Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答較直接但有語法與連貫性問題，需修正句子結構與標點，並提供更具體細節。建議：1) 使用主題句回答問題；2) 用連接詞連貫細節並避免重複；3) 增加具體例子或頻率說明。練習時可把句子拆成不超過五句，注意時態與語法一致。

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy reading novels, playing basketball and listening to pop music. For example, I play basketball with my friends every weekend, which helps me stay fit and relieves stress after a busy day at school. I also read before bedtime to relax.

提案: 語法與詞彙使用不夠準確（如冠詞、動詞形式與冗餘），句子可更精簡且具體。建議：1) 使用正確的名詞短語（e.g. drawing and painting）；2) 刪除多餘片語並用連接詞連接原因與例子；3) 加入時間或頻率細節。

例: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. I enjoyed drawing and painting because they allowed me to use my imagination and be creative. I also often played football with my friends after school, which was exciting and kept me active.

提案: 答案內容相關但有用詞與表達錯誤（如 'liked the drawings'、'my players'），需改用正確詞彙並簡潔表達。建議：1) 用主題句明確指出愛好持續至今；2) 更正用詞並說明頻率或具體活動；3) 補充一兩個具體例子或結果。

例: Yes, I have enjoyed drawing since I was a child. My parents enrolled me in art classes when I was young, and I still draw in my free time once or twice a week. Drawing relaxes me, and I sometimes give my sketches to friends as presents.

提案: 回答有好的內容但表達不夠自然，存在語法與拼寫錯誤（如 'the house uses get closer'）。建議：1) 用自然的短語描述家庭互動（e.g. bring the family closer）；2) 用連接詞串聯活動與影響；3) 提供具體例子或頻率。

例: Yes, I share several hobbies with my family. For example, we often watch movies and cook meals together. On weekends we sometimes go hiking or play board games, which helps bring us closer as a family.

× I like reading books, playing sports and listening to music. For example, I play basketball with my friends every weekend hobbies help me relax after a busy day at school.

✓ I like reading books, playing sports and listening to music. For example, I play basketball with my friends every weekend; these hobbies help me relax after a busy day at school.

原句将两个独立句子连在一起，导致句子结构混乱（缺少连词或标点）。应在“every weekend”和“hobbies”之间加入分号、连词或重写为两个句子，并将“hobbies”与前文的复数主语呼应，使用“these hobbies”更清晰。建议用分号或句号分隔并使用指示代词以保持衔接。

× I liked the drawing and the painting because it was fun and I could see could use my imagination.

✓ I liked drawing and painting because they were fun and I could use my imagination.

原句中不需要在“drawing”和“painting”前加定冠词“the”，且主语为复数概念（drawing and painting），谓语及代词应与之保持一致，故用复数代词“they”与复数动词“were”。另外句中有多余的“could see”，应删除。建议用不带冠词的动名词形式并保证主谓一致。

× I liked the drawing and the painting because it was fun and I could see could use my imagination.

✓ I liked drawing and painting because they were fun and I could use my imagination.

句中“it was fun”用单数代词“it”指代两个活动不恰当，应改为复数代词“they”。同时存在重复短语“could see could use”，应删去多余部分。建议确认代词指代对象的单复数并删去重复词。

× I also played football with my friends after school, which was exciting.

✓ I also played football with my friends after school, which was exciting.

句子结构本身正确，无需改动。此处保留原句。

× Yes, I have liked the drawings since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I have liked drawing since I was a child.

“the drawings”使用定冠词和复数名词不符合习惯表达。通常说长期喜欢某项活动使用不带冠词的动名词“drawing”。此外，使用现在完成时“have liked”可接受，但更自然的是“have liked”或“have enjoyed”；保留“have liked”时改为“drawing”。

× My players sent me to art classes when I was young and I still draw pictures during my free time.

✓ My parents sent me to art classes when I was young, and I still draw pictures during my free time.

原句“players”显然应为“parents”（父母），这是词汇错误但导致句意不通。若视为语法问题，主谓需一致并用正确名词。建议使用“My parents”并在并列句处加入逗号连接。

× Drawing helps me relax and sometimes I give my drawings to my friends as gifts.

✓ Drawing helps me relax, and sometimes I give my drawings to my friends as gifts.

原句语法正确，但为更好连接两部分，在复合句中建议在并列连词前加逗号以符合书面语标点习惯。

× For example, we all like watching movies and cooking together. On weekends we sometimes go hiking or play board games. It's fun and the house uses get closer.

✓ For example, we all like watching movies and cooking together. On weekends we sometimes go hiking or play board games. It's fun, and the whole family gets closer.

最后一句“the house uses get closer”语序和用词完全错误，应该表达“家庭成员更亲近”。用“the whole family gets closer”更自然且主谓一致。建议将错误片段替换为正确的名词短语并保证主谓一致。