Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 답변 구조도 명확한 토픽 문장+지원 문장 형태로 다듬을 필요가 있습니다. 구체적으로는 (1) 주제 문장으로 간단히 답하고, (2) 이유를 하나 또는 두 개의 명확한 문장으로 제시하며, (3) 연결어(so, because, which 등)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어주세요. 또한 ‘happy story’, ‘sad story’ 대신 ‘uplifting stories’나 ‘sad stories’ 같은 자연스러운 표현을 사용하고, 동사 시제와 조사를 바로잡으세요.

例: I enjoy reading, especially uplifting stories. I prefer them because sad stories tend to make me feel down, while uplifting stories boost my mood and energy. For example, a feel-good novel can lift my spirits after a long day.

提案: 문장이 반복적이고 어색한 표현이 많습니다. 우선 간단한 토픽 문장으로 선호를 밝히고, 이유는 1–2개의 명확한 문장으로 정리하세요. ‘draw a line’ 대신 ‘underline’이나 ‘annotate’ 같은 정확한 단어를 쓰고, 시제를 일관되게 유지하세요. 또한 불필요한 중복 표현을 제거하세요.

例: I prefer reading on paper because I can underline and annotate important parts. For example, when I read research papers I print them out so I can highlight key points and write notes in the margins.

提案: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 불완전합니다. 질문에 직접 답하는 토픽 문장(예: ‘I need to read carefully when…’)을 먼저 제시하고, 이유와 구체적인 예시를 덧붙이세요. ‘line draw’ 대신 ‘underline’이나 ‘take notes’로 바꾸고, 문법적으로 올바른 문장을 사용하세요.

例: I need to read carefully when I'm studying my semiconductor research because the material is complex and technical. Therefore, I usually underline important sentences and take detailed notes to fully understand the concepts.

提案: 의도가 분명치 않고 문법적으로 어색합니다. 질문에는 선호를 직접적으로 말하고 이유를 명확하게 설명하세요. ‘scanning’이나 ‘detailed reading’의 정의를 간단히 포함하면 더 명확합니다. 또한 ‘because my time is good’ 같은 표현 대신 ‘because I often have limited time’와 같이 자연스럽게 표현하세요.

例: I prefer scanning when I need information quickly because it helps me find key points faster. However, if the material is important or difficult, I switch to detailed reading to fully understand it.

× Yes, I like reading especially that category is the story happy story because the sad story is might feel more down but happy story it can be expressed my happy sound and getting the higher energy.

✓ Yes, I like reading, especially happy stories, because sad stories can make me feel down, but happy stories let me express joy and give me more energy.

The sentence has multiple issues: incorrect conjunctions and sentence structure create run-on sentences. Use commas and conjunctions to connect clauses properly, and reorder phrases for clarity. Replace 'that category is the story happy story' with 'especially happy stories'; change 'is might feel more down' to 'can make me feel down'; 'it can be expressed my happy sound and getting the higher energy' revised to 'let me express joy and give me more energy.' Use parallel structure for contrast ('sad stories... but happy stories...').

× I like to read on the paper because I like to draw a line.

✓ I like to read on paper because I like to draw lines.

Use of the definite article 'the' is incorrect before 'paper' when referring to reading in general. Also use plural 'lines' for general habit. Remove unnecessary article and pluralize for habitual action.

× Especially when I was reading about my research I always printed on it and can be more draw a line and and writing that reason why I like draw on the line so I liked it.

✓ Especially when I read material for my research, I always print it so I can draw lines and write notes; that's why I like to draw on the paper.

Tense and verb forms are mixed and incorrect. Use simple past 'read' for the time clause or present simple 'when I read' for habitual action. 'Printed on it' is awkward; use 'print it.' 'Can be more draw a line and and writing' should be 'so I can draw lines and write notes.' Maintain parallel verbs and correct infinitive usage ('to draw').

× I read carefully about my research, reading on it because my semiconductor research is very complex and hard to understand.

✓ I read my research materials carefully because my semiconductor research is very complex and hard to understand.

Redundant and awkward phrasing 'reading on it' should be removed. Use 'read my research materials carefully' for clarity and correct present simple tense for habitual action.

× It helps to the line draw on the line and can and writing about their reason.

✓ It helps me draw lines and write notes about my reasons.

Incorrect prepositions and pronouns: 'to the line draw on the line' is ungrammatical. Use 'helps me draw lines' and 'write notes about my reasons.' Ensure correct object pronoun and preposition usage.

× I prepared on scanning because faster writing is more important, because my time is good.

✓ I prefer scanning because writing faster is more important; I am short on time.

Tense and word choice are incorrect: 'prepared on scanning' should be 'prefer scanning.' 'Faster writing is more important' awkward—use 'writing faster is more important.' 'Because my time is good' is unnatural; replace with 'I am short on time' to convey time constraints.