Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然并直接点出主题句，然后用一到两句具体细节支持。避免冗余的填充词（如“that are like”）并控制在最多5句内。可以补充频率或原因来丰富内容。

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing the electric guitar because it helps me relax after study, and I usually practise for about an hour a day. I also like reading mainly modern novels, and sometimes I play video games with friends on weekends.

提案: 开头要完整回应问题并用过去时保持一致，避免句子碎片。用连接词把爱好归类并给出具体例子或频率，句子不要过多重复“like”。

例: Yes, I did. As a child I loved reading picture books and practising the piano, and I often went roller skating with my friends on weekends. Those activities helped me develop coordination and a love of music.

提案: 回答时使用正确时态并给出明确的主题句，避免模糊表达（如“this childhood”）。说明从什么时候开始、为什么一直坚持以及具体例子。控制句子数量和逻辑连贯性。

例: Yes, I've had two lifelong hobbies: reading and listening to music. I started reading picture books when I was five, and I still enjoy novels today; I also grew up in a musical family, so I listen to music daily.

提案: 回答要更简洁并用完整句子说明相似之处，避免重复词（如“little young”）。可以说明具体共同活动或回忆，并用连接词组织句子。

例: Yes, we share a love of music in my family. My parents and my younger brother often listen to songs together, and when we were children my father used to play records for us, which sparked my interest in music.

× Yeah, I have some hobbies that are like playing electric guitar and reading books and playing video games.

✓ Yeah, I have some hobbies, such as playing the electric guitar, reading books, and playing video games.

原句在列举爱好时缺少适当的连接和冠词。使用動名詞（playing, reading）是正确的，但要使用逗號/連接詞整理列表，並在特定乐器前加定冠词“the”。建議：列舉多個動名詞時用逗號和連詞（and），提到特定樂器用定冠詞。

× Yeah, when I was a child. I also like reading books and I like playing pianos and going roller skating with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I also liked reading books, playing the piano, and going roller-skating with my friends.

原句時態不一致：第一句為過去（was），後面卻用現在時（like）。應保持過去時態來描述兒時習慣。另外，“pianos” 指單一活動應用單數且加定冠詞“the piano”。建議：敘述過去習慣時用過去式（liked），樂器前用定冠詞並使用單數。

× Yup, this childhood I think I like readings and listening to music now that I also like that.

✓ Since childhood, I think I have liked reading and listening to music, and I still do now.

原句詞序混亂且時態不當。“this childhood” 不自然，應為“since childhood”。“readings” 作名詞複數不合適，應用動名詞“reading”。表達從過去延續到現在應用現在完成時（have liked）或過去習慣加上現在仍然如此的說法。建議：用“since childhood”或“since I was a child”，使用“reading”並使用現在完成時或明確表達延續。

× Yeah, my family members, like my parents and my little young brother, we all like listening to music cause when we're little, when me and my young brother are little, my father would like to play.

✓ Yes, my family members, like my parents and my younger brother, all like listening to music, because when we were little my father used to play (music).

原句中“little young brother” 重複且形容詞順序不當，應為“younger brother”。代詞用法也有問題：在從句中應用主格“we”與“my brother”而不是“me”。此外，描述過去習慣應用“used to”或“would”加動詞原形，並保持過去時態（were little）。建議：刪除冗餘形容詞，使用“younger”，主語用主格，描述過去習慣用“used to”或“would”。