Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep answers natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct article and number usage, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and give specific details about hobbies (e.g., what you read, what you grow, how often). Aim for 2–4 concise sentences. Practice correct noun phrase forms (a hobby, three times, types of flowers and fruit).

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy reading novels — mainly comedy and horror — and I also tend a small garden where I grow flowers and fruit. I usually read for an hour each evening and spend weekends caring for the plants.

提案: Answer directly with a clear past-tense topic sentence. Use correct verb tenses and reduce fillers (uh). Add one or two specific details about what you drew and why you enjoyed it, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Yes, I did. As a child, I liked drawing because it helped me express my ideas. For example, at school I often drew animals and landscapes, and my teacher praised my colorful pictures.

提案: Provide a clear and grammatically consistent response. If saying you do not still have a childhood hobby, state it briefly and then explain how your interests changed, using past and present tenses correctly. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' and be specific about when the change happened.

例: No, I don't have a hobby that has lasted since childhood. I enjoyed drawing when I was young, but as I grew older I became more interested in reading and planting trees, which I now do in my spare time.

提案: Answer directly and use plural/singular forms correctly (different hobbies). Give a brief comparison and use linking words like 'for example' or 'while' to show contrast. Be specific about family members' hobbies and add a short comment on whether you share or enjoy them occasionally.

例: No, we have different hobbies. For example, my father enjoys fishing while my mother loves cooking, whereas I prefer reading and gardening; however, I sometimes go fishing with my father on weekends.

× Yes, I have a hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby.

The noun 'hobbies' is plural and requires no article 'a'. Because the speaker means one hobby, use singular 'hobby' with 'a'. If plural was intended, remove 'a' (e.g., 'I have hobbies'). This is an article/number error (use singular with 'a').

× Hobbies means three times when I spend my free times.

✓ Hobbies means three things I do in my free time.

The speaker uses 'three times' incorrectly; they likely mean 'three things' or 'three activities'. Also 'free times' is incorrect; use uncountable 'free time'. Adjust to 'three things I do in my free time' to convey meaning clearly.

× I recommended books such as comedy, horror books and I also have a garden.

✓ I read books such as comedy and horror, and I also have a garden.

'Recommended' is wrong in context; the student likely means 'read'. Also list items should be parallel: 'comedy and horror' or 'comedy books and horror books'. Use conjunction 'and' and split clauses with a comma. This fixes word choice and parallelism.

× There are many types flower, fruit.

✓ There are many types of flowers and fruits.

Missing preposition 'of' after 'types'. Also use plural nouns 'flowers' and 'fruits' for general categories and add 'and' to connect items.

× Yes, of course when I was a child, I also like drawing.

✓ Yes, of course when I was a child, I also liked drawing.

Tense mismatch: the time marker 'when I was a child' requires past tense 'liked' instead of present 'like'.

× Uh, when I went to go school, I draw my type picture and my teacher like this.

✓ When I went to school, I drew my own pictures and my teacher liked them.

'Went to go school' is redundant; use 'went to school'. Present 'draw' and 'like' should be past 'drew' and 'liked' to match past context. 'My type picture' is unclear; 'my own pictures' is clearer, and plural 'them' matches 'pictures'.

× No, I didn't have a hobby that I have had since childhood When I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a hobby that I have had since childhood.

Redundant and mixed tenses: the sentence contains both past negative 'didn't have' and present perfect 'have had'. For the intended meaning, keep 'No, I don't have any hobby that I've had since childhood' or 'No, I didn't have a hobby that lasted since childhood.' Also remove the repeated 'When I was a child.'

× I like drawing, but when I grow up I also like reading books and tree planting.

✓ I liked drawing, but as I grew up I also began to like reading books and planting trees.

Tense problems: childhood activity should be past 'liked drawing'. Change 'when I grow up' to past 'as I grew up' to match, and phrase 'tree planting' is better as 'planting trees'. Also add 'began to' for clarity of change over time.

× No, my family members have a different hobbies.

✓ No, my family members have different hobbies.

'A' with plural 'hobbies' is incorrect. Remove 'a' and use plural 'hobbies' to match 'members'.

× Uh for example my father likes fishing and my mother also likes cooking.

✓ For example, my father likes fishing and my mother likes cooking.

Minor disfluency: remove filler 'Uh' and add a comma after 'For example'. The original sentence is otherwise grammatically acceptable; these edits improve formality and fluency.

× They are different type of have different type of hobbies.

✓ They have different types of hobbies.

The original is repetitive and ungrammatical. Simplify to 'They have different types of hobbies.' Use plural 'types' and plural 'hobbies' and remove redundant words.