Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện nội dung bằng cách trả lời trực tiếp, sửa ngữ pháp và dùng từ chính xác; tránh câu lủng củng. Cụ thể: 1) Mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, ví dụ “Yes, I do.” 2) Sử dụng từ vựng đúng (e.g. “my favorite type of book is comedy” hoặc “I enjoy comic novels”), chia động từ đúng (e.g. “they help me relax” hoặc “it helps me relax” nếu số ít). 3) Giữ độ dài câu tối đa 4-5 câu; thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ tác giả yêu thích, thời gian đọc) và dùng từ nối như “because” hoặc “so”.

例: Yes, I do. My favorite type of book is comedy because it helps me relax after a long day. I usually read short comic stories or humorous novels by contemporary authors. For example, I often read them before bed for about thirty minutes to unwind.

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp và diễn đạt rõ ý chính; tránh từ sai (ví dụ “promise” không phù hợp). Cụ thể: 1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề “Yes, I did” hoặc “Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed…”. 2) Dùng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ “I loved watching TV” hoặc “I loved cartoons”). 3) Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (kể loại hoạt hình, khi nào xem, với ai). 4) Sử dụng nối từ như “usually” hoặc “often” để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved watching TV, especially cartoons. I often watched cartoons in the afternoon after school with my siblings. My favorite cartoon was Tom and Jerry because it was funny and easy to understand.

提案: Làm rõ hobbie và chỉnh ngữ pháp; tránh phát âm/viết sai từ quan trọng. Cụ thể: 1) Mở đầu trực tiếp “Yes, I do” và nêu rõ sở thích (“hanging out with friends”). 2) Sử dụng thì phù hợp khi nói quá khứ và hiện tại: “I used to… and I still…”. 3) Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động ở công viên và tần suất. 4) Dùng liên từ như “and” hoặc “nowadays” đúng vị trí.

例: Yes, I do. I have enjoyed hanging out with my friends since childhood. When I was young we often went to the park to play games and chat, and I still meet my friends there on weekends. It's a simple way to relax and keep in touch.

提案: Trả lời rõ ràng, sửa ngữ pháp và diễn đạt mạch lạc; cụ thể: 1) Bắt đầu trực tiếp “Yes, we do” hoặc “Not really” tùy ý. 2) Sửa lỗi chia động từ (“my sister has a company” không rõ ý — nếu ý là “company” nghĩa doanh nghiệp thì câu cần giải thích; nhiều khả năng ý muốn nói “company” as companionship: use “keep me company”). 3) Nêu ví dụ cụ thể hoạt động chung (đi đâu, ăn món gì) và tần suất. 4) Dùng từ nối như “especially” đúng vị trí.

例: Yes, we do. My sister and I both enjoy going out and trying different restaurants. We usually eat out once or twice a week and prefer Asian or Italian food. For example, last month we tried a new sushi place and had a great time.

× Yes I have my hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have some hobbies.

The article 'my' is incorrect here; 'some' is appropriate for plural unspecified hobbies. Use 'some' to indicate an indefinite plural quantity. Add a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech pacing.

× Is treating mood my favorite type of book?

✓ My favorite type of book is comedy; it cheers me up.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and misorders elements. Replace 'Is treating mood my favorite type of book?' with a declarative sentence that states the preference. Use 'cheers me up' or 'helps me relax' as natural verb phrases.

× This is comedy.

✓ This is comedy.

Sentence is correct but keep as is. 'This is comedy' correctly matches singular subject and verb.

× I always read comedy because it help me relax.

✓ I always read comedy because it helps me relax.

Subject-verb agreement: with singular 3rd-person subject 'it' the verb requires an -s.'help' should be 'helps'.

× Yes, I need when I was a child I have a lot of promise.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a lot of hobbies.

Tense and word choice: 'need' is incorrect; use past tense 'had' for 'have' when referring to childhood. 'Promise' is wrong word; likely 'hobbies' intended. Ensure past tense consistency.

× The most promise I love is watching TV.

✓ My favorite pastime was watching TV.

Word choice and tense: 'promise' is incorrect; use 'pastime' or 'activity.' Because referring to childhood, use past tense 'was.' 'Most' + noun is awkward; 'favorite' is natural.

× I was always watching cartoon so.

✓ I always watched cartoons.

Progressive 'was always watching' can be used but here simple past 'watched' is cleaner. Use plural 'cartoons.' Remove extraneous 'so.'

× Yes I have I this is Homi, this Hobbit is hang out with my friend.

✓ Yes, this hobby is hanging out with my friends.

Many errors: 'Homi' and 'Hobbit' are misspellings. Use noun 'hobby' and gerund 'hanging out' after 'is.' Use plural 'friends' if more than one. Add commas for clarity.

× When I was a child I always go to the park with my friend and nowadays.

✓ When I was a child I always went to the park with my friends, and I still do nowadays.

Tense consistency: use past 'went' for childhood. 'Friend' should be plural if recurring. Add continuation 'I still do nowadays' to connect past and present.

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

Sentence is correct; keep as is. 'The' is acceptable here.

× That is good question.

✓ That is a good question.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'good question.'

× In my family, my sister have a company with me.

✓ In my family, my sister has a business with me.

Subject-verb agreement: 'sister' is singular so verb should be 'has.' 'Company' can mean 'business' or 'works with me'; adjust for clarity.

× We really likes hang out and eat out especially.

✓ We really like to hang out and eat out, especially.

Verb agreement and verb form: 'like' should match plural subject 'we.' Use 'to hang out' or gerund 'hanging out.' Add comma before 'especially.'