Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'It help' → 'It helps'), loại bỏ từ không đúng nghĩa ('frameworks' nếu không phải sở thích) và lồng ghép chi tiết cụ thể với liên từ để mạch lạc (ví dụ: 'I enjoy playing the guitar because...'). Hỏi nên giữ tối đa 3–4 câu, nêu sở thích chính, tần suất và lý do/hiệu quả.

例: Yes. I enjoy playing the guitar and listening to music. I usually play the guitar every evening because it helps me relax after a busy day at school, and listening to music inspires me while I study.

提案: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi nghĩa/ngữ pháp. Bạn nói 'writing' nhưng ví dụ lại là 'cycling', gây mâu thuẫn. Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'I used to enjoy writing' / 'It helped me improve my health' / 'in the afternoons'). Nên chọn một sở thích duy nhất, giải thích rõ lý do và đưa ví dụ cụ thể với liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I used to enjoy writing when I was a child because it helped me express my thoughts and improve my language skills. For example, I wrote short stories and poems every afternoon, and sometimes I shared them with my teachers.

提案: Trả lời lặp từ, ngắt quãng và chứa lỗi phát âm/viết. Tránh tiếng lắp và lặp lại cùng một từ. Cấu trúc câu cần rõ ràng: nêu sở thích, kể tần suất và bổ sung lý do hoặc kỷ niệm ngắn gọn. Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý.

例: Yes, I have. I have been cycling with my friends since I was a child. We used to ride together after school several times a week, and those outings helped me stay fit and build close friendships.

提案: Câu trả lời này không phải là câu hoàn chỉnh và không cung cấp thông tin. Luôn trả lời trực tiếp 'Yes' hoặc 'No' rồi giải thích ngắn gọn. Nên thêm một hoặc hai câu nêu ví dụ cụ thể và so sánh nếu cần.

例: Not really. Some members of my family like hiking and cooking, while I prefer playing the guitar and cycling. However, we sometimes listen to music together at home.

× Oh yes, I have several hobbies such as frameworks, playing guitar and listening to music.

✓ Oh yes, I have several hobbies such as skateboarding, playing the guitar and listening to music.

The word 'frameworks' is incorrect in this context; it refers to structures or software libraries, not a hobby. Also include the article 'the' before 'guitar' when referring to the activity of playing the instrument. Replace 'frameworks' with an appropriate hobby and add 'the' for natural English. Suggestions: use vocabulary that correctly names hobbies (e.g., skateboarding, painting) and use 'play the guitar' for the activity.

× And I often play my guitar in the even in the evening.

✓ And I often play my guitar in the evening.

There is a redundant fragment 'in the even' and the adverbial phrase should be 'in the evening'. Remove the extra words so the adverbial time phrase is correct and placed after the verb phrase. Suggestion: proofread to remove duplicated or partial words.

× It help me relax after a busy day at school.

✓ It helps me relax after a busy day at school.

Subject 'It' is third person singular, so the verb requires an -s ending in the present simple: 'helps'. Suggestion: check subject-verb agreement for third person singular subjects.

× Yes I did, I used to like writing when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to like writing when I was a child.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs punctuation to separate responses. 'Used to' correctly expresses past habitual action. Suggestion: add a comma or period after 'Yes' and separate clauses appropriately.

× I like it because it was active and for it have me improve my health.

✓ I liked it because it was active and it helped me improve my health.

Tense inconsistency and incorrect verb forms: the main clause refers to past habit so use past tense 'liked'. 'For it have me improve my health' is ungrammatical; use 'it helped me improve my health' to express past effect. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct past verb forms for results.

× For example, I often cycled my bike with my friends afternoon.

✓ For example, I often rode my bike with my friends in the afternoon.

'Cycled my bike' is awkward; use 'rode my bike' or 'cycled' alone. Add the preposition 'in' before 'the afternoon' to indicate time. Suggestion: choose one verb ('rode' or 'cycled') and include the correct time preposition.

× Hello, yes I have had a hobby since childhood.

✓ Yes, I have had a hobby since childhood.

The greeting 'Hello' is unnecessary in this brief answer; otherwise sentence is correct using present perfect to show an action continuing from the past to present. Suggestion: remove redundant 'Hello' to sound natural in conversation.

× I have like uh R riding with my friends after school.

✓ I have liked riding with my friends after school.

'Have like' is incorrect combination; to express a hobby continuing from past to present, use 'have liked' (present perfect) or simply 'I like riding'. If meaning is habitual now, 'I like riding with my friends after school' is preferred. Also remove filler sounds 'uh R'. Suggestion: choose correct tense and avoid fillers in formal responses.

× We often cycle cycle cycle.

✓ We often cycle together.

Repeating the word 'cycle' is not grammatical. Use an adverb like 'together' or 'often' (already present) plus the verb once: 'We often cycle together.' Suggestion: avoid stuttering or repetition in written responses; express the idea succinctly.

× MMM.

✓ Not really, we have some hobbies in common but many of our hobbies are different.

'MMM' is not a grammatical answer. Provide a full sentence addressing the question, for example indicating similarity or difference between personal and family hobbies. Suggestion: answer clearly with a complete sentence relevant to the question.