Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your hobby, use correct verb forms and avoid vague phrases like "normal people." Add one brief reason or detail using a linking word. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: I don't have many hobbies; my main hobby is sleeping. I find sleeping very relaxing and it helps me recharge after a busy day. For example, I usually take a short nap in the afternoon to feel more energetic.

提案: Answer the question directly about childhood, use past tense and clear structure. Start with a topic sentence (Yes/No and what), then give one specific example and who you shared it with. Avoid filler words and incorrect phrases like "when I was tell my office."

例: Yes. When I was a child I liked painting simple pictures of houses and flowers. I often showed my paintings to my friends and we would talk about the colours I used.

提案: Compare past and present clearly and use correct tense and pronouns. Begin by stating whether you continued a childhood hobby, then contrast with your current main hobby using linking words (however, but, nowadays). Provide a specific reason for your preference and avoid awkward phrasing like "my own mind is feel."

例: Yes, I still enjoy painting, but nowadays my main hobby is sleeping. However, I keep painting occasionally because it relaxes me. For example, I paint simple landscapes on weekends to clear my mind.

提案: Answer clearly and politely. Use present tense for habitual actions and give one contrasting detail about family activities. Avoid confusing or irrelevant phrases like "pray for girls some breakfast." Keep sentences short and grammatical.

例: No, my family and I have different routines. My family usually gets up early to pray and have tea and bread, while I prefer to sleep longer. Therefore, our daily hobbies are quite different.

× Uh, normal people have hobbies reading, writings or dancing but I usually do. My hobbies is sleeping.

✓ Uh, normal people have hobbies like reading, writing, or dancing, but I usually do not. My hobby is sleeping.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns and forms: 'writings' should be 'writing' (noun form for hobby) and 'I usually do' is incomplete—needs object or verb phrase ('do not'). Also 'hobbies is' has subject-verb disagreement (plural vs singular). Correct by listing hobbies with 'like', using singular 'hobby' for one and 'is sleeping'. Use 'do not' to negate the earlier clause. Suggestions: use 'like' before examples, use gerund forms 'reading, writing', ensure subject-verb agreement (hobby is).

× When I was tell my office is to paint uh some new pictures of house flowers and share with the friends.

✓ When I was a child I used to paint new pictures of houses and flowers and share them with my friends.

The original mixes incorrect words and tenses: 'was tell my office' is ungrammatical. Likely meaning 'when I was a child' and habitual past should be expressed with 'used to'. 'House flowers' should be 'houses and flowers' and 'share with the friends' requires an object pronoun 'them' and 'my friends' rather than 'the friends'. Use past habitual 'used to' to match the time frame. Suggestions: replace unclear phrases with 'when I was a child', use 'used to' for repeated past actions, pluralize nouns appropriately, and include pronouns for objects ('share them with my friends').

× Inside I have painting hobbies and nowadays my hobbies is sleeping.

✓ I have a hobby of painting, but nowadays my hobby is sleeping.

'Inside I have painting hobbies' is incorrect and unclear. Use 'I have a hobby of painting' or 'I enjoy painting'. 'Hobbies is' is subject-verb disagreement; 'hobby is' matches singular. Keep consistency between singular/plural when referring to one primary hobby. Suggestions: choose either singular 'hobby' or plural 'hobbies' and make the verb agree, and use clear phrasing like 'I enjoy painting' or 'I have a hobby of painting'.

× When I sleep I feel my own mind is feel relaxed and concentrate in anything.

✓ When I sleep, I feel my mind become relaxed and I can concentrate on anything.

The original uses redundant and incorrect verb forms: 'I feel my own mind is feel relaxed' repeats 'feel' and mixes verb forms. Use 'feel my mind become relaxed' or 'my mind feels relaxed'. 'Concentrate in anything' uses incorrect preposition; use 'concentrate on anything'. Also include subject for second clause and proper punctuation. Suggestions: avoid repeating verbs, use 'feel my mind become relaxed' or 'my mind feels relaxed', and use 'concentrate on' rather than 'concentrate in'.

× No, we didn't have the same hobbies as my family members. My family members wake up in the morning and pray for girls some breakfast, eat tea and bread and my hobbies is sleeping. That's.

✓ No, I do not have the same hobbies as my family. My family members wake up in the morning, pray, prepare breakfast, and drink tea with bread, while my hobby is sleeping.

Multiple issues: tense inconsistency ('didn't have' vs present habits), awkward phrasing ('pray for girls some breakfast' is incorrect), and subject-verb disagreement ('my hobbies is'). Use present simple for habitual actions ('do not have', 'wake up', 'prepare'). Clarify actions: 'pray' and 'prepare breakfast' or 'make breakfast', and 'drink tea with bread' is clearer than 'eat tea and bread'. End 'That's.' is incomplete and unnecessary. Suggestions: use present simple for routines, correct verb phrases ('prepare breakfast', 'drink tea'), ensure subject-verb agreement ('my hobby is').