Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조를 더 간결하고 자연스럽게 다듬으세요. 주제문으로 바로 답한 후 구체적이고 간결한 세부사항을 한두 문장으로 덧붙이되, 중복 표현(예: "that thing kind of thing")을 피하세요. 또한 과거 경험을 말할 때는 시제와 표현을 명확히 하고, 연결어(예: "because", "so")를 사용해 논리 흐름을 개선하세요.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. When I was a child, my mother and I visited the library every weekend, which helped me develop a love of stories.

提案: 발음 관련 오류는 평가에 반영하지 않지만 문법과 표현을 즉시 고쳐 자연스럽게 말하세요. 'prefer' 뒤에는 동명사(reading)를 쓰고, 중복 연결어('but' 반복)를 줄이세요. 이유를 하나 또는 두 개의 구체적 예로 뒷받침하고, 연결어('however','because')를 사용하면 더 논리적입니다.

例: I prefer reading books on mobile apps now because they are more convenient and I can access many titles on my phone. However, before I had a baby, I usually preferred paper books for their tactile feel.

提案: 답변의 의미가 혼란스럽습니다. 질문은 '언제 꼼꼼히 읽고 언제 그렇지 않은가'를 묻습니다. 먼저 주제문으로 직접 대답한 뒤 이유와 구체적 상황(예: 병원 문서, 아이돌보기 중 책을 스캔하는 이유)을 제시하세요. 문법적으로는 단수·복수 일치('my baby needs')와 자연스러운 연결어 사용에 주의하세요.

例: I need to read carefully when I'm dealing with important information, such as medical instructions or official documents. When I'm looking after my baby, I usually only skim texts because I must pay full attention to my child.

提案: 'Scanning tolerated' 같은 표현은 자연스럽지 않습니다. 먼저 선호를 명확히 밝히고 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 'because' 뒤에 결과(예: 'I read quickly to find out what happens next, even if I miss details')를 말하면 좋습니다. 어휘 선택을 조금 더 정확하게 하세요('curious' → 'curious about the next plot development').

例: To be honest, I prefer scanning when I read fantasy or romance novels because I'm eager to find out what happens next, so I often read quickly and sometimes miss minor details.

× When I was a child, my mom and I had a tradition of going to the library every weekend, so that thing kind of thing fostered the love of stories.

✓ When I was a child, my mom and I had a tradition of going to the library every weekend, and that kind of tradition fostered my love of stories.

The original sentence contains a redundant phrase 'so that thing kind of thing' and unclear reference. Revise to 'and that kind of tradition fostered my love of stories' to make the sentence coherent and concise. Suggestion: remove repetitions and use a clear noun phrase to refer back to 'tradition'.

× I prefer read books on on mobile apps, but before I had a baby I used to prefer reading books on paper.

✓ I prefer reading books on mobile apps, but before I had a baby I used to prefer reading books on paper.

The verb following 'prefer' should be in the -ing form when talking about general preference (prefer reading). Also removed the duplicated 'on'. Suggestion: use 'prefer + -ing' for activities generally preferred.

× But reading a book as a app it can be more practical and convenient.

✓ But reading a book as an app can be more practical and convenient.

The original has an incorrect article 'a app' (should be 'an app') and an unnecessary pronoun 'it' making the structure awkward. Combine the clause into 'reading a book as an app can be...'. Suggestion: use 'an' before vowel sounds and avoid redundant subjects.

× When I have to take care of my baby, I need to be more careful because my baby need my full attention.

✓ When I have to take care of my baby, I need to be more careful because my baby needs my full attention.

The verb must agree with the third-person singular subject 'my baby', so use 'needs' not 'need'. Suggestion: for he/she/it or singular nouns add -s in present simple.

× So if I read books during my baby, I usually do not focus more on my book as well.

✓ So if I read while caring for my baby, I usually cannot focus on my book.

The phrase 'during my baby' is ungrammatical; use 'while caring for my baby' or 'while with my baby'. 'Do not focus more on my book as well' is awkward and unclear; 'cannot focus on my book' is concise and correct. Suggestion: use clear time/condition clauses and simple verbs for the intended meaning.

× To be honest, I prefer scanning tolerated because I usually read some fantasy or romance novels and I usually curious about that next plot, so I tend to read faster than I understand the content.

✓ To be honest, I prefer scanning because I usually read fantasy or romance novels and I am curious about the next plot, so I tend to read faster than I understand the content.

Several errors: 'prefer scanning tolerated' is incorrect—use 'prefer scanning'. 'I usually curious' needs the verb 'am' (linking verb) for an adjective: 'I am curious'. Also 'that next plot' is unnatural; 'the next plot' or 'what happens next' is better. Suggestion: use 'prefer + -ing', include appropriate linking verbs for adjectives, and choose natural articles/pronouns.