Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and complete your answer. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like “Umm,” and finish thoughts. Add one specific recent example and a brief reason to make it natural and informative.

例: Yes, I love reading because it helps me relax after a busy day. For example, I recently finished a novel called The Shadow of the Wind, which I enjoyed for its atmospheric storytelling and memorable characters. Because of books like that, I often read before bed to unwind.

提案: Correct grammar and avoid repetition. Use one clear reason first, then add a supporting example with a linking word (for example, therefore). Keep it under five sentences and use accurate phrasing (e.g., “paper books” or “printed books”).

例: I prefer printed books because they help me concentrate better. For example, when I read from a real book I don't get notifications from my phone, so I can focus for longer. Therefore, I usually choose paper books for novels and academic reading.

提案: Good structure and clarity. To improve further, add a brief personal example and a linking phrase to show contrast (e.g., “in contrast” or “whereas”). Avoid overlong clauses—split into two sentences if needed.

例: I need to read carefully when the information is important, such as legal contracts or medical instructions, because misreading them could cause serious problems. In contrast, I don't read social media posts so carefully, since they are usually informal and less consequential.

提案: Strong, well-organized answer with clear examples and linking words. To push to a perfect score, make the topic sentence slightly more direct and reduce minor redundancy (e.g., “it depends” can be followed immediately by conditions).

例: It depends on my purpose: if I need specific facts or figures, I scan the text to find them quickly. However, for complex materials like academic articles, I read in detail so I can fully understand the arguments and subtleties.

× I usually prefer reading a paper because physical books help me more concentrate.

✓ I usually prefer reading a paper because physical books help me concentrate more.

Word order and article: 'a paper' is unnatural when referring to books; use 'paper' as medium or 'printed books'. The main issue flagged is article errors: better to say 'reading on paper' or 'reading printed books'. Also 'help me more concentrate' is incorrect adverb placement — place 'more' after the verb or use 'concentrate more'. Suggestion: say 'I usually prefer reading printed books because they help me concentrate more.'

× When I'm reading a screen, I easily get distracted from social media.

✓ When I'm reading on a screen, I easily get distracted by social media.

Missing preposition 'on' to indicate medium and incorrect preposition 'from' with 'distracted'. The primary issue is article/preposition usage: use 'on a screen' or 'on screen' and 'distracted by' to indicate the source of distraction. Suggestion: 'When I'm reading on a screen, I easily get distracted by social media.'

× Apart from that, I paper books help me.

✓ Apart from that, paper books help me.

Extra word 'I' breaks sentence structure. This is a sentence structure error: subject and verb order is wrong because 'I' is unnecessary. Also 'paper books' could be 'printed books' or 'books on paper'. Suggestion: 'Apart from that, paper books help me.'

× Umm I recently read.

✓ Umm, I recently read a book.

The original sentence is incomplete — it lacks an object, so it's a sentence structure error. 'Read' is transitive here and needs an object such as 'a book' or the title. Suggestion: complete the sentence with what was read, for example 'I recently read a novel.'