Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 전체적으로 의사 전달은 되지만 문법 오류와 중복 표현, 문장의 구조가 불안정합니다. 첫 문장에서 직접적으로 질문에 답하고, 그 이유와 구체적 예(애니메이션 책이 왜 재미있는지)를 하나 또는 두 문장으로 덧붙이세요. 연결어(However, because, so 등)를 사용해 문장 흐름을 명확히 하고, 불필요한 반복을 줄이세요. 예: “I don't really enjoy reading in general because I prefer watching videos, but I like illustrated/animated books because the pictures make the stories more engaging.”

例: I don't really enjoy reading in general because I prefer watching videos, but I do like animated or illustrated books because the pictures make the stories more engaging and easier to follow.

提案: 의견은 분명하지만 문법과 표현이 어색합니다. 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 이유를 논리적으로 제시하세요(예: 편리성, 휴대성, 기능). 불필요한 음성 표시(uh)와 모호한 표현(heavy weights)을 정확한 단어로 바꾸세요. 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용하여 원인과 결과를 명확히 하세요.

例: I prefer reading on a screen because it is more convenient and lightweight. For example, I only need to carry an iPad instead of several heavy books, and I can adjust the font size and brightness to read comfortably.

提案: 의미 전달이 흐릿하고 문장이 문법적으로 잘못되어 있습니다. 먼저 두 가지 상황을 명확히 구분해 직접 답하세요(예: 과제나 시험 대비할 때 vs 가벼운 뉴스나 소셜 미디어). 각 상황에 대한 이유와 구체적 예를 하나씩 제시하세요. 'hardly'와 같은 단어를 잘못 사용하지 않도록 주의하세요.

例: I concentrate carefully when I read academic essays or homework because I need to understand details and avoid mistakes. On the other hand, I don't read carefully when I browse short news updates or social media, since those are quick summaries and I just scan them.

提案: 답변은 일관성이 있지만 반복과 어색한 표현이 많습니다. 먼저 선호를 분명히 밝히고 이유를 간결하게 설명하세요. 'scanning'과 'detailed reading'의 차이를 예로 들어 구체화하면 좋습니다. 불필요한 반복과 음성 표시를 제거하고 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

例: I prefer scanning for most everyday texts because it saves time and helps me find key information quickly. However, I use detailed reading for important documents like research articles or exam materials, since those require deep understanding and attention to detail.

× Actually I don't like reading also I think I my favorite hobby is watching videos then reading something.

✓ Actually I don't like reading. Also I think my favorite hobby is watching videos rather than reading.

Pronoun and word order errors: 'I my favorite' is incorrect; need 'my favorite'. 'Then' is wrong contrast word; use 'rather than'. Split into two sentences for clarity. Ensure pronouns precede nouns correctly and use appropriate contrastive conjunctions.

× But I think animation book is reading so funny so I more prefer to read animation books.

✓ But I think animated books are so fun, so I prefer to read animation books more.

Word form and adjective/adverb order: 'animation book' should be 'animated books' or 'animation books' with plural. 'is reading so funny' is incorrect structure; use 'are so fun'. Place 'more' after the verb phrase: 'prefer to read ... more.'

× Honestly, I prefer to read something with a screen because read on paper always need.

✓ Honestly, I prefer to read on a screen because reading on paper always requires more effort.

Verb form and tense: 'read on paper always need' lacks subject and correct verb form. Use the gerund 'reading' as subject and correct verb 'requires' for present simple. Add quantifier 'more effort' to clarify meaning.

× I need to uh, bring my heavy weights in my backpacks.

✓ I need to bring my heavy things in my backpack.

Preposition and noun choice: 'in my backpacks' should be singular 'in my backpack' if referring to one bag. 'Heavy weights' is awkward; use 'heavy things' or 'heavy items'. Avoid filler 'uh'.

× So I prefer more on a screen because I need only iPad in my bag.

✓ So I prefer reading on a screen because I only need an iPad in my bag.

Word order and article use: 'prefer more on a screen' is awkward; use 'prefer reading on a screen'. Include indefinite article 'an' before 'iPad'. Place 'only' before the object it modifies: 'only need an iPad'.

× I I personally more concentrate when I read something on my campus essay or some homework.

✓ I personally concentrate more when I read campus essays or do homework.

Sentence structure and word choice: Remove duplicate 'I'. Use 'concentrate more' word order. 'Read something on my campus essay' is incorrect; use 'read campus essays' or 'read essays for campus'. Use 'do homework' rather than 'read homework'.

× For example, I just not reading uh, hardly when I watch some application news.

✓ For example, I usually don't read much when I watch news on apps.

Tense and adverb placement: 'I just not reading' is ungrammatical; use 'I usually don't read much'. 'Application news' is better expressed as 'news on apps'. Place adverbs properly: 'usually' before the main verb.

× However, if I need to read something hardly, it's on it.

✓ However, if I need to read something carefully, it is usually for that purpose.

Word choice and idiom: 'read something hardly' is incorrect; use 'read something carefully'. 'It's on it' is unclear; clarify meaning such as 'it is usually for that purpose' or 'it is for that reason'.

× Honestly, if I don't need to concentrate something reading papers, I definitely prefer just scanning because that is really easy.

✓ Honestly, if I don't need to concentrate when reading papers, I definitely prefer just scanning because it is much easier.

Grammar and word order: 'concentrate something reading papers' is incorrect; use 'concentrate when reading papers'. Replace 'that is really easy' with 'it is much easier' for clarity and comparison.

× However, uh, detailed reading require really higher concentration, so I think scanning is more easy to read something.

✓ However, detailed reading requires a much higher level of concentration, so I think scanning makes reading easier.

Verb agreement and gerund usage: 'detailed reading require' needs third person singular 'requires'. Use 'a much higher level of concentration' for natural phrasing. 'Scanning is more easy to read something' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'scanning makes reading easier'.