Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: まず、文を簡潔にして流暢さを向上させる必要があります。不要な繰り返し（"so", "my my"）を避け、トピック文をはっきり述べてから短い理由を添えると良いです。また語彙を少し広げて"watching soccer"を"watching football matches"や"following football"のように具体化しましょう。発音とリズムに注意して一文を自然にまとめる練習をしてください。

例: Yes, I do. My favourite hobby is watching football matches because I enjoy the tactics and atmosphere, especially during big tournaments.

提案: 回答が長くて繰り返しが多く、論理のつながりが弱いです。まずトピック文で子どもの時の趣味を述べ、その後に具体的な例（どんなアニメか、誰と見たか）や別の趣味（バスケットボール）を短く説明してください。接続詞（"and", "also", "because"）を適切に使って一貫性を出す練習をしましょう。語彙は"anime"の説明や"play basketball with friends"の具体化を心掛けてください。

例: As a child I loved watching anime, especially action and adventure shows that I watched with my school friends. I also used to play basketball regularly, which was fun because we played after school.

提案: 文法と語順の改善が必要です。現在形と過去形の使い分けを明確にし、具体的なスポーツ名を一度に列挙する際は簡潔にまとめてください。例えば『I've played several sports since childhood, including basketball, baseball and football』のように言うと自然です。さらに、理由や頻度（"often", "every weekend"）を加えると話が豊かになります。

例: I've played several sports since childhood, including basketball, baseball and football, and I used to play football with my friends almost every weekend.

提案: 内容が曖昧で文が未完成です。まず家族との共通の趣味を明確に述べ（"Yes, I do." または "Not really."）、次に具体例（父と一緒に行く頻度、どの試合か）を付けて理由を述べると良いです。冗長な語（"my father, my father"）や不完全な文を避け、簡潔で論理的な構成にする練習をしてください。

例: Yes. My father is a big baseball fan and I enjoy watching baseball with him; we sometimes go to local games together on weekends.

× Yes I do. I have so many hobbies so especially I my my favorite hobby is watching soccer.

✓ Yes, I do. I have many hobbies, but my favorite hobby is watching soccer.

The original sentence has redundant words and missing commas. 'I my my' is repetition and should be removed. Use 'have many hobbies' (no 'so' needed) and 'but' to contrast. Also add commas for clarity. In English, third person singular is not directly relevant here, but the sentence needed correction for redundancy and fluency.

× When I was a child I was watching an anime a lot, so in Japan a lot of anime were watched with so many friends.

✓ When I was a child I watched a lot of anime, and in Japan many anime were watched with friends.

Use simple past 'watched' instead of 'was watching' to describe a habitual past action. 'A anime' is incorrect; use 'anime' without an article and 'many' instead of 'a lot of' before a noun. Remove 'so' and 'so many' redundancy. Maintain past tense consistently.

× So yes, I like to watch them so and I also play the basketball as well, so it is very fun to play with my friend.

✓ Yes, I like to watch them, and I also play basketball; it is very fun to play with my friends.

Do not use 'the' before uncountable or general sports: say 'play basketball'. Use plural 'friends' if referring to more than one. Remove redundant words like 'so', 'as well'. Add commas and a semicolon to improve sentence flow.

× Since my childhood I was playing the sport a lot, so probably such as the basketball, baseball hoop was well.

✓ Since my childhood I have played sports a lot, such as basketball and baseball.

Use present perfect 'have played' for an action starting in the past and continuing to the present. 'the sport' is too vague; use plural 'sports'. 'baseball hoop' is incorrect—use 'baseball'. Remove 'probably' and 'was well' which are ungrammatical.

× So especially football was playing so much so much with my friends, so I played well.

✓ Especially football, I played a lot with my friends, and I played well.

Do not use passive 'football was playing'; use active 'I played football a lot with my friends.' Reduce repetition 'so much so much'. Keep tense consistent: simple past 'played' for past activities.

× Lovely. My father, my father was watching the baseball games a lot. So also I like to watch that, watch the baseball game. That's why probably sometime I sometimes go to.

✓ My father watched baseball games a lot, and I also like to watch baseball games. That's why I sometimes go to the games with him.

Remove redundant repetition 'my father, my father'. Use simple past 'watched' for habitual past. Use 'baseball games' (plural) and avoid repeating 'watch'. 'That's why probably sometime I sometimes go to.' is redundant and ungrammatical; simplify to 'I sometimes go to the games with him.' Use appropriate preposition 'to' with 'go to the games'.