Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời nên tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn; tránh câu rời rạc và lỗi ngữ pháp. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau bằng một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ dùng liên từ để liên kết ý (ví dụ: because, so, when). Tránh viết những câu ngắn lẻ đứng một mình như “Because...”. Sử dụng thì và động từ phù hợp (I often put on music; it helps me concentrate).

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy watching films and listening to music. For example, when I do my homework in the evening, I often put on music because it helps me concentrate and work more efficiently.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp khiến ý không truyền đạt tốt. Tránh các cụm từ như “Just ended when was a kid.” Hãy bắt đầu với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + brief statement), sau đó mô tả chi tiết cụ thể (who, what, when) và dùng liên từ để nối câu. Chú ý thì quá khứ (enjoy → enjoyed; done → had finished).

例: Yes. When I was a child, I enjoyed watching films with my mother. We often watched Chinese and Western movies together in the evenings after I had finished my homework.

提案: Câu trả lời lặp ý và có lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm (uh). Nên trả lời trực tiếp với cấu trúc rõ ràng: state the hobby in past and present, use đúng thì (enjoy → enjoyed; it hasn't changed). Tránh tiếng ngắt quãng và thêm một chi tiết cụ thể để minh họa (ví dụ: favorite film type or memory).

例: Yes, I have. I enjoyed watching films as a child and I still do today. It hasn’t changed much — I still like family dramas and comedies because they make me feel relaxed.

提案: Câu trả lời chứa nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cụm từ không tự nhiên. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + brief statement), sửa mục ngữ pháp (are → do, interest → are interested in, after we finish work/homework). Dùng liên từ để giải thích lý do và thêm một ví dụ ngắn về tần suất hoặc thể loại phim để làm rõ nội dung.

例: Yes, my mother and I share the same hobby — we are both interested in Chinese movies. We often watch films together in the evenings after we finish our work because it is a relaxing way to end the day.

× Yes I do. My hobbies are watching films and listening to music. When I do homework in the evening, I often put on some music. Because it can help me do my homework better.

✓ Yes, I do. My hobbies are watching films and listening to music. When I do my homework in the evening, I often put on some music because it helps me do my homework better.

The fragment 'Because it can help me do my homework better.' is a sentence fragment and should be connected to the previous sentence. Also 'can help' is acceptable but 'helps' is more natural for habitual present actions. Suggestion: combine clauses and use simple present 'helps' for routines.

× Just ended when was a kid. I enjoy watching films with my mother. We often spend time in the evening to western Chinese film when I done my homework.

✓ My hobby ended when I was a kid. I enjoyed watching films with my mother. We often spent time in the evening watching Chinese westerns after I had finished my homework.

Multiple issues: 'Just ended when was a kid.' is ungrammatical and needs subject and past tense; use 'ended' with 'I was'. 'I enjoy' should be past 'I enjoyed' to match 'when I was a kid'. 'We often spend time in the evening to western Chinese film' uses incorrect preposition and word order; use 'spent time... watching Chinese westerns'. 'when I done my homework' is wrong tense and missing auxiliary — use past perfect 'after I had finished my homework' to show sequence.

× Yes I do, when I was a kid I enjoy watching films and now it's don't change too much, uh, of in my interests.

✓ Yes I do. When I was a kid I enjoyed watching films, and now my interests have not changed much.

Tense inconsistency: 'when I was a kid I enjoy' mixes past time marker with present verb — change 'enjoy' to past 'enjoyed'. 'it's don't change too much' is ungrammatical; use present perfect 'have not changed' to indicate continuity from past to present. Remove filler words and correct word order.

× This are you? My mother and I interest in Chinese movie. We often watch films together in the evening after we learn my work because it's a relaxing way to end the day.

✓ Do you mean that? My mother and I are interested in Chinese movies. We often watch films together in the evening after we finish our work because it's a relaxing way to end the day.

'This are you?' is unclear and uses wrong pronoun and verb; replace with a clear phrase like 'Do you mean that?'. 'My mother and I interest in' lacks the correct verb form — use passive/adj 'are interested in'. 'Chinese movie' should be plural 'Chinese movies'. 'after we learn my work' is incorrect verb and pronoun; use 'after we finish our work' or 'after I finish my work' and keep subject consistent.