Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "many hobbies" without examples and correct small grammar errors (e.g., "on the Internet").

例: I have a few hobbies. For example, I enjoy singing soothing songs, especially acoustic covers, and I also create short videos for the Internet to share music and lifestyle tips.

提案: Correct tense and clarity: begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, explain the reason with a linking word, and give a specific example of the games or activities. Avoid unclear words ("fire") and grammar errors.

例: Yes, when I was a child I liked playing with my friends. For example, we often played hide-and-seek and football, and that relaxed me because it was fun and energetic.

提案: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing: state the hobby directly, give a brief example of how it started and how it continues now, and use linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Fix repetition and word choice errors.

例: Yes, I've loved singing since I was a child. I started by singing nursery rhymes, and now I enjoy singing Bollywood songs because they remind me of home and help me practice vocal techniques.

提案: Make the response grammatical and add a specific contrast: use a clear topic sentence, then name an example of your hobby and a family member's hobby, linked with a contrasting word like "however" or "but."

例: No, not really. For instance, I enjoy singing and making videos, whereas my sister prefers painting and my father likes gardening, so our interests are quite different.

× I love to sing soothing music.

✓ I love singing soothing music.

Using 'love to sing' is grammatically acceptable, but 'love singing' is more natural when describing a general hobby. This change uses the present participle form to indicate enjoyment of the activity as a habit. Suggestion: Use 'love' + -ing for habitual likes (love singing).

× Apart from that I'm a content creator so I like to make videos on Internet.

✓ Apart from that, I'm a content creator, so I like to make videos on the Internet.

The sentence needs commas for clarity and the correct preposition/article: 'on the Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. Also add commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Use 'on the Internet' and add commas to join clauses correctly.

× Yes, when I was a child my hobby is to play with my friends because fire that I get a sense of relaxation.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my hobby was playing with my friends because that gave me a sense of relaxation.

The time frame is past ('when I was a child'), so verbs must be in the past tense: 'is' -> 'was'; 'play' -> 'playing' (gerund after 'hobby'); 'fire' appears to be a typo for 'for' and the clause needs past tense 'gave'. Suggestion: Match verb tenses to the time reference and use gerund after 'hobby'. Fix typos.

× Yes, I have one hobby since my childhood and that is of singing.

✓ Yes, I have had one hobby since my childhood, and that is singing.

When indicating a hobby continuing from childhood to present, use present perfect 'have had'. The phrase 'is of singing' is incorrect; use 'that is singing' or 'which is singing'. Suggestion: Use 'have had' for duration from past to present and remove unnecessary preposition 'of'.

× When I I was style I love to sing and now also I love to sing Bollywood music.

✓ When I was small I loved to sing, and now I also love to sing Bollywood music.

This sentence mixes tenses and has typos: 'I I' and 'style' should be 'small'. For past time reference use past tense 'loved'. Maintain present tense 'love' for current habit. Suggestion: Fix typos, match verb tense to time references (past for childhood, present for current).

× Definitely not. Me and my family member have uh, unique hobbies and choice of interest.

✓ Definitely not. My family members and I have unique hobbies and choices of interest.

Subject pronoun should be 'My family members and I' not 'Me and my family member'. Also pluralize 'family members' and 'choices' to match 'unique hobbies'. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use subject pronoun order 'X and I', pluralize nouns when needed, and avoid filler words.