Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Грамматически ответ содержит ошибки и звучит неестественно. Нужны корректные структуры: использовать правильные глагольные формы (например, “I am fond of” или “I really enjoy”), избегать фраз с двойным значением вроде “avoid my problems” — лучше объяснить позитивную причину (например, “helps me relax” или “gives me a break”). Также сократите ответ до 2–3 предложений, без лишних деталей, и используйте связку причины («because»).

例: I am really fond of reading because it helps me relax and gives me a break from everyday worries. For example, when I read novels I can forget about stress and feel calmer.

提案: Ответ содержит лексическую и грамматическую неточности: «eat in the paper» неверно; нужно сказать «read on paper». Глагольные формы и согласование (my eyes get tired / strain, not get ill) также важны. Уберите паузы и запинки, используйте 1–2 предложения с ясным сравнением и примером. Используйте связку «because» и конкретную причину.

例: I prefer reading on paper because my eyes tend to get tired when I look at screens for a long time. For instance, after reading on a tablet I often get headaches.

提案: Ответ в целом понятен, но есть лишние повторы и разговорные звуки («uh, I, I»). Выражение «extremely need to read carefully» звучит неестественно — лучше «I need to read carefully». Надо дать более конкретные детали: почему учебные книги требуют внимательности и почему художественная литература можно читать менее строго. Используйте связки («because», «while», «for example») и не более 3 предложений.

例: I need to read carefully when I study textbooks because I must understand facts and remember details for exams. By contrast, I can read novels more casually for enjoyment, since I am reading them mainly for pleasure.

提案: Ответ содержит недопустимую фрагментарность («build my. Attitude. More film.») и проблемы с лексикой. Нужно сформулировать цель «detailed reading» — например, «to understand deeply» или «to form an informed opinion». Используйте связующие слова и избегайте коротких разорванных предложений. Ограничьте ответ до 2–3 связных предложений и приведите пример.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand the subject more deeply and form my own opinions. For example, when I read an article carefully I can remember key points and think critically about them.

× Personally, I really fond of reading because it disturbs me from the real world and helps me to avoid my problems.

✓ Personally, I am really fond of reading because it distracts me from the real world and helps me avoid my problems.

You omitted the verb 'to be' before the adjective phrase 'fond of' (use 'am' with I). 'Really' is an adverb correctly placed but needs the verb. 'Disturbs me from' is unidiomatic; use 'distracts me from'. Also avoid unnecessary 'to' before 'avoid' after 'helps me' (use base form). Suggestion: include the correct auxiliary verb for adjective complements and use idiomatic verbs: 'I am fond of' and 'distracts me from'.

× I prefer to eat in the paper because my eyes gets ill when I, uh, when I try to read on a screen.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because my eyes get sore when I try to read on a screen.

'Prefer to eat in the paper' contains multiple errors: 'eat' is wrong verb for reading — use 'read'. Use 'on paper' (no article). 'My eyes gets' is wrong subject-verb agreement; 'eyes' plural takes 'get'. 'Get sore' is idiomatic instead of 'get ill' for eyes hurting. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct verb 'read', drop 'the' before 'paper', and match verb to plural subject.

× Uh, I, I extremely need to read carefully when I read, uh, my study books and I don't need to read carefully when I read, uh, literature. For me, that includes my interests.

✓ I really need to read carefully when I study, but I don't need to read literature so carefully because it is more for my interests.

'Extremely need' is unnatural; use 'really need' or 'need to a great extent'. Repetition of 'read' and fillers reduce clarity. Use present simple 'need' for habitual actions. Clarify clauses with conjunctions 'when' and 'but'. 'For me, that includes my interests' is unclear; rephrase to show literature aligns with personal interest. Suggestion: replace adverb with 'really', streamline sentence, and use consistent present simple.

× I prefer detailed reading because it includes more information and it allows me to build my. Attitude. More film.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because it includes more information and it allows me to form my own opinions and develop my understanding of the topic.

Original has fragmented sentences 'build my. Attitude. More film.' which are incoherent. 'Build my attitude' is not idiomatic; better is 'form my own opinions' or 'develop my understanding'. 'More film' is irrelevant or mis-said. Suggestion: combine clauses into a coherent sentence, use idiomatic expressions ('form opinions', 'develop understanding'), and avoid sentence fragments.