Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and relevant. Start with a direct topic sentence naming your hobby, then give one or two concise supporting details (why you enjoy it, how often you do it). Avoid unclear phrases and irrelevant information. Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’ correctly.

例: Yes, I do. My main hobby is reading novels because they help me relax and learn new vocabulary. For example, I usually read for about an hour every evening before bed.

提案: Give a clear statement about childhood hobbies and support it with specific, coherent details. Use correct tense and simple vocabulary if unsure. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use linking words such as ‘also’ or ‘because’ to explain reasons.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I enjoyed playing football and drawing because they made me feel happy and relaxed. For example, I played football with my school team every weekend and I often drew pictures at home.

提案: Say the hobby clearly and give specific details about when you started and how often you do it now. Use correct past tense for starting time and present tense for current habits. Keep answers concise and logical with linking words like ‘since’, ‘because’, or ‘now’.

例: Yes, I do. I have been sketching since I was seven because I found it relaxing and creative. I still sketch now about once or twice a week, often drawing scenes from my day.

提案: This answer is relatively clear but needs polishing: avoid fillers like “Oh my God,” fix grammar (e.g. gardening), and be more specific about frequency or reasons. Use linking words (‘however’, ‘while’, ‘because’) to contrast your hobbies with your parents’. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Not exactly. My parents enjoy gardening and cooking because they find them relaxing and useful. However, I prefer reading books and playing football; for example, my mother spends weekends in the garden while I usually go to the park to play football with friends.

× Well, yes, I have a hobby. I have been lovers because they have realized information and for example I just waited for about an hour before 10.

✓ Well, yes, I have a hobby. I have loved it because it helps me relax and, for example, I sometimes practice it for about an hour before ten o'clock.

The original contains unclear and incorrect phrases ('I have been lovers', 'they have realized information') and awkward structure. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning: use 'have loved' to indicate ongoing liking, 'helps me relax' to explain reason, and 'practice it for about an hour before ten o'clock' to express the time duration and reference. Suggestion: state actions clearly, use simple present perfect for ongoing states and present simple for general facts, and write time expressions naturally.

× I yes, I was playing for Running Tory when I was a pie.

✓ Yes, I used to play for Running Tory when I was a child.

The original mixes forms and contains nonsense words ('I was a pie'). This is a past tense/form usage error (ID 5). 'Used to' expresses a habitual past activity. Replace 'when I was a pie' with 'when I was a child'. Suggestion: use 'used to' or simple past for past habits and ensure nouns like 'child' are used correctly.

× I enjoyed them because I couldn't understand what plans at the moment try and have relaxed.

✓ I enjoyed it because I didn't have to think about plans at the moment and it helped me relax.

This sentence is ungrammatical and unclear (ID 26). It incorrectly uses modal/negation and word order. The corrected version uses simple past 'enjoyed' with a clear reason: 'didn't have to think about plans' and 'helped me relax'. Suggestion: state causes and effects with clear verbs and simple clause structure.

× For example, I played football and the teams and then I drew pictures of the spoon.

✓ For example, I played football on teams and then I drew pictures of spoons.

The phrase 'and the teams' and 'drew pictures of the spoon' are awkward/incorrect (ID 26). Use 'played football on teams' to indicate membership and pluralize 'spoon' if drawing various pictures. Suggestion: ensure noun phrases are complete and pluralize when appropriate.

× Yes I do umm I have like trying saying my words.

✓ Yes, I do. I like trying new ways of expressing my thoughts.

Original 'I have like trying saying my words' is incorrect tense/structure (ID 6). Use present simple 'I like' plus a gerund phrase 'trying new ways of expressing my thoughts' to convey the hobby. Suggestion: use 'like' + noun/gerund to state preferences.

× I try and I start this when I was about 7.

✓ I started this when I was about seven.

Mixing present 'try' with past 'start' is incorrect (ID 5). Use past simple 'started' for actions that began in the past. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past actions and spell out numbers under ten in formal speech.

× I still talk sometimes because it's relaxing and I have meeting and for example I sketch scenes from a day one or times a week.

✓ I still practice it sometimes because it's relaxing, and I have meetings; for example, I sketch scenes from my day once or twice a week.

Original has tense and noun errors ('have meeting', 'from a day one') and unclear frequency (ID 6). Use 'practice it', plural 'meetings', and 'once or twice a week' for frequency. Suggestion: use appropriate verbs ('practice'), pluralize countable nouns, and use standard frequency expressions.

× Oh my God. My parents like garden in and cooking because they fight it relaxing and useful.

✓ My parents like gardening and cooking because they find it relaxing and useful.

Original 'garden in' is incorrect and 'fight' is a wrong word choice (ID 8). Use the gerund 'gardening' and the verb 'find' to express opinion. Suggestion: use gerunds after 'like' for activities and choose correct verbs ('find' rather than 'fight').

× But I usually prefer reading books and playing football.

✓ But I usually prefer reading books and playing football.

This sentence is already correct; no grammatical change needed. It demonstrates correct parallel gerund structure. (ID 26) Suggestion: maintain parallel structure when listing activities.

× For example, my mother spent weekends in the garden while I go to the park to play football with friends.

✓ For example, my mother spends weekends in the garden while I go to the park to play football with friends.

The original mixes past 'spent' with present 'go' (ID 6). Since this describes habitual actions, use present simple 'spends'. Suggestion: use the same tense for parallel habitual actions (present simple for routines).