Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article use, and avoid redundancy (e.g., “my hobby when I have a leisure times” → “a hobby in my free time”).

例: I have a hobby in my free time: I enjoy playing the guitar. Playing helps me relax and relieves stress, and I usually practice for about 30 minutes each evening.

提案: Give a clear past-tense statement and specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct word choice (e.g., “visit that there” is incorrect). Mention when and with whom you did the hobby to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, when I was a child I loved running. For example, every weekend I ran with my friends in the local park, and we sometimes entered small races because it was exciting and healthy.

提案: This answer is unclear and contains many errors and irrelevant words. Start with a direct answer in present perfect or present tense, give a clear timeline, and provide one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unrelated or mistranslated words.

例: Yes, I have played the guitar since I was eight years old. It helped me cope with stress as a child, and I still practice it regularly after work to relax.

提案: Answer directly and clearly. State whether your hobbies are the same, then explain with specific reasons and examples. Avoid unclear vocabulary and filler words. Use comparative structures correctly.

例: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For instance, I enjoy playing the guitar, while my sister prefers painting because she finds it calming and easier to fit into her schedule.

× Yes, I have my hobby when I have a leisure times, I love to play guitar because I find it's very relaxing and help me to release my stress.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby. When I have leisure time, I love to play the guitar because I find it very relaxing and it helps me release my stress.

Errors: 'my hobby' is acceptable but 'a hobby' is more natural; 'a leisure times' mixes singular/plural and articles — use 'leisure time' (uncountable). Missing article before 'guitar' — 'play the guitar' is the common collocation. Verb agreement: 'help me' should be 'helps me' to agree with singular subject 'it' (playing guitar). Also combine into clear sentences. Suggestion: use 'leisure time' and ensure subject-verb agreement (it helps).

× When I was a child I loved running. This is because I find it's very fun on the weekend. I often visit that there with my friends for running.

✓ When I was a child, I loved running. This was because I found it very fun on weekends. I often went there with my friends to run.

Mixed tenses: main clause is past ('When I was a child I loved') so supporting clauses should be past: 'This is because I find' should be 'This was because I found'. 'On the weekend' general past habit -> 'on weekends'. 'I often visit that there' is incorrect: use past 'went' and correct preposition 'there' without 'that'; use infinitive 'to run' for purpose. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use correct verbs and prepositions.

× Kita, I think this is because I played when I was 8 years old and I love prejudice because it helped me to release my stress and nowadays I often prayed after finished work.

✓ I think this is because I started playing when I was eight years old, and I loved it because it helped me release my stress. Nowadays I often practice after I finish work.

Multiple problems: 'Kita' seems out of context — removed. 'played' needs an object: 'started playing' or 'played the guitar'. 'I love prejudice' is wrong word choice; likely meant 'I loved it'. Tense inconsistency: 'it helped' matches past; 'nowadays I often prayed after finished work' mixes past and incorrect verb forms — use present habit 'I often practice' and 'after I finish work'. Pronoun 'it' clarifies reference to playing guitar. Suggestion: use clear pronouns, correct verb forms, and appropriate vocabulary (practice/play, not prejudice).

× No, my family member the the love Kita. This is because the fire is very difficult then other hobby they love to uh painting or drawing something so they find is very relaxing.

✓ No, my family members don't like the guitar. This is because learning it is more difficult than other hobbies; they prefer painting or drawing because they find those activities very relaxing.

Issues: 'family member' should be plural 'family members'. 'the the love Kita' is unclear — interpreted as 'don't like the guitar'. 'the fire is very difficult' likely 'it is very difficult' or 'learning it is difficult'. Comparative error: use 'more difficult than other hobbies'. Verb forms and pronouns: 'they love to uh painting' should be 'they prefer painting' or 'they like painting'. Use plural 'those activities' to match plural noun. Suggestion: use plural nouns for groups, correct comparative structure 'more difficult than', and prefer 'prefer' + gerund or 'like' + gerund.