Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (how long, how you learn, why you enjoy it). Use correct verb tense and simple linking words. Avoid repetition and fillers.

例: I enjoy dancing, which I have been learning for four years. I take online classes at home, and I love dancing because it helps me stay fit and express myself.

提案: Answer directly in past tense and give one or two clear details. Use linking words like 'when' or 'so' and avoid hesitation sounds. Be specific about what you did and why you enjoyed it.

例: Yes. When I was a child I enjoyed dancing, so I often practised by copying moves from TV shows. I remember standing on my toes and trying different steps to improve my balance.

提案: State clearly that the hobby has lasted since childhood, use past and present accurately, and give a brief detail about parental support. Remove repetitions and correct grammar.

例: Yes, dancing has been my hobby since childhood. My parents helped me learn basic steps when I was small, and I still practise regularly now.

提案: Give a direct answer and add a specific detail or contrast. Use singular/plural agreement and a linking phrase such as 'however' or 'only'.

例: No, my family members generally have different interests. Only one of my aunts also enjoys dancing; the rest of my family prefers other activities like reading or cooking.

× I have my hobby.

✓ I have a hobby.

Use the indefinite article 'a' with singular countable nouns. 'Hobby' is singular and needs an article: 'a hobby' not 'my hobby' in this general statement. Use 'my hobby' when specifying which hobby ('My hobby is dancing'). Suggestion: say 'I have a hobby' or 'My hobby is dancing.'

× I have hobbies.

✓ I have a hobby.

The speaker immediately specifies one hobby, so use the singular 'a hobby.' 'I have hobbies' is grammatically correct but inconsistent with stating one hobby next; prefer 'I have a hobby.' Suggestion: keep number consistent: 'I have a hobby' or list multiple hobbies.'

× I learn dance from four years and I love dance very much.

✓ I have been learning dance for four years, and I love it very much.

Duration expressions use 'for' and present perfect continuous: 'have been learning ... for four years.' Also use pronoun 'it' to avoid repeating 'dance.' Suggestion: use 'for' with time periods and the correct tense: 'I have been learning dance for four years.'

× I learn dance online at my home, so this was my hobby of dance.

✓ I learn dance online at home, so this is my dance hobby.

Use 'at home' or just 'home' (not 'at my home' is acceptable but 'at home' is natural). 'This was my hobby of dance' mixes tenses and awkward phrasing; use present tense 'is' and 'dance hobby' or 'my hobby.' Suggestion: 'I learn dance online at home, so this is my hobby.'

× OK, I am a child and I have uh, I have always from my childhood when I was small, umm, I tried to dance by standing on my feet.

✓ When I was a child, I have always liked dancing; when I was small, I tried to dance while standing on my feet.

Mixes present and past incorrectly. Use past for childhood actions ('When I was a child'). For continuous preferences from childhood to present, use 'have always liked.' Also 'by standing on my feet' is awkward; use 'while standing on my feet.' Suggestion: separate ideas into clear clauses and match tenses: 'When I was a child, I always liked dancing. When I was small, I tried to dance while standing.'

× I was just like moving like this or that and I was learning to dance little, little bit.

✓ I was just moving like this and that, and I was learning to dance little by little.

Use 'little by little' for gradual progress. Remove redundant 'like.' Past continuous 'was moving' and 'was learning' are fine for past actions. Suggestion: 'I was just moving like this and that, and I was learning to dance little by little.'

× Yes, I have have hobbies since childhood.

✓ Yes, I have had hobbies since childhood.

Use present perfect 'have had' to show possession continuing from past to present. Also remove duplicate 'have.' Suggestion: 'I have had this hobby since childhood.'

× I try to stand on my feet and I I. I was trying to dance.

✓ I tried to stand on my feet and I was trying to dance.

Mixes present and past; also has a fragment 'I I.' Use past tense 'tried' to match childhood context and remove the fragment. Suggestion: 'When I was learning, I tried to stand on my feet and practice dancing.'

× My parents were were was helping me.

✓ My parents were helping me.

Correct plural subject 'parents' requires plural verb 'were.' Remove duplicate words and the singular 'was.' Suggestion: 'My parents were helping me.'

× No, my family does not have the same hobbies.

✓ No, my family does not have the same hobbies.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable but 'family' as a collective can take 'do not' in British English; keep as is. (No change needed.) Suggestion: optionally: 'No, my family members do not have the same hobbies.'

× One of my aunt has that hobby and no one has the hobbies in my family, only me and my one aunt.

✓ One of my aunts has that hobby; no one else in my family has that hobby, only me and one of my aunts.

Use plural 'aunts' after 'one of.' Subject-verb agreement: 'one of my aunts has.' Avoid 'my one aunt' — use 'one of my aunts' or 'one aunt.' Use 'no one else' and singular 'that hobby.' Suggestion: 'One of my aunts has that hobby; only she and I enjoy it in my family.'