Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be natural and accurate: use correct verbs and articles, avoid repetition, and keep within 3–4 concise sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (what kinds of books, when and where, and why). Use linking words like “for example” or “because” correctly.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially business books. For example, on weekends I often go to a café to read books about finance, management and leadership, because they give me new ideas for work.

提案: Improve grammar and fluency: replace incorrect verbs (“letting”) with “reading” or “to read,” remove hesitations, and give one clear reason plus an example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like “because” or “so”.

例: I prefer reading on a screen because I own a Kindle. It is very convenient on business trips since I can carry many books without extra weight.

提案: Focus on clear structure and correct vocabulary: begin with a topic sentence answering the question, then contrast two situations using linking words like “in contrast” or “on the other hand.” Correct verbs (read, rather than lead) and word order are essential. Provide one specific example of a business document and one example of casual reading.

例: I need to read carefully in business situations, for example when I review contracts or financial reports, because accuracy is important. On the other hand, I read more casually at home, such as novels or blogs, when I am relaxing.

提案: Eliminate repetition and improve coherence: give a concise topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with linking words like “because” and “for example.” Avoid vague words like “books”—specify documents or reports when referring to work contexts.

例: I prefer scanning because it saves time and helps me grasp the main ideas quickly. For example, when I review business reports, I scan headings and summaries to decide which sections need detailed reading.

× Yes, I like letting various kind of books.

✓ Yes, I like reading various kinds of books.

The student used 'letting' incorrectly instead of the verb 'reading' and 'various kind' is incorrect. Use the gerund 'reading' for the activity and pluralize 'kind' to 'kinds' after 'various'. Also word order: 'various kinds of books' is natural. Suggestion: Use 'reading various kinds of books' or 'reading a variety of books.'

× For example, on weekends I often go to Cafe to read some business related books including finance and management, leadership.

✓ For example, on weekends I often go to a cafe to read some business-related books, including finance, management, and leadership.

The student omitted the indefinite article 'a' before 'cafe' and missed hyphenation for the compound adjective 'business-related'. Also list items need commas and 'and' before the last item. Use lowercase 'cafe' and include 'a' for a countable noun. Suggestion: 'go to a cafe' and use hyphen in 'business-related' and separate list items with commas.

× These books always give me new ideas.

✓ These books always give me new ideas.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× I prefer letting books on the screen.

✓ I prefer reading books on a screen.

Again 'letting' is incorrect; use 'reading'. Also use 'a screen' or 'screens' depending on context; 'on a screen' is natural. Suggestion: 'I prefer reading books on a screen' or 'I prefer reading on a screen.'

× I have my own Kindle and especially when I go to, uh, go on a business trip, letting books on Kindle is very convenient and, uh, easy to.

✓ I have my own Kindle, and especially when I go on a business trip, reading books on my Kindle is very convenient and easy.

Problems: unnecessary comma after 'go to'; 'go on a business trip' is correct; 'letting' should be 'reading'; reference to device should be possessive 'my Kindle'; 'easy to' is incomplete — use 'easy' alone. Also remove filler words. Suggestion: 'reading books on my Kindle is very convenient and easy when I travel for business.'

× In a business occasion, I use usually lead books or documents carefully, break carefully because I have to understand the content clearly.

✓ On business occasions, I usually read books or documents carefully and take notes because I have to understand the content clearly.

Multiple errors: 'In a business occasion' should be 'On business occasions' or 'In business situations'; adverb placement 'usually' goes before main verb; 'lead' is incorrect form — should be 'read'; 'break carefully' is unclear; likely intended 'take notes' or 'read carefully'. Use 'and' to join actions. Suggestion: 'I usually read documents carefully and take notes in business situations.'

× On the other hand, when I uh on in a private case, I would lead more casually.

✓ On the other hand, in private situations I read more casually.

Errors: 'when I uh on in a private case' is ungrammatical — use 'in private situations' or 'in personal situations'; 'lead' should be 'read'; 'would' is unnecessary — use present 'read' to express habit. Suggestion: 'In private situations, I read more casually.'

× I prefer scanning because it can save time and and also I can understand the overview of the books.

✓ I prefer scanning because it saves time and also lets me understand the overview of the book.

Issues: double 'and and'; tense consistency: 'saves' is simple present for habitual action; 'understand the overview of the books' is awkward — 'overview of the book' or 'an overview' is smoother; 'lets me' is more natural than 'I can'. Suggestion: 'Scanning saves time and helps me get an overview of the book.'

× And especially in business occasion, it is very efficient and effective.

✓ And especially in business occasions, it is very efficient and effective.

Use plural 'business occasions' or 'in business situations'. 'In business occasion' is ungrammatical. Keep consistent article usage. Suggestion: 'Especially in business situations, it is very efficient and effective.'