Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, direct topic sentence stating your hobby, then add one or two brief reasons or details. Keep sentences grammatical and concise (max 3–4 sentences). Use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I do. My main hobby is listening to English podcasts because they help me improve my vocabulary and pronunciation. I usually listen during my commute and take notes of new words.

提案: Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence about a childhood hobby. Provide specific supporting details (who, when, why) using linking words like “when,” “because,” or “so.” Avoid asking questions back to the examiner.

例: Yes. When I was a child I often played basketball with my mother in the mornings because she used to play in high school. She taught me basic skills and we practiced shooting together, which helped me become more confident.

提案: This answer is close to good. Use correct tense and smoother linking words. Combine sentences to be more natural and avoid small grammar mistakes (use “I have been” and “since I was 6”). Add one specific example of what you draw or how often you practice.

例: Yes, I have. I have been drawing since I was six years old because it helps me relax and boosts my creativity. I usually draw landscapes and portraits and try to spend at least two hours every weekend practicing.

提案: Give a direct response about whether your hobbies match family members’ and then give specific examples and frequency. Use clearer grammar and linking words such as “also,” “so,” or “however.”

例: Yes, some of my hobbies are the same as my family’s. For example, my sister and I both enjoy playing basketball, so we practice together several times a week and sometimes watch games together.

× Yes, I have it.

✓ Yes, I do.

Student used the pronoun 'it' incorrectly. The question asks if they have any hobbies; the correct short affirmative is 'Yes, I do.' Use the auxiliary 'do' to refer to possession of a hobby, not 'it.' Suggestion: answer with 'Yes, I do' or 'Yes, I have a hobby.'

× I have it for this and I.

✓ I have it for a long time, and I enjoy it.

The original is disordered and missing necessary words. 'For this and I' is ungrammatical. Use a clear time expression and subject-verb structure: 'I have had it for a long time' or 'I have had this hobby for a long time, and I enjoy it.' Suggestion: state duration and reason clearly.

× What you are true with listening English?

✓ Are you good at listening in English?

The sentence uses incorrect pronoun order and word choice. 'What you are true with' is ungrammatical. Use the adjective 'good at' plus gerund: 'Are you good at listening to English?' or 'Are you good at English listening?' Suggestion: form yes/no question with auxiliary 'are' and correct preposition 'at' and include 'to' if using 'listening to.'

× Yes, I have to hold it where I were the choice.

✓ Yes, I used to keep it when I was a child because it was my choice.

Mixes present 'have to' with past 'were.' The correct past habitual expression is 'used to' and past 'was' for singular subject. Suggestion: use 'used to' to describe past habits and 'was' for first-person singular in past tense.

× I often play the basketball with my mother in the morning because my mother really has a pretty basketball in high school, so we see often tell me how to usually how do you play the basketball?

✓ I often play basketball with my mother in the morning because she used to play basketball in high school, and she often showed me how to play.

Multiple errors: 'the basketball' should be 'basketball' (no article for the sport). 'Has a pretty basketball in high school' is incorrect tense and noun choice; use past tense 'used to play basketball in high school.' 'We see often tell me how to usually how do you play the basketball?' is ungrammatical; correct to 'she often showed me how to play.' Suggestion: remove 'the' before sport names, use past tense for past habits, and simplify sentence into clear clauses.

× Yes I have, I been drawing since childhood.

✓ Yes, I have. I have been drawing since childhood.

Missing auxiliary 'have' before 'been.' For an action continuing from past to present, use present perfect continuous 'have been drawing.' Suggestion: use 'I have been drawing since I was a child' for clarity.

× I started with about 6 years.

✓ I started when I was about six years old.

Incorrect preposition 'with' and missing 'old.' Use 'started when I was about six' to indicate age at start. Suggestion: use 'when I was' + age + 'years old.'

× I enjoy it because it helps me relax and improves my creativity and schedule every week.

✓ I enjoy it because it helps me relax and improves my creativity. I practice every week.

Confuses 'schedule every week'—unclear structure. Separate into two sentences: benefits and practice routine. Use 'I practice every week' to describe frequency. Suggestion: keep reasons and routines in separate clear clauses.

× Yes, I I like watching other I like what you're playing basketball and also my sister like like do this.

✓ Yes, I like watching others play. I like basketball, and my sister likes to do it too.

Repetitions and unclear referents: 'watching other I like what you're playing basketball' is ungrammatical. 'My sister like like do this' has wrong verb agreement and structure. Correct subject-verb agreement ('sister likes') and use 'watching others play' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use clear subjects and verbs.

× So I we often play in good practice and play together in my.

✓ So we often practice and play together at home.

Pronoun and word order errors: 'I we' is wrong and 'in my' is incomplete. Use 'we' as subject and 'at home' to indicate location. Suggestion: use 'we often practice and play together at home.'