Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 最初に「Yes, I do.」と直接答え、「playing video games」のように冠詞を自然に使いましょう。「with my friends and family」のように不要な重複を避け、「which makes me very enjoyable and happy」は不自然なので、「I really enjoy it」や「It makes me feel happy」に置き換えてください。また、具体的なゲームの種類や、なぜ好きなのかを1文追加すると、内容がより明確になります。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy playing video games, especially action games, in my free time. I usually play them online with my friends and family, so it is a fun way for us to relax and spend time together.

提案: 過去の質問なので、「Yes, I did.」と答え、現在形の「I have」ではなく過去形を使いましょう。「I have any hobbies」は意味が不自然なため、「I enjoyed playing sports」と表現してください。「through these playings」も不自然なので、「Playing sports with my friends was enjoyable because...」のように言い換え、具体的なスポーツや得られた結果を加えるとよいです。

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I enjoyed playing football with my friends after school. It was a lot of fun, and it also helped me stay active and develop teamwork skills.

提案: 「I guess I do」は使えますが、より明確に「Yes, I do.」と答えるとよいでしょう。「I had liked」はこの文脈では不適切なので、「I have enjoyed playing video games since I was a child」と現在完了形を使ってください。さらに、現在も続けている理由や、子どもの頃との違いを説明すると、回答に具体性が出ます。

例: Yes, I do. I have enjoyed playing video games since I was a child. I used to play simple games on my own, but now I usually play online action games with my friends.

提案: 「No, I don't.」という直接的な答えはよいですが、「My family members all my family members」の重複をなくし、「All my family members have different hobbies from mine」と正しく表現してください。また、家族の趣味が違うことは通常「anxious」ではなく、「it is not a problem」や「we respect each other's interests」と説明するほうが自然です。家族の具体的な趣味を1つか2つ挙げると、内容がより充実します。

例: No, we don’t have the same hobbies. I enjoy playing video games, while my parents prefer gardening and watching movies. However, it isn’t a problem because we respect each other’s interests.

× My hobby is playing the video games, such as action games.

✓ My hobby is playing video games, such as action games.

When we talk about video games in general, we do not use the definite article 'the'. Use 'the' only when referring to specific video games that have already been identified.

× I usually play the video games with other people such as my friends and my family which makes me very enjoyable and happy.

✓ I usually play video games with other people, such as my friends and family, which makes me feel very happy and relaxed.

'Enjoyable' describes something that gives pleasure, not a person. To describe your feeling, use 'I feel happy' or 'I feel relaxed'. The verb 'makes' should be followed by 'me feel' before an adjective.

× Yes, I have. I have any hobbies when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did. I had some hobbies when I was a child.

The question asks about your childhood, so use the past tense. 'Have' should become 'had'. The answer to a question beginning with 'Did' should use 'did', not 'have'.

× I have any hobbies when I was a child.

✓ I had some hobbies when I was a child.

Use 'some' in affirmative statements. 'Any' is usually used in questions and negative sentences, such as 'Did you have any hobbies?' or 'I did not have any hobbies.'

× When I was a child, I liked to play sports with other people such as friends through these playings I can feel very enjoyable and happy.

✓ When I was a child, I liked playing sports with my friends, and I felt very happy and relaxed while doing so.

Because the sentence describes childhood, use the past tense 'felt', not the present-tense form 'can feel'. The phrase 'while doing so' clearly refers to playing sports in the past.

× When I was a child, I liked to play sports with other people such as friends through these playings I can feel very enjoyable and happy.

✓ When I was a child, I liked playing sports with my friends, and I felt very happy and relaxed while doing so.

'Enjoyable' describes an activity or experience, not a person. Use feeling adjectives such as 'happy', 'relaxed', or 'enjoyed myself' to describe your emotions.

× I had liked to play video games since childhood.

✓ I have liked playing video games since childhood.

Use the present perfect 'have liked' for an activity that began in the past and continues to the present. The past perfect 'had liked' normally describes an action that happened before another past event.

× I had liked to play video games since childhood.

✓ I have liked playing video games since childhood.

The verb 'like' can be followed by a gerund when discussing an activity in general. 'Like playing video games' is natural here. Using 'playing' also avoids the awkward combination of 'liked to play' in this context.

× I had liked to play video games since childhood.

✓ I have liked playing video games since childhood.

'Video games' refers to games in general, so it does not need the definite article 'the'.

× My family members all my family members has different hobbies and compared with me, but which makes me very anxious.

✓ All my family members have different hobbies from mine, which makes me feel a little anxious.

'Family members' is plural, so the correct verb is 'have', not 'has'. The subject and verb must agree in number.

× My family members all my family members has different hobbies and compared with me, but which makes me very anxious.

✓ All my family members have different hobbies from mine, which makes me feel a little anxious.

Hobbies should be compared with hobbies, not directly with a person. Use 'different hobbies from mine' because 'mine' means 'my hobbies'.

× My family members all my family members has different hobbies and compared with me, but which makes me very anxious.

✓ All my family members have different hobbies from mine, which makes me feel a little anxious.

The original sentence repeats the subject and combines incomplete phrases with 'and', 'but', and 'which'. The corrected version has one clear main clause followed by a relative clause.

× My family members all my family members has different hobbies and compared with me, but which makes me very anxious.

✓ All my family members have different hobbies from mine, which makes me feel a little anxious.

The phrase 'makes me anxious' is grammatically possible, but 'makes me feel a little anxious' is clearer because 'feel' directly expresses your emotional state.