Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming one or two main hobbies, then give one short reason or detail. Avoid repetition and unnatural phrases (e.g., "in my own practical life"). Use linking words if you add details.

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing cricket and reading novels because cricket keeps me active and reading helps me relax and learn new things.

提案: Use correct tense and be specific. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then add one or two details about how often or with whom you played. Avoid repeating the same phrase.

例: When I was a child, I loved playing cricket with my friends. We played every weekend in the nearby ground and I especially enjoyed batting.

提案: Answer directly in past-to-present terms. Say that you have continued a childhood hobby and give one specific example and brief detail about how it continues now. Keep it to one or two supporting sentences with linking words.

例: Yes, I have kept my childhood hobby of playing outdoor games. For example, I still play cricket with friends most weekends, which helps me stay fit and socialise.

提案: Be natural and organized: start with a clear statement about family hobbies, then give a specific example and brief detail. Correct grammar (plural forms, verb tenses) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like "for example" or "in particular" to connect ideas.

例: Yes, many of my family members share my hobbies. For example, my brother also loves cricket and often plays with me at the local ground, which makes it a regular family activity.

× Yes, in my many family members are same hobbies, they are also loved to play play cricket and outdoor games.

✓ Yes, many of my family members have the same hobbies; they also love to play cricket and other outdoor games.

The original sentence has plural and article problems. 'in my many family members' is incorrect word order and unnecessary 'in'. Use 'many of my family members' to indicate a subset. 'are same hobbies' should be 'have the same hobbies' because people 'have' hobbies, not 'are' hobbies. 'they are also loved to play' misuses passive 'loved' and auxiliary; use active present simple 'they also love to play'. Remove the duplicated word 'play'. Suggestion: rearrange phrase order and use correct verbs for possession and liking. Suggested practice: write sentences using 'many of my...' and 'have the same hobbies' and compare active vs passive forms.

× Yes, I do various hobbies in my own practical life. I do. I love several hobbies.

✓ Yes, I have various hobbies in my daily life. I love several hobbies.

The phrase 'I do various hobbies' is unnatural in present tense; 'do a hobby' is not common—use 'have' or 'enjoy' for hobbies. 'in my own practical life' is awkward; 'in my daily life' or 'in my personal life' fits better. Removed repetitive 'I do.' Suggestion: use 'I have' or 'I enjoy' plus present simple for habitual actions.

× When I am in childhood, I love to play with my friends, like cricket. So at that time I love cricket and playing cricket.

✓ When I was a child, I loved to play with my friends, such as cricket. At that time I loved cricket and played it often.

The sentence mixes present tense ('am', 'love') with a past time reference. Use past tense 'was' and 'loved' for childhood activities. 'When I am in childhood' is ungrammatical; use 'When I was a child'. Also 'like cricket' should be 'such as cricket' or 'for example, cricket'. 'playing cricket' should be 'played it' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time frame and avoid repeating the same phrase.

× Yes, on that time I my hobby is playing outdoor games with my friends.

✓ Yes, at that time my hobby was playing outdoor games with my friends.

The sentence uses present tense 'is' while referring to a past time 'at that time'. Use past tense 'was'. Also 'on that time' is incorrect preposition; use 'at that time'. Remove the extra pronoun 'I'. Suggestion: use 'at that time' for past references and ensure verb tense agrees.

× Many times he play with me in ground.

✓ Many times he plays with me on the ground.

Subject-verb agreement requires third person singular 'plays' not 'play' (this also relates to third person singular issues). 'in ground' is incorrect preposition and missing article; use 'on the ground' or 'on the field'. Suggestion: use 'he plays' for habitual actions and choose correct preposition and article.

× And mostly my brother is also interested in cricket.

✓ Mostly, my brother is also interested in cricket.

This sentence is acceptable but needs slight punctuation adjustment; grammar is correct. The correction adds a comma for clarity. Note: if intended as habitual fact, present simple 'is interested' is correct. Suggestion: add punctuation for natural speech.