Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition of “so”, fix article and word choice errors, and give one brief specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading because it helps me relax after a hectic day. For example, I often read historical fiction that immerses me in different eras, which lets me forget daily stresses and learn new perspectives.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, avoid filler words and repetition, correct grammar (e.g., 'I'm old-fashioned' not 'I am old'), and give one specific reason. Keep within 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer reading physical books because I enjoy the tactile experience. For instance, I love the smell of paper and the action of turning pages, which makes reading feel more immersive and satisfying.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence that answers both parts, correct grammar and word choice (e.g., 'meticulously', 'when every detail matters', 'skimming headlines', 'to get a gist'), and use a linking word to contrast the situations. Give one concise example for each case.

例: I read meticulously when the material is important, such as academic papers or legal documents, because every detail matters. In contrast, I skim news headlines or social media to get the gist when I'm short on time.

提案: Answer directly, correct grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'it depends on my objective'), avoid hesitations, and use linking words to structure the response. Give a specific context for each method and a brief example.

例: It depends on my objective: if I'm conducting in-depth research, I prefer detailed reading to understand and evaluate sources. However, when I'm short on time, I scan articles to find key facts or statistics quickly.

× So reading is a fantastic way to unwind after the hectic day.

✓ Reading is a fantastic way to unwind after a hectic day.

The sentence contains an unnecessary leading filler 'So' and uses the definite article 'the' incorrectly before 'hectic day'. Use no filler and the correct article 'a' for general reference; also remove 'So' to improve formality and clarity.

× So not just about acquiring knowledge but also escaping into different World War through stories.

✓ It is not just about acquiring knowledge but also about escaping into different worlds through stories.

Missing subject and auxiliary cause sentence fragment; 'So' is an unnecessary filler. 'World War' is incorrect; context requires plural 'worlds'. Add 'It is' and 'about' before the second clause to form a parallel structure.

× So I am old so I am a old school 1 so I refer physical books so something about tactical experience.

✓ I am old-fashioned, so I prefer physical books because of the tactile experience.

The original has multiple fillers 'So', incorrect phrase 'a old school 1', wrong verb 'refer' instead of 'prefer', and 'tactical' should be 'tactile'. Rework into a concise sentence: 'I am old-fashioned, so I prefer physical books because of the tactile experience.'

× So I lo I love the smell of the papers and act of the flipping them.

✓ I love the smell of paper and the act of flipping through them.

Remove filler 'So I lo I'. Use uncountable 'paper' not 'the papers'. 'Act of the flipping them' is ungrammatical; use 'the act of flipping through them' for correct verb-object order and preposition.

× So that's the thing you just can't replace replicate it.

✓ That's something you just can't replicate.

Redundant words 'replace replicate it' and filler 'So'. Use one verb 'replicate' and remove the pronoun 'it' to make a natural, concise sentence.

× So I read meticulous, meticulously, meticulously.

✓ I read meticulously.

Remove filler 'So' and repeated adverb; use correct adverb form 'meticulously' only once. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'I read' is present tense appropriate for habitual action.

× So when I'm studying academic materials or legal documents, so where every detail matter.

✓ When I'm studying academic materials or legal documents, every detail matters.

Remove fillers 'So' and fix clause structure: 'where every detail matter' is incorrect. Use main clause with subject 'every detail' and verb 'matters' (singular), ensuring subject-verb agreement.

× So when I just skimming through news headlight or social media feed, so I tend to read casually to get a gifts.

✓ When I'm just skimming through news headlines or my social media feed, I tend to read casually to get the gist.

Multiple issues: remove 'So' fillers; use present continuous 'I'm skimming'; 'news headlight' should be 'news headlines'; include possessive 'my' for 'social media feed'; 'gifts' is wrong word — 'gist' (main idea) is correct.

× So is this spend on my objective?

✓ It depends on my objective.

The original is ungrammatical. Replace with the standard expression 'It depends on my objective' to convey conditional meaning.

× So if I'm doing insert research I will take my time with detailed reading.

✓ If I'm doing research, I will take my time with detailed reading.

Remove filler 'So' and the stray word 'insert'. Ensure comma after the conditional clause and use simple noun 'research'.

× So when I'm short of time. So scanning for his information is far more efficient.

✓ When I'm short of time, scanning for information is far more efficient.

Original has sentence fragment 'So when I'm short of time.' and incorrect pronoun 'his' instead of no pronoun. Combine into one sentence, remove 'So', and use 'information' without a possessive pronoun.