Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatical in your sentences. Start with a direct topic sentence, then briefly explain why you changed your view using specific details. Use correct tense and singular/plural agreement, and avoid redundancy. Keep your response within 2–4 sentences.

例: At first I didn’t enjoy reading because it required a lot of time and concentration, but now I do. I discovered that reading gives me useful knowledge and new perspectives, so I read regularly to learn about different cultures and professional topics.

提案: Good structure and clear preference. Improve cohesion by using linking words consistently and vary vocabulary slightly. Combine reasons more smoothly and avoid starting sentences with short fragments.

例: I prefer reading on paper because it is gentler on my eyes and I enjoy the tactile experience. Although screens are more convenient and sometimes faster for searching information, paper books help me focus and enjoy the content more.

提案: Correct grammar and be specific with examples. Start with the main point, then give concise reasons with one clear example for each case. Fix verb forms and articles (e.g., “I read” not “I reading”; “a fictional novel” or just “fiction”).

例: As a legal consultant I must read contracts very carefully because a single clause can alter the outcome of a case. In contrast, when I read fiction in my free time I relax and skim parts I find less interesting, focusing mainly on the plot and character development.

提案: Express your preference concisely and support it with a brief reason and an example. Avoid absolute phrases like “I understand nothing”; instead say you understand less. Reduce repetition and correct phrasing (e.g., “I find that when I scan, I understand less”).

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me fully understand and remember the information. For example, when I read a technical article carefully I can take notes and apply the ideas later, whereas scanning often makes me miss key points.

× I used to think that reading was not for me as is required too much times and concentrations.

✓ I used to think that reading was not for me as it required too much time and concentration.

The original sentence has incorrect verb tense and countable noun forms. 'is required' should be past 'required' to match 'used to think.' 'times' and 'concentrations' are incorrect; use uncountable nouns 'time' and 'concentration.' Suggestion: keep past perspective and use uncountable forms for abstract nouns.

× But after I find out that reading provides me with knowledge that have broadened my vision, I am now into reading.

✓ But after I found out that reading provided me with knowledge that broadened my vision, I am now into reading.

Mixes present and past tenses. 'find out' and 'provides' should be past to match 'after' event: use 'found out' and 'provided.' 'have broadened' is present perfect but simple past 'broadened' fits the narrative. Suggestion: maintain past tense for past discovery, keep 'I am now' in present.

× I prefer to read on paper. Reading on a screen has many advantages, For example, it can be faster and more convenient.

✓ I prefer to read on paper. Reading on a screen has many advantages. For example, it can be faster and more convenient.

Comma splice and incorrect capitalization after comma. Although punctuation issues are not listed, this affects grammar clarity. Replace comma with period and capitalize 'For.' Suggestion: separate independent clauses with a period or semicolon.

× But paper books are more comfortable for my eyes and I also love the smell and feel of a physical book.

✓ But paper books are more comfortable for my eyes, and I also love the smell and feel of a physical book.

Mainly a punctuation clarity issue—add comma before conjunction linking independent clauses. Subject-verb agreement is correct; added comma improves readability. Suggestion: use comma before 'and' when joining two independent clauses.

× But when I reading on my free time such as when I read a fictional novels, that is when I used less concentration.

✓ But when I am reading in my free time, such as when I read fictional novels, I use less concentration.

Incorrect verb form 'I reading' needs auxiliary 'am' for present continuous: 'I am reading.' 'on my free time' should be 'in my free time.' 'a fictional novels' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'fictional novels' or 'a fictional novel.' 'used less concentration' incorrectly uses past 'used'—present 'use' fits general habit. Suggestion: use 'am reading' for ongoing action, correct preposition 'in,' and match article and noun number.

× But when I reading on my free time such as when I read a fictional novels, that is when I used less concentration.

✓ But when I am reading in my free time, such as when I read fictional novels, I use less concentration.

The phrase 'a fictional novels' incorrectly combines singular article with plural noun. Choose singular with singular noun ('a fictional novel') or plural without article ('fictional novels'). Suggestion: ensure article and noun number agree.

× I find out when I do the scanning I understand nothing and I get nothing from that reading.

✓ I find that when I do scanning I understand nothing and get nothing from that reading.

'Find out' is for discovering new facts; here use 'find' to express realization. 'the scanning' unnecessarily uses article; 'scanning' as activity is fine without 'the.' Also redundant 'I' before second verb can be omitted. Suggestion: use 'find that' and treat gerund activities without 'the.'

× It is a waste of time.

✓ It is a waste of time.

Sentence is grammatical and fits context; no change needed. Keep as is.

× But when it comes to reading I have to use a lot of concentration and focus so I can take knowledge from that reading.

✓ But when it comes to reading, I have to use a lot of concentration and focus so I can gain knowledge from that reading.

'Take knowledge from that reading' is awkward; use 'gain knowledge.' Add comma after introductory clause. Verb tenses are okay; improve word choice for natural English. Suggestion: use collocations like 'gain knowledge' and include comma after 'reading.'