but 'imagine myself as the main character' is more natural. Remove 'of' after 'all' in 'all of these adventures' to flow better. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'imagine' for mental visualization and include commas around subordinate clauses.

× This in turn helps me feel more relaxed in real life and I get to enjoy this whimsical feeling.

✓ This, in turn, helps me feel more relaxed in real life, and I get to enjoy the whimsical feeling.

Add commas around the parenthetical 'in turn' and after 'real life' to separate clauses. 'This whimsical feeling' is more natural than 'this whimsical feeling' repeated; remove redundant 'this' if context allows. Ensure pronoun reference is clear. Suggestion: use commas to set off parenthetical phrases and avoid unnecessary demonstrative pronouns.

× I prefer to read on paper rather than rather than on a screen.

✓ I prefer to read on paper rather than on a screen.

The phrase 'rather than' is duplicated. Remove the repeated phrase to correct redundancy. Suggestion: proofread to remove duplicated words or phrases.

× I like because I love the feeling of paper between my fingers.

✓ I like reading on paper because I love the feeling of paper between my fingers.

The sentence is incomplete: 'I like because' lacks an object of 'like'. Add 'reading on paper' to show what is liked. This fixes sentence structure errors. Suggestion: ensure conjunctions like 'because' join two complete ideas and include the subject/object as needed.

× Furthermore, reading on a screen strains my eyes and it blurs my vision after quite a while, so reading on paper is always a more immersive feeling for me.

✓ Furthermore, reading on a screen strains my eyes and blurs my vision after a while, so reading on paper is always more immersive for me.

Remove the redundant 'it' after 'and' because the subject 'reading on a screen' already applies to both verbs. 'After quite a while' is wordy; 'after a while' is smoother. 'More immersive feeling' is wordy—use 'more immersive' or 'a more immersive experience'. Suggestion: avoid repeating subjects unnecessarily and choose concise noun phrases ('more immersive' or 'a more immersive experience').

× I think you need to read carefully when you're reading something that is important and official.

✓ I think you need to read carefully when you're reading something important and official.

'Something that is important and official' is grammatically correct but wordy. Removing 'that is' creates a more natural adjective phrase 'something important and official'. Suggestion: omit unnecessary relative clauses where adjectives suffice.

× For example, when you're reading official documents or contracts, you need to fully read and understand what you are reading and not just skimming through it.

✓ For example, when you're reading official documents or contracts, you need to read and fully understand what you are reading and not just skim through it.

Use parallel verb forms: 'read and fully understand' rather than 'fully read and understand'. Also keep verbs parallel: 'not just skim through it' (base verb) instead of 'not just skimming'. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure in verb lists and place adverbs to avoid awkward splitting.

× However, when you're reading something for fun, I think you can.

✓ However, when you're reading something for fun, I think you can relax and skim.

The original ends abruptly with 'you can'—it needs a verb or phrase to complete the idea. Adding 'relax and skim' clarifies the intended action. Suggestion: ensure sentences are complete and include the main verb/idea.

× My preference is based on what I'm reading.

✓ My preference depends on what I'm reading.

'Is based on' is not incorrect but 'depends on' is more natural in this context. Both are present tense; this is an improvement for idiomatic usage. Suggestion: use 'depends on' for expressing conditional preference.

× When it's just a book, for example, something I'm reading for fun, I prefer to scan.

✓ When it's just a book, for example something I'm reading for fun, I prefer to skim.

'Scan' is acceptable but 'skim' is the more idiomatic verb for quickly reading a book. Keep gerund phrase 'something I'm reading for fun' as modifier. Remove comma before 'something' to reduce choppiness. Suggestion: use 'skim' when referring to quick reading; ensure punctuation keeps modifiers connected.

× However, when I am presented with a legal document or a contract, I think detailed reading would really help me so that I won't miss any important details or terms.

✓ However, when I am presented with a legal document or a contract, I think detailed reading really helps me so that I don't miss any important details or terms.

Mixing 'would' with present habitual context is awkward. Use present simple 'helps' and 'don't' to match the general truth/habitual action. This maintains tense consistency. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habitual or general statements; use present simple rather than conditional 'would' here.