Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correggi la grammatica e la fluidità: evita ripetizioni e usa frasi coerenti e concise. Specificamente: usa l'infinito corretto dopo 'to' (to disconnect), elimina ripetizioni come 'I love I really love', e rendi la sequenza più naturale usando connettivi come 'also' o 'in addition'. Mantieni massimo 4-5 frasi. Aggiungi dettagli specifici (che tipo di libri o serie).

例: I enjoy walking and going to the gym to disconnect from studying. I also like watching movies and TV series, especially crime dramas. In addition, I love reading before bed; I usually read contemporary novels because they help me relax.

提案: Migliora la chiarezza, la grammatica e riduci le esitazioni. Inizia con una frase tematica diretta, poi fornisci dettagli concreti senza interruzioni. Usa il passato corretto (I used to go, I did artistic gymnastics) e usa connettivi come 'and' o 'also'. Evita parole filler come 'uh' e 'umm'.

例: When I was a child I had several hobbies. I used to go to church and play in the park with my friends. I also practised artistic gymnastics for a few years, which I really enjoyed.

提案: Correggi la grammatica (have -> has/have; an hobby -> a hobby) e rendi la risposta più fluida e diretta. Inizia con una chiara affermazione, poi spiega brevemente perché non hai hobby duraturi e fornisci un esempio del passato. Evita esitazioni e ripetizioni.

例: No, my hobbies have changed a lot over the years, so I don't have any that I've kept since childhood. For example, I practised artistic gymnastics as a child and loved it, but later I moved on to other activities like reading and going to the gym.

提案: Migliora l'accuratezza grammaticale e la coesione: usa verbi concordati (my father and my sister love), evita frasi superflue come 'that's something that I'm not good at it' (toglie 'it'). Aggiungi una frase che confronti le tue abitudini con quelle della famiglia usando connettivi come 'however' o 'while'.

例: Not really. My mother is very passionate about going to the gym and I sometimes join her, but I'm not as dedicated. My father and sister enjoy playing tennis, while I prefer other activities because I'm not very good at tennis.

× In my free time I like walking or going to the gym to disconnecting from studying.

✓ In my free time I like walking or going to the gym to disconnect from studying.

The error is using 'to' before a gerund. After 'to' when expressing purpose we use the base verb (to disconnect) or use a gerund without 'to' (disconnecting). Here the intended structure is 'to disconnect from studying' so use the base form 'disconnect'. Suggestion: use 'to' + base verb for purpose or remove 'to' and use the gerund alone (e.g., 'I like walking or going to the gym to disconnect' or 'I like walking or going to the gym, disconnecting from studying').

× And I love I really love reading book before going to bed.

✓ And I really love reading books before going to bed.

'Reading book' is incorrect because 'book' is a countable noun and needs an article or plural. Use plural 'books' for general activities. Also remove the duplicated 'I love'. Suggestion: say 'I really love reading books before going to bed.'

× Maybe where when I was a child, I had a lot of hobby then now, uh, for example, I usually used to go, uh, to the church, to the park, uh, and also, umm, I did uh, artistic gymnastic, umm, I usually.

✓ Maybe when I was a child, I had a lot of hobbies. For example, I used to go to church and to the park, and I did artistic gymnastics.

Multiple issues: 'where when' is redundant, 'a lot of hobby' needs plural 'hobbies', awkward placement of 'then now', and 'artistic gymnastic' should be plural 'artistic gymnastics'. Also remove filler words and restructure into clear sentences. Suggestion: separate into two sentences and use 'used to' for habitual past actions.

× No, I think my hobbies has changed a lot.

✓ No, I think my hobbies have changed a lot.

Subject 'hobbies' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' not 'has'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural subject: 'hobbies have'.

× I don't have an hobby that uh, lasts too much.

✓ I don't have a hobby that lasts very long.

'An' is used before vowel sounds; 'hobby' begins with a consonant sound so use 'a'. 'Lasts too much' is unnatural; use 'lasts very long' or 'lasts long'. Suggestion: 'a hobby that lasts very long.'

× Uh, I'm not this kind of person, but I'd love because when I was child I did the artistic gymnastic and I really loved.

✓ I'm not this kind of person, but I would say that when I was a child I did artistic gymnastics and I really loved it.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and missing pronoun 'it' after 'loved'. 'I'd love' is unclear; likely meant 'I'd say'. Also 'the artistic gymnastic' should be 'artistic gymnastics'. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' and include object 'it' after 'loved'.

× No, my mother loves going to the gym. I also go to the gym, but not as my mother.

✓ No, my mother loves going to the gym. I also go to the gym, but not as much as my mother.

'Not as my mother' is incomplete; correct comparative phrase is 'not as much as my mother'. Suggestion: use 'as much as' for comparing frequency or intensity.

× And my father and my sister loves playing tennis.

✓ And my father and my sister love playing tennis.

Compound subject 'my father and my sister' is plural so verb should be 'love' not 'loves'. Suggestion: match verb to plural subject.

× That's something that I'm not good at it.

✓ That's something that I'm not good at.

Redundant pronoun 'it' at the end duplicates 'that' and makes the sentence ungrammatical. Remove 'it' after a clause with 'that'. Suggestion: end with 'I'm not good at.'