Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep the answer concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (articles, singular/plural, verb forms) and use precise time expressions. Avoid unnecessary repetition (e.g., saying you started in elementary school several times).

例: My favorite hobby is playing badminton. I play regularly with my college badminton club on Mondays at the school court, and I have loved the sport since elementary school because I was on the school team. As a result, badminton has influenced my discipline and fitness, helping me make close friends.

提案: Use correct verb tense and sentence structure to tell a clear sequence: say when it started, what happened (tryout, selection), and the result. Use linking words like 'because', 'so', 'after', and avoid broken or incomplete sentences.

例: Yes. I have played badminton since childhood. After I tried out and was selected for the school team when I was young, I trained every week, so it gradually became one of my favorite hobbies.

提案: Make the timeline clearer and fix grammar: use past simple for past events and explain reasons in full sentences. Use linking phrases (e.g., 'however', 'during', 'because') correctly and avoid fragments. Explain how you resumed the hobby in college with a short reason.

例: Yes. I have played badminton since childhood and was on my school team. However, I stopped playing during junior and senior high school because my teachers thought it would distract me from my studies. I took up badminton again when I entered college and joined the college club.

提案: Be concise and use correct plural forms and prepositions. State the contrast clearly with linking words ('but', 'however'), give a brief reason and end with a positive balancing comment. Avoid repeating 'however'.

例: No. My family prefer hiking for exercise, but I enjoy playing badminton and other ball games because they are more fun for me. Still, this does not cause problems because we sometimes exercise together, even if we choose different activities.

× Among those hobbies, my favorite hobby is to play badminton.

✓ Among those hobbies, my favorite hobby is playing badminton.

Use the present participle (verb + -ing) after 'is' when describing a preference or liking (gerund as noun). 'Is to play' is grammatically possible but sounds less natural for hobbies; 'playing' is idiomatic.

× I always play badminton with my Clap badminton club friends at my college, and we often play at the school court in Monday.

✓ I always play badminton with my Clap badminton club friends at my college, and we often play at the school court on Monday.

Use the preposition 'on' with days of the week. 'In Monday' is incorrect. Also keep 'the school court' if referring to a specific court.

× And I really have a large interest in badminton since I was in elementary school and I was also an school club team member.

✓ And I have been very interested in badminton since I was in elementary school, and I was also a member of the school club team.

'Large interest' is unnatural; use 'very interested' or 'a great interest'. Also 'since' with a past starting point requires present perfect ('have been interested'). 'An school' is incorrect article usage; use 'a school' or better 'a member of the school club team'.

× At that time, so badminton has really played an important part of my life, which changed me a lot.

✓ At that time, badminton really played an important part in my life and changed me a lot.

Use simple past 'played' and 'changed' to describe past events. 'Has really played' (present perfect) is inappropriate when specifying 'at that time'. Remove unnecessary 'so' and combine clauses smoothly.

× Yes, badminton have been my hobby since I was a child.

✓ Yes, badminton has been my hobby since I was a child.

'Badminton' is a singular noun and requires singular verb 'has' in present perfect ('has been'). 'Have' is incorrect with singular subject.

× I was an school team member at that time and because once I have a tryout at the selection of the school team and I was very.

✓ I was a school team member at that time because I once had a tryout for selection to the school team and I was successful.

Use 'a' before consonant sounds ('a school'). For past events, use past tense 'had' for 'have a tryout'. 'Tryout at the selection' is awkward; 'tryout for selection to' is clearer. The fragment 'and I was very.' is incomplete; replace with 'and I was successful.'

× Successfully picked at the team so I started to play badminton every week and grad.

✓ I was successfully picked for the team, so I started to play badminton every week and gradually improved.

Original is a sentence fragment and contains unclear 'grad'. Recast as full sentence with past passive 'was picked for the team' and clarify 'gradually improved' or 'gradually it became a habit'.

× It gradually becomes one of my favorite hobby.

✓ It gradually became one of my favorite hobbies.

Use past tense 'became' to match narrative. 'Favorite hobby' requires plural 'hobbies' after 'one of'.

× Yes, playing badminton is one of my hobby that I acquired since I was a child and I once play.

✓ Yes, playing badminton is one of my hobbies that I have had since I was a child and I once played competitively.

Use plural 'hobbies' after 'one of'. 'Acquired since' requires present perfect 'have had'. 'I once play' should be past 'I once played'; add context like 'played competitively' for clarity.

× I once was a school team member of my school badminton club.

✓ I was once a member of my school's badminton club team.

Use possessive 'my school's' for clarity and natural word order 'a member of the ... club team'.

× However, I could for the badminton awhile when I was in junior high school and Senior High School since teacher believe that playing badminton.

✓ However, I had to stop playing badminton for a while when I was in junior high school and senior high school because my teachers believed that playing badminton would distract me from my academic performance.

Original uses incorrect modal/structure 'could for' and fragments. Use 'had to stop' for being prevented, 'for a while' placement, and 'because' to connect clause. 'Teacher believe' needs plural and past 'teachers believed'. Complete the idea by adding 'would distract me from my academic performance.'

× Will distract me from my academic performance, so they told me not to play it.

✓ They said it would distract me from my academic performance, so they told me not to play.

Sentence fragment 'Will distract...' lacks subject; include 'it' as subject and use past 'would' to match narration. 'Not to play it' is acceptable but 'not to play' is more natural.

× However, I require the hobby on college.

✓ However, I resumed the hobby in college.

'Require the hobby on college' is ungrammatical. Likely meant 'I resumed the hobby in college' meaning restarted. Use 'in college' for time/place and correct verb 'resumed'.

× No, because my family member are more willing to go hiking to serve as an exercise.

✓ No, because my family members are more willing to go hiking as exercise.

Use plural 'family members' to match 'are'. 'To serve as an exercise' is awkward; 'as exercise' is natural.

× However, to me, playing badminton or the ball games are more interesting and more fun in exercising.

✓ However, for me, playing badminton or ball games is more interesting and more fun as exercise.

Use 'for me' not 'to me' in this context. 'Playing ... is' uses singular verb because the gerund phrase 'playing badminton or ball games' is treated as a single activity; alternatively use plural 'are' if treating them separately. 'In exercising' is awkward; 'as exercise' is correct.

× So I would rather choose to go play badminton rather than hiking.

✓ So I would rather play badminton than go hiking.

Avoid redundant 'choose to go play'; use natural structure 'would rather play X than go hiking'. 'Rather than hiking' can be 'than go hiking'.

× However, the differences between me and my family do not have a large influence because we can still go to exercise together, just from the different type.

✓ However, the differences between my family and me do not have a large impact because we can still exercise together, just in different ways.

Use 'my family and me' for correct word order. 'Have a large influence' is okay but 'have a large impact' is more natural. 'Go to exercise' should be 'exercise' and 'different type' should be 'different ways'.