Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cümleniz anlaşılır ama dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi hataları var. Kısa ve doğal bir yanıt verin: yüklemlerde doğru zaman ve yapı (do/playing/to play), gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve hobilerinizi net sıralayın. Bağlaçlarla maddeleyerek açıklama ekleyin (for example, because). Ayrıca cümle sayısını 3–4 ile sınırlayın.

例: Yes, I enjoy doing yoga and drawing. I also attend a playwriting class occasionally. I find yoga helps me relax, and drawing is a creative outlet for my free time.

提案: Cümleniz karışık ve zaman kullanımı hatalı. Geçmişte yapılan eylemler için simple past kullanın (I used to go / I went). Cümleyi daha kısa ve mantıklı parçalara bölün; yer ve sebepler ekleyin ve bağlaçlarla akışı sağlayın (for example, but now).

例: When I was a child, I used to go hiking with my brother and his friends. Sometimes I went with my own friends too, but I don't go hiking as often now because I have less free time.

提案: Yanıtınızda fikirler dağınık ve dolaylı ifade var. Net bir topic sentence ile başlayın (Yes, I have...). "Since childhood" vurgusu için continuous geçmiş yapıları kullanmayın; kısa destekleyici detaylar verin (why, how often). Gereksiz doldurucu seslerden (uh) kaçının ve cümleleri bağlaçlarla bağlayın.

例: Yes, I have enjoyed drawing since I was a child. I still take a drawing course to build my portfolio, and I usually draw in my free time to relax.

提案: Cümleniz akıcı değil ve bazı kelime seçimleri yanlış (ship, causes). Net karşılaştırmalar yapın: aile fertlerinin hobilerini kısa cümlelerle belirtin ve sonra kendi hobinizi karşılaştırın. Gramer ve kelime kullanımına dikkat edin; "I would love to hiking" yerine "I prefer hiking" veya "I like hiking" kullanın.

例: No, our hobbies are different. My father enjoys sailing and exploring new places, and my mother likes going out to dinner with her friends. I, however, prefer hiking because I enjoy nature and exercise.

× Yes, I like to doing yoga and go to play test class and I love the drawing.

✓ Yes, I like doing yoga, going to playtest classes, and I love drawing.

The verb after 'like' should be in the -ing form (gerund), not an infinitive with to; use 'doing' not 'to doing'. Parallel structure: when listing activities, match forms ('doing', 'going', 'loving/drawing'). 'Play test class' is unclear; 'playtest classes' is likely intended (plural). Omit the article before 'drawing' when used in general sense. Suggestion: use gerunds for hobbies and keep items parallel.

× When I was a child I was going to hiking with my brother and his friends and sometimes I was going my friends to hiking and now but not too much.

✓ When I was a child I went hiking with my brother and his friends, and sometimes I went hiking with my friends, but not much now.

Use simple past for habitual past actions ('went'), not 'was going to hiking' which mixes continuous and incorrect preposition. 'Going hiking' is possible but better to use 'went hiking' for past. Preposition: use 'with my friends' not 'my friends to hiking'. Place 'but not much now' at the end for clarity.

× Actually, yes, when I was a child. I love, uh, driving. And now. I'm going to drawing course, uh, because of My Portfolio and my free time. I just sit and drink.

✓ Actually, yes, when I was a child. I loved driving, and now I'm taking a drawing course because of my portfolio and in my free time I just sit and draw.

Match tense: 'when I was a child' should be followed by past 'loved' for the childhood habit. Present continuous 'I'm taking a drawing course' is correct for a current ongoing action; use 'taking' not 'going to drawing course'. 'Because of my portfolio' is okay; use lowercase 'my'. 'I just sit and draw' uses the verb 'draw' not 'drink' which seems incorrect in context.

× No, we don't because my father loves going ship his ship and exploring new uh, causes and my mom just love uh, the take a time with her friends going to uh, dinners, uh, but I would love to hiking.

✓ No, we don't. My father loves sailing his ship and exploring new coasts, and my mom just loves taking time with her friends going to dinners, but I would love to go hiking.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'my mom just loves' not 'love'. 'Going ship his ship' is ungrammatical; use 'sailing his ship'. Likely 'causes' was 'coasts' or 'places' — choose 'coasts' if about the sea. 'Take a time' should be 'taking time'. 'I would love to hiking' should be 'I would love to go hiking' (infinitive after 'would love'). Also split into clearer sentences.