Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: state a hobby (or say you are unsure) with a topic sentence and give one or two supporting details. Use correct verb forms and avoid hesitation phrases like 'maybe' and 'I don't know.'

例: I enjoy watching animated films and reading manga. I usually watch anime a few times a week because it helps me relax after studying, and I also discuss episodes with friends online.

提案: Use past tense for childhood activities and correct vocabulary. Give a clear topic sentence and add a short specific detail about what you liked. Avoid repeating words and correct mistakes ('look at anime' -> 'watch anime').

例: When I was a child, I loved watching anime. I often watched Saturday morning cartoons and collected stickers of my favorite characters.

提案: Answer directly whether you still have the childhood hobby. Use consistent tense (past for childhood, present for now). Be specific about why you stopped if you no longer pursue it. Remove filler words like 'maybe' and 'I don't know.'

例: I used to watch anime when I was very young, but I don't follow it much now because I am busy with school. However, I still enjoy occasional episodes when I have free time.

提案: Be clear and correct vocabulary: 'watch anime' not 'look at the enemy.' Explain differences briefly and give reasons using linking words (for example, 'however', 'because'). Correct specific words ('mahjong' is a game; 'romantic' is incorrect here).

例: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. They prefer playing mahjong at home, whereas I prefer watching anime because I find it relaxing and imaginative.

× Maybe I have some hobbies but I don't know, I'd like it or not.

✓ Maybe I have some hobbies, but I don't know whether I like them or not.

The original uses 'it' to refer to 'hobbies' which is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them'. Also 'I'd like it or not' is unidiomatic; use 'whether I like them or not' to express uncertainty clearly. ID: 12

× When I was young, I like to look at anime anime.

✓ When I was young, I liked watching anime.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was young'), so the verb should be in the past tense ('liked' not 'like'). Also use 'watching anime' (gerund) rather than 'look at'. Duplicate word 'anime' was removed. ID: 5

× I don't know, because when I was very young I like to watch the enemy, but right now maybe I don't like to watch the enemy anymore. Yeah.

✓ I don't know, because when I was very young I liked to watch anime, but now I don't like to watch anime anymore.

Refers to past habit so use past tense 'liked'. Also 'enemy' is incorrect; context implies 'anime'. Maintain consistent tense contrast between past habit and present preference. Removed filler 'Yeah'. ID: 5

× No, my family doesn't want to look at the enemy. They like the mahjong, but I don't like to play the romantic.

✓ No, my family doesn't like to watch anime. They like mahjong, but I don't like to play it.

Several pronoun and word choice errors: 'doesn't want to look at' is unnatural for preferences — use 'doesn't like to watch'. 'Enemy' should be 'anime'. 'The mahjong' is wrong article use; use 'mahjong' without 'the'. 'Play the romantic' is incorrect; likely meant 'play it' to refer to mahjong. Correct pronoun 'it' refers to mahjong (singular game). Also adjust verbs to convey preference. ID: 12