Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (articles, plural forms), and give one or two specific examples or reasons. Use linking words like "also" or "because" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I love reading. It expands my knowledge and helps me do better at school and in everyday life. For example, I read history books to understand past events and science articles to keep up with new discoveries.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity: use correct comparisons ("prefer X to Y"), simplify wording, and give a brief specific reason with an example of how you mark or control text. Use one linking word like "because".

例: I prefer reading on a screen to reading on paper because it is easier to search, highlight, and zoom text. For instance, I often use the highlight tool on my tablet to save important passages for later study.

提案: Make the contrast clearer and use natural expressions: state a topic sentence, then explain two situations with linking words like "when" and "but" or "whereas." Correct awkward phrasing ("learn by heart" -> "memorize" or "study carefully").

例: I read carefully when I need to memorize facts or understand complex instructions, for example when studying for an exam. But when I only want a general idea, I skim the text to find the main points.

提案: Be concise and specific: give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then explain why with a concrete example or result. Avoid vague endings and grammar errors ("remember longer" -> "remember information for longer"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand ideas deeply and remember information for longer. For example, when I read a textbook chapter carefully and take notes, I can recall the material more easily during tests.

× I really love reading because reading can expand my knowledge and make me more intelligent when I study at school or in the life.

✓ I really love reading because it can expand my knowledge and make me more intelligent when I study at school or in life.

The phrase 'in the life' is incorrect; the correct prepositional phrase is 'in life' (general condition). Also replace the repeated noun 'reading' with the pronoun 'it' for clarity and concision.

× So I really enjoy reading with different type of the books.

✓ So I really enjoy reading different types of books.

'Different type of the books' is incorrect: 'type' should be plural 'types' to match 'different', and the article 'the' is unnecessary. Use 'reading different types of books' for correct adjective-noun agreement and natural word order.

× Personally, I prefer reading on the screen than on paper because I feel that more easy to control what I read on screen and I can mark this passage when I read it and can control this.

✓ Personally, I prefer reading on a screen to reading on paper because I find it easier to control what I read on a screen, and I can mark passages when I read them.

Use 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A than B' (comparison structure). 'More easy' is incorrect; use 'easier' (comparative form). Use 'a screen' and parallel structure 'reading on a screen' and 'reading on paper'. Replace 'this passage' and 'this' with plural/general forms and correct pronoun agreement.

× When I need to learn by heart and remember the keyword in the message, I always read it carefully and read details in the passage.

✓ When I need to learn something by heart and remember the keywords in a message, I always read it carefully and read the details in the passage.

Use 'learn something by heart' for natural phrasing. 'Keyword' should be plural 'keywords' if more than one; use 'a message' for general reference. 'Read details' should be 'read the details' to use the definite article with specific items.

× But when I just need to know the information in the message, I just read it.

✓ But when I only need to get the information in a message, I just skim it.

'Just' is repeated; replace one with 'only' for clarity. 'Read it' is vague; use 'skim it' to contrast careful and quick reading. Use 'a message' for general reference.

× I prefer detailed reading because it can make me expand my knowledge and I can remember longer than scanning.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because it helps me expand my knowledge and remember things longer than scanning does.

'Make me expand' is unnatural; use 'helps me expand'. 'Remember longer' needs an object—'remember things longer'. Add 'does' after 'scanning' for clarity in comparison.

× So I always spend my time to reading details and catch the keyword on the message and it can make me more.

✓ So I always spend time reading the details and catching the keywords in a message, and it helps me improve.

'Spend my time to reading' is incorrect; use 'spend time reading'. Use gerunds 'reading' and 'catching' in parallel. 'Catch the keyword on the message' -> 'catch the keywords in a message'. 'It can make me more' is incomplete; specify what 'more' means, e.g. 'helps me improve'.