Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid filler words like “literally” and incorrect forms (e.g., “an hobbies”, “a English”).

例: I have a hobby: I enjoy singing English songs. For example, I often practice pop songs for about an hour each evening to improve my pronunciation and rhythm.

提案: Answer directly about childhood hobbies with correct tense and concise details. Use linking words (e.g., “when I was a child”, “nowadays”) and give one specific example of what you painted or how you paint.

例: When I was a child, I liked painting. For example, I used to paint landscapes and animals on paper every weekend, which helped me develop patience and creativity.

提案: Give a clear direct answer and explain briefly why. Use correct negation and simple linking words (e.g., “No, I don't.” “Because”). Avoid unclear words like “Salt” and repeated fillers.

例: No, I don't have a hobby that I have kept since childhood. I tried painting as a child, but I lost interest because I prefer activities like singing that feel more natural to me.

提案: Answer directly and list a few family hobbies with clear vocabulary and correct plurals. Use linking words like “for example” or “however” and give one specific comparison between your hobby and a family member's.

例: No, my family members have different hobbies. For example, my mother enjoys reading novels while my brother likes to sleep and watch TV; I prefer singing, so our interests are quite different.

× Yeah, I literally have an hobbies.

✓ Yeah, I literally have a hobby.

The noun 'hobbies' is plural but the article 'an' requires a singular noun; this is an article and number mismatch. Use singular 'a hobby' with 'have' when referring to one hobby. To improve, decide singular or plural and match the article: 'a hobby' or 'hobbies' without 'a/an'.

× I really like to sing an English song, but my English is so fluency and amazing.

✓ I really like to sing English songs, but my English is not very fluent yet.

'An English song' is grammatically possible but unnatural when speaking generally; use plural 'English songs' for general preference. 'Fluency' is a noun; use adjective 'fluent' to describe English. Also 'so ... and amazing' is awkward; use a more accurate qualifier. Suggestion: use adjectives to describe ability and pluralize when talking about general habits.

× I literally talked little little spot.

✓ I literally spoke only a little in places.

Verb 'talked' is past tense while context seems present ability; 'talked little little spot' is ungrammatical. 'Literally' often unnecessary. Use 'spoke' or 'talk' with proper adverb placement: 'spoke only a little' or 'talk very little.' Improve by making tense consistent and using natural adverb placement.

× My hobby is singing a English song.

✓ My hobby is singing English songs.

Use plural 'English songs' for a general hobby, and drop the indefinite article 'a' before 'English' when followed by plural. Also use gerund 'singing' correctly as subject complement.

× When I was child, my hobbies is to be a painters and I literally like to paint in childhood.

✓ When I was a child, my hobby was to be a painter and I really liked to paint.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a' before 'child'; subject-verb agreement 'hobbies is' should be 'hobby was' (singular) or 'hobbies were' (plural) and past tense required because speaker refers to childhood. 'To be a painters' mixes infinitive with plural noun; use singular 'painter.' 'Literally like' should be 'really liked' to match past time. Improve by matching tense and number and using correct article.

× And nowadays I literally like a singing song and I literally like a English tones of song that's so beautiful sounds and we don't don't do don't ask that song.

✓ Nowadays I really like singing songs and English songs; their tones are beautiful, and we don't usually sing those songs.

Many errors: 'a singing song' is incorrect — use gerund 'singing songs.' 'A English' needs 'an' but here plural 'English songs' is better. 'Tones of song that's so beautiful sounds' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'their tones are beautiful.' Repetition 'don't don't do don't ask' is unclear; likely means 'we don't sing those songs.' Suggest simplifying and using correct quantifiers and plurality.

× Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood? No I didn't have that Salt hobbies painting because I literally not like a paintings because in painting we literally paint something new but I don't like paint.

✓ No. I haven't had that kind of hobby since childhood; I didn't like painting because when you paint you create something new, but I don't enjoy painting.

Question asks about a hobby you've had since childhood — use present perfect 'haven't had.' Original has 'didn't have' and 'Salt hobbies' (unclear). 'Literally not like a paintings' mixes negation and article/plural errors. Use 'I didn't like painting' or 'I don't enjoy painting.' Make tense consistent and correct article/number usage.

× No, my families has different hobbies.

✓ No, my family members have different hobbies.

'Families' is incorrect; likely 'family' or 'family members.' Also 'has' should be 'have' to agree with 'members.' Correct pronoun/noun choice and subject-verb agreement is needed.

× My families has some sleepings or some reading, some book or some talkative with the portions or relatives.

✓ Some family members like sleeping, others enjoy reading books or talking with relatives.

'Sleepings' is not a noun in English; use 'sleeping' as a gerund or 'sleep.' 'Some reading' and 'some book' should be 'reading books.' 'Talkative with the portions' is nonsensical; likely 'talking with parents or relatives.' Suggest using parallel gerund forms and correct nouns.

× My families member and my office is singing.

✓ Some of my family members and people at my office enjoy singing.

'My families member' is incorrect: use 'some family members.' Subject-verb agreement: plural subject needs 'enjoy' not 'is.' 'My office' alone doesn't refer to people; say 'people at my office.' Improve by making subject plural and verb agree, and clarifying meaning.