Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant, but you can improve coherence and grammatical accuracy. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid tense inconsistency, and use a linking phrase to expand. Also replace vague phrase “different levels” with a specific description.

例: Yes — I have several hobbies, but recently I’ve become interested in paddle tennis. I play once a week and join open sessions, which has helped me meet new people and play against opponents of varying abilities.

提案: The content is good, but delivery has repetition and sentence fragments. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating phrases, and combine ideas using linking words. Use past tense consistently and give a brief specific detail (what you copied, favorite character).

例: When I was a child, I loved drawing, especially copying anime characters. I kept a sketchpad full of my drawings and remember practicing the eyes and hairstyles of my favorite characters.

提案: Good content and sincerity, but wording and grammar need polishing. Use one clear topic sentence, avoid numeric shorthand (“1 of it”), and connect reasons and examples with linking words. Be more specific about how often and what you create.

例: Yes — one hobby I’ve kept since childhood is drawing and painting. Because art helps me express myself, I still do sketches and watercolour paintings several times a month, often experimenting with landscapes and portraits.

提案: Clear and relevant answer. To improve, condense repetitions and use linking words to contrast or add information. Give a specific example of a shared activity (a recent concert or a drawing you did together).

例: Yes — my sister and I both enjoy drawing; she keeps a sketchpad like me and we often exchange doodles. We also share a love of music and recently went to a small live concert together, which we both really enjoyed.

× I got to meet new people and play with different levels.

✓ I got to meet new people and play with players of different levels.

The phrase 'play with different levels' is ungrammatical because 'levels' cannot be played with; you must specify 'players of different levels' or 'people of different levels'. Change provides correct noun phrase using past participle 'played' not required; this correction preserves original tense and meaning.

× I love. Copying the signs of anime characters.

✓ I love copying the designs of anime characters.

The original has an incorrect sentence break and an incorrect noun 'signs'. Combine into one sentence and replace 'signs' with 'designs' which fits context. This fixes sentence fragment and word choice.

× I used to have a sketchpad where I keep all the drawings when I was a child.

✓ I used to have a sketchpad where I kept all the drawings when I was a child.

Mixing 'used to' (past habit) with present tense 'keep' is inconsistent. Use past tense 'kept' to match 'used to' and the time reference 'when I was a child.'

× Yes I do have hobbies that I have kept since I was a child. 1 of it is drawing and being creative.

✓ Yes, I do have hobbies that I have kept since I was a child. One of them is drawing and being creative.

'1 of it' is incorrect number and pronoun agreement. Use the word 'One' and the plural pronoun 'them' to agree with 'hobbies.' Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× She also likes drawing and she also has her own sketch pad where she doodles things.

✓ She also likes drawing and she has her own sketchpad where she doodles things.

Redundant 'also' is stylistic but not grammar; primary issue is 'sketch pad' which is better as single word 'sketchpad.' Also removing the repeated 'also' improves fluency.