Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct, well organized, and appropriately detailed. However, “favorite topic” is not the right expression because Muay Thai is a hobby or activity, not a topic. Replace it with “favorite hobby” or simply say “I enjoy it because...”. You could also use a more natural phrase such as “build my stamina” instead of “improve my stamina.”

例: I have been training in Muay Thai for several years, and it is my favorite hobby. I enjoy it because it combines martial arts discipline with a great workout. Training three times a week has helped me build my stamina and manage stress.

提案: You give a clear answer and provide a specific example, but there are several grammar problems. Since you are talking about the past, change “it's let me” to “it allowed me” or “it let me.” Also, use “draw them” instead of “draw it” because “flowers” is plural. The phrase “quickly take a pen” is understandable, but “pick up a pen and draw them” sounds more natural.

例: When I was a child, I loved drawing because it allowed me to recreate things I saw. For example, whenever I came across beautiful flowers, I would pick up a pen and draw them on paper. This made me feel calm and proud of my work.

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes an example, but the main verb and several noun forms need correction. Say “I really loved collecting stickers,” not “I really love to collaborate stickers.” Use “car stickers,” not “cars stickers,” and replace “put it” with “put them” because “stickers” is plural. Keep the tense consistently in the past and use a linking phrase such as “For example.”

例: Yes, I have had a hobby of collecting stickers since childhood. I especially loved collecting car stickers and putting them in my notebooks. For example, whenever I found a new design, I would add it to my collection, which always made me happy.

提案: Your response answers the question directly and gives a clear contrast. However, correct “my parents enjoying” to “my parents enjoy,” and write “whereas” as one word. Adding a comma after “Well, actually” and using “my parents enjoy planning...” will make the answer more natural. You could also explain briefly why you prefer hiking to make the comparison more specific.

例: Well, actually, I do not share the same hobbies as my family because we have different personalities and interests. For example, my parents enjoy planning and organizing social events, whereas I prefer outdoor activities such as hiking. I like hiking because it helps me relax and enjoy nature.

× I remember that when I was a child, I loved to draw because it's let me recreate anything I saw.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, I loved to draw because it let me recreate anything I saw.

The sentence describes a hobby in the past, so the past-tense form let should be used. The contraction it's means it is or it has and is not appropriate here.

× For example, whenever I saw beautiful flowers, I would quickly take a pen and draw it on paper, which made me feel calm and proud of my work.

✓ For example, whenever I saw beautiful flowers, I would quickly take a pen and draw them on paper, which made me feel calm and proud of my work.

Flowers is plural, so it must be replaced with the plural object pronoun them. Use it for one singular object and them for more than one object.

× Well, I remember when I was a child, I really love to collaborate stickers.

✓ Well, I remember when I was a child, I really loved collecting stickers.

Because the sentence refers to a childhood hobby, the past-tense form loved is needed instead of love. Collecting is the correct verb form after loved in this sentence. Collaborate means to work together with someone and cannot be used with stickers.

× For example, I always choose some cars stickers and put it into my books.

✓ For example, I always chose some car stickers and put them into my books.

The sentence describes a past childhood habit, so chose is the past-tense form of choose. Car is used as a singular noun modifier in car stickers.

× For example, I always choose some cars stickers and put it into my books.

✓ For example, I always chose some car stickers and put them into my books.

Stickers is plural, so the correct object pronoun is them, not it. Use them when referring to multiple objects.

× For example, my parents enjoying planning and organizing social events where as I prefer outdoor activities like hiking.

✓ For example, my parents enjoy planning and organizing social events, whereas I prefer outdoor activities like hiking.

The subject my parents is plural, so the present-tense verb should be enjoy, not enjoying. Enjoying cannot function as the main verb without an auxiliary verb such as are.

× For example, my parents enjoying planning and organizing social events where as I prefer outdoor activities like hiking.

✓ For example, my parents enjoy planning and organizing social events, whereas I prefer outdoor activities like hiking.

Whereas is a conjunction meaning in contrast, and it is written as one word. A comma before whereas helps separate the two contrasting clauses.