Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure, be concise and specific, and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms (e.g., "I'm fond of"), and avoid redundancy. Provide one or two concrete examples (titles or authors) and a brief reason. Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

例: I'm fond of reading, especially motivational books and romantic novels. For example, I enjoyed 'The Alchemist' for its inspiring messages and a recent romance novel that explored modern relationships. I usually read during my free time because these books motivate me and help me relax.

提案: Correct grammar and clarify reasons; use linking words to connect ideas. Use correct collocations ("on paper," "affects my eyes") and avoid repetition. Give a concise preference statement, a clear reason, and a brief example of when you choose paper books.

例: I prefer to read on paper rather than on a screen because prolonged screen time strains my eyes. Also, paperback books are convenient to keep by my bedside, so I can read before sleeping without turning on a bright device.

提案: Make the contrast clearer and fix grammar. Start with a topic sentence that directly answers when you read carefully, then give a contrasting situation using linking words (e.g., "however," "but"). Be specific about what kind of material requires careful reading and why.

例: I read carefully when I study new material or want to learn vocabulary, for example when reading articles for work or language books. However, I skim light or familiar content, such as news headlines or casual blog posts, especially if I'm distracted by noise or interruptions.

提案: Remove fillers and repetition, provide a clearer reason and a brief example. Use linking words (e.g., "because," "for example") and concise language. Explain what you gain from detailed reading and when you might scan instead.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me improve vocabulary and pronunciation; for example, reading novels slowly lets me notice sentence structure and new words. I might scan only when searching for specific information, such as a date or a fact.

× Yes, I fond of reading specially the motivational books and the love stories.

✓ Yes, I am fond of reading, especially motivational books and love stories.

Missing verb 'am' (linking verb) and incorrect word form 'specially' should be 'especially'; articles unnecessary before plural nouns. Suggestion: include the verb to be with subject and use 'especially' for emphasis on examples.

× Those are related to the person.

✓ Those are related to people.

'Person' is singular; 'those' refers to plural, so use plural noun 'people'. Suggestion: match plurality between demonstrative and noun.

× On my leisure time, I read novels and the biography.

✓ In my leisure time, I read novels and biographies.

Use preposition 'in' with 'leisure time' and make 'biography' plural if referring to biographies generally; 'the biography' implies a specific book which context does not support. Suggestion: use correct preposition and match plurality.

× Moreover, it motivates me personally to live life in a smooth way.

✓ Moreover, it personally motivates me to live life more smoothly.

Adverb placement: 'personally' modifies 'motivates' and should come before the verb; use adverb 'smoothly' rather than adjective 'smooth' to modify 'live'. Suggestion: place adverbs close to the verb and use adverb form for manner.

× I prefer to read on a paper rather than a screen because I personally believe that more screen time effects my eyes.

✓ I prefer to read on paper rather than on a screen because I believe that more screen time affects my eyes.

Do not use the article 'a' with uncountable 'paper' in this context; include preposition 'on' before 'a screen' for parallelism; 'effects' is a noun; correct verb is 'affects'. Suggestion: use parallel prepositions and correct verb form.

× So reading on books that also easily available nearby your nearby your bedside and.

✓ So books are easily available near your bedside.

Original sentence is fragmented and repetitive ('nearby your nearby your') and lacks correct verb form. Simplify to a clear subject-verb structure and remove redundancy. Suggestion: form a complete clause with subject and verb and avoid repetition.

× I often read carefully when I have a leisure time and utilize some precious time on reading so that I can improve my vocabulary whenever.

✓ I often read carefully when I have leisure time and use that time to read so that I can improve my vocabulary.

Use 'leisure time' without article and replace 'utilize' and awkward phrase 'on reading' with 'use that time to read'; 'whenever' at end is unnecessary. Suggestion: make tense consistent and simplify phrasing.

× On the other hand, when I distract, if I distract by something or someone so I have less interest.

✓ On the other hand, when I am distracted by something or someone, I have less interest.

Incorrect verb form 'distract' should be passive 'am distracted'; remove redundant 'if' and 'so' that make sentence ungrammatical. Suggestion: use passive form for being distracted and a single conjunction structure.

× I prefer detailed reading rather than scanning, uh, because, uh, I believe that reading makes a person's pronunciation and vocabulary more, uh, more interesting.

✓ I prefer detailed reading rather than scanning because I believe that reading makes a person's pronunciation and vocabulary better.

'More interesting' is odd when describing pronunciation and vocabulary; 'better' or 'stronger' is more appropriate. Also remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: choose an adjective that accurately describes improvement.

× And scanning is not my my kind of thing, so detail reading is more appropriate.

✓ Scanning is not my kind of thing, so detailed reading is more appropriate.

Duplicate word 'my my' is an error; 'detail' should be the adjective 'detailed'. Suggestion: remove repetition and use correct adjective form.