Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, ngắn gọn, và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ thể loại sách yêu thích hoặc tác giả). Tránh lặp từ và sửa các lỗi về danh từ đếm/không đếm và trật tự từ. Hãy giữ tổng số câu trong 3–4 câu.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I especially like dramatic and romantic novels because they explore characters' emotions in depth. I also read popular science books about space sometimes to learn more about our world.

提案: Cần dùng cấu trúc câu chính xác và tránh lặp từ. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (I prefer...), sau đó nêu 2 lý do ngắn gọn, mỗi lý do dùng liên từ (because, so). Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như 'prefer to read on paper' và dùng lý do cụ thể (less eye strain, more comfortable). Giữ 2–3 câu.

例: I prefer to read on paper rather than on a screen because reading on screens often causes eye strain. Also, I find printed books more comfortable and easier to concentrate on.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp/logic. Nên tách câu thành hai phần: khi cần đọc kỹ (ví dụ khi học, làm bài tập, chuẩn bị thi hoặc kiểm tra thông tin) và khi không cần (ví dụ đọc giải trí như tiểu thuyết). Dùng liên từ để liên kết ý (for example, but). Tránh dùng từ mơ hồ như 'competition' nếu không giải thích.

例: I need to read carefully when I'm studying or preparing for exams, because accuracy is important. But when I read novels for pleasure, I often skim or read more relaxedly and don't focus on every detail.

提案: Cần diễn đạt rõ lý do một cách mạch lạc và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (e.g. 'need to know information correctly'). Bắt đầu với câu chủ đề (I prefer detailed reading) rồi giải thích vì sao, đưa ví dụ cụ thể (studying for exams, assignments). Tránh nói mơ hồ như 'too dangerous' nếu không giải thích cụ thể.

例: I prefer detailed reading because as a student I need accurate information for assignments and exams. Scanning only gives a general idea, which might cause mistakes when I have to use the information later.

× I’m really keen on reading novels, like dramatic novels or just something about romantic.

✓ I'm really keen on reading novels, like dramatic novels or just something romantic.

The phrase 'about romantic' is incorrect because 'romantic' is an adjective and does not require 'about'. Use the adjective directly after 'something' (something romantic). Suggestion: remove 'about' when using an adjective to modify 'something'.

× And even I can read something about space to know more, something around the world.

✓ I can even read something about space to learn more, or something about the world.

Word order and word choice issues: 'even' is better placed before the verb ('can even read'). 'To know more' is awkward; use 'to learn more'. 'Something around the world' should be 'something about the world'. Suggestion: place adverbs before the main verb and use appropriate verbs and prepositions.

× I prefer read on a paper more than on a screen because when you spend your time a lot of lot your time to read something on a screen maybe you will have a dry eye or maybe it not good for your eyes and read on the paper is maybe will more confident and comfortable for you.

✓ I prefer reading on paper to reading on a screen because if you spend a lot of time reading on a screen you may have dry eyes, and it may not be good for your eyes. Reading on paper may feel more comfortable and give you more confidence.

After 'prefer' use the gerund form ('reading'). Use 'on paper' without an article. Fix repetition 'a lot of lot' and replace 'maybe you will have a dry eye' with 'you may have dry eyes'. 'Maybe it not good' should be 'it may not be good'. 'Read on the paper is maybe will more confident' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'Reading on paper may feel more comfortable and give you more confidence.' Suggestion: use gerunds after preference verbs, correct modal usage, pluralize 'eyes', and restructure sentence for clarity.

× when you spend your time a lot of lot your time to read something on a screen maybe you will have a dry eye or maybe it not good for your eyes

✓ if you spend a lot of time reading on a screen you may have dry eyes, and it may not be good for your eyes

Use conditional 'if' for cause-effect. 'Maybe you will have' is awkward; use 'you may have'. 'Dry eye' should be plural 'dry eyes'. 'Maybe it not good' requires 'it may not be good'. Suggestion: use 'may' for possibility and correct countable nouns.

× I prefer read on a paper more than on a screen

✓ I prefer reading on paper to reading on a screen

Do not use the indefinite article 'a' with uncountable noun 'paper' when referring to material. Use the gerund after 'prefer' and 'to' for comparison: 'prefer A to B'. Suggestion: say 'reading on paper' not 'read on a paper'.

× I think I need to read more carefully. When I have some competition, I just read the news because I can tell to other people the correctly news when I read carefully, and I think I do.

✓ I think I need to read more carefully. When I have competitions, I just read the news because I can tell other people the correct news when I read carefully, and I think I do.

Tense mostly fine but problems with countability and adverb/adjective choice: 'some competition' should be plural 'competitions' or 'a competition' depending on meaning. 'Tell to other people' should be 'tell other people' (no 'to' after 'tell'). 'The correctly news' is wrong: 'correctly' is an adverb but needs adjective 'correct' to modify 'news' (which is uncountable). Suggestion: use 'correct' not 'correctly', remove unnecessary 'to'.

× I don't need to read when I read novels.

✓ I don't need to read carefully when I read novels.

The original is ambiguous: 'I don't need to read when I read novels' suggests you do not need to read at all. Intended meaning likely 'I don't need to read carefully when I read novels.' Add 'carefully' to clarify. Suggestion: include adverb to show manner of reading.

× I prefer detailed reading because now I'm just a student, so I need to have to know the correctly information and when I'm scanning I just know a little bit of that.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because I'm just a student now, so I need to know the correct information, and when I'm scanning I only get a little of that information.

Incorrect article and adjective/adverb: 'need to have to know' is redundant; use 'need to know'. 'The correctly information' should be 'the correct information' ('correct' adjective). 'Know a little bit of that' is informal; better 'get a little of that information'. Suggestion: remove redundancy, use correct adjective form, and choose clearer verbs.

× So maybe it's not really it's, it's too dangerous for me when I do something.

✓ So maybe it's really too risky for me when I do something like that.

Awkward repetition 'it's not really it's, it's' should be eliminated. 'Too dangerous for me when I do something' is vague; use 'too risky for me when I do something like that.' Place adverb 'really' before adjective and avoid repetition. Suggestion: simplify sentence and place adverbs immediately before adjectives they modify.

× I prefer scanning or detailed reading? Student: I prefer detailed reading because now I'm just a student, so I need to have to know the correctly information and when I'm scanning I just know a little bit of that.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because I'm just a student now, so I need to know the correct information, and when I scan I only learn a little of it.

Consistency of verb forms: use 'scan' (or 'scanning') consistently — after 'when' use simple present 'I scan' not 'I'm scanning' if referring to habitual action; either 'when I scan' or 'when I am scanning' acceptable, but keep structure simple. Also fix 'have to know' redundancy and 'correctly information' to 'correct information'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and correct adjective usage.