Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答切题，也提到了健身和听音乐，但有几处表达不自然或语法错误：“doing fitness”建议改为“working out”，“one of the way”应为“one of the ways”，“enjoy the time and the gym”意思不清。建议先直接说明爱好，再具体说和朋友健身的频率或听什么音乐，控制在三句话左右。

例: Yes, I enjoy working out and listening to music. Working out at the gym with my friends is a great way to relax, and I usually listen to music on my way there.

提案: 你回答了童年爱好，但重复较多，且有明显的语法问题：“I prefer to listening”应改为“I preferred listening”或“I liked listening”，“make my homework more efficiently”应改为“help me do my homework more efficiently”。注意谈过去时要保持一致，并说明听音乐如何帮助你学习。

例: When I was a child, I loved listening to music. I often played some songs while doing my homework because they helped me feel relaxed and concentrate better.

提案: 回答方向正确，但“I told you”不适合在考试中使用；“I listened music”缺少介词，应为“listened to music”；“The first song I listened is”时态也不自然。建议清楚说明这个爱好从什么时候开始、现在是否仍然喜欢，并补充一个具体细节，例如喜欢的歌手或歌曲。

例: Yes, I’ve enjoyed listening to music since primary school, and it’s still one of my favourite hobbies. I remember being a big fan of Justin Bieber when I was younger, and I still listen to his songs sometimes.

提案: 你表达了自己和父母爱好不同，但“helpless”不能表达“没有用”，可用“a waste of time”或“not useful”；“they think that maybe waste my time”应改为“they think it might waste my time”。建议删去重复和口语填充词，并具体说明父母喜欢什么，或解释你如何看待他们的想法。

例: No, we have different hobbies. I enjoy listening to music, while my parents prefer gardening and watching the news. They sometimes think music takes up too much of my time, but I find it relaxing.

× That is one of the way to relax myself.

✓ That is one of the ways to relax myself.

“one of the”后面要接可数名词复数，因此“way”应改为“ways”。

× When I was studying at school, I prefer to, I prefer to listening.

✓ When I was studying at school, I preferred to listen to music.

句子描述的是小时候在学校时的情况，应用过去时。“prefer”应改为“preferred”。

× When I was studying at school, I prefer to, I prefer to listening.

✓ When I was studying at school, I preferred to listen to music.

“prefer to do something”中的“to”是不定式标记，后面接动词原形，因此应说“prefer to listen”，不能说“prefer to listening”。

× And it can make my homework more efficiently.

✓ And it can help me do my homework more efficiently.

原句中“make my homework more efficiently”的结构不完整，且“homework”不能直接表示被更有效率地完成。可以用“help someone do something”的结构表达“帮助某人更有效地做某事”。

× I have a hobby from my childhood, like listening to music.

✓ I've had a hobby since childhood, like listening to music.

“从童年一直持续到现在”应使用现在完成时“have had”，而不是一般现在时“have”。

× I have a hobby from my childhood, like listening to music.

✓ I've had a hobby since childhood, like listening to music.

表示某种状态从过去持续到现在时，应使用“since”表示起点；“from”通常需要与“to”搭配表示起止范围。

× I listened music from my primary school.

✓ I've listened to music since primary school.

听音乐从小学开始并持续到现在，应使用现在完成时“have listened”。

× I listened music from my primary school.

✓ I've listened to music since primary school.

“listen”后面需要介词“to”，所以应说“listen to music”。表示从小学开始持续至今，应使用“since”，而不是“from”。

× The first song I listened is Justin Bieber's.

✓ The first song I listened to was by Justin Bieber.

“listen”后面需要加介词“to”，构成“listen to a song”。

× The first song I listened is Justin Bieber's.

✓ The first song I listened to was by Justin Bieber.

“我听过的第一首歌”指过去发生的事情，因此主句中的“is”应改为过去式“was”。

× No, I love music, but my parents didn't support me because they think that is helpless, you know?

✓ No, I love music, but my parents don't support me because they think that it is helpless, you know?

这里描述父母目前的态度，应用一般现在时“don't support”，而不是过去时“didn't support”。

× No, I love music, but my parents didn't support me because they think that is helpless, you know?

✓ No, I love music, but my parents don't support me because they think that it is helpless, you know?

“they think that is helpless”中的宾语从句缺少主语。应补上代词“it”，指代音乐或这个爱好。

× And they think that maybe waste my time.

✓ And they think that it may waste my time.

“maybe”是副词，不能直接放在主语后充当谓语。表达“可能浪费我的时间”时，可用情态动词“may”加动词原形“waste”。

× And they think that maybe waste my time.

✓ And they think that it may waste my time.

原句的从句缺少主语。应补上“it”作为主语，并使用完整的“主语 + 谓语”结构。