Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha doğal ve düzenli olmalı. Konu cümlesiyle doğrudan başlayın (ör. "Yes, I enjoy painting"). Ardından nedenini açık ve spesifik verin; duygularınızı belirtirken net ifadeler kullanın (ör. "it helps me relax and express myself"). Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini (uh, maybe, I mean) kaldırın. Cümle sayısını 2-3 ile sınırlandırın ve bağlaçlar kullanarak mantıklı akış sağlayın.

例: Yes, I enjoy painting. It helps me relax and express my creativity, so I usually paint in the evenings after work.

提案: Cevap daha net ve gramatik olarak doğru olmalı. "I had many hobbies as a child" gibi açık bir konu cümlesi kullanın. Örnek verirken spesifik zaman ve neden belirtin (ör. "I often rode bikes with my friends because it was fun and made me feel free"). Dolgu ifadelerini çıkarın ve düzgün fiil formları kullanın (rode/ride).

例: Yes, I had many hobbies as a child. For example, I often rode my bike with friends because it was fun and made me feel free.

提案: Cevap karışık ve anlaşılması zor; doğrudan soruya yanıt verin. Eğer devam eden bir hobi yoksa açıkça söyleyin ("No, I don't keep any childhood hobbies"). Eğer sürdürdüğünüz bir hobi varsa, ne olduğunu ve neden devam ettiğini belirtin. Kısa ve tutarlı iki cümle kullanın ve gereksiz özürlerden kaçının.

例: No, I haven't kept my childhood hobbies. I stopped them because I became busier, although I sometimes try old hobbies like drawing on weekends.

提案: Cevap net değil ve mantıksal bağlantı eksik. Doğrudan cevap verin: "Not really, we have different interests" veya "Yes, we enjoy the same hobby". Ardından kısa bir açıklama ekleyin (ör. "We have different tastes, for example my sister likes music while I prefer painting"). Dolgu kelimelerini atın ve örnek verin.

例: Not really, we have different hobbies. For instance, my sister enjoys playing the piano while I prefer painting, so we usually pursue our interests separately.

× Yes, uh, I like, uh, painting. Uh, maybe why I like painting because uh, my, I do painting, I really save I feel.

✓ Yes, I like painting. Maybe I like painting because when I paint I feel relaxed.

The original contains incomplete and disfluent clauses, wrong word choices and unclear references. This is a sentence structure error: phrases such as 'maybe why I like painting because' and 'my, I do painting, I really save I feel' are ungrammatical. Suggested improvements: simplify and use clear clauses (subject + verb + object), remove fillers ('uh'), and use appropriate vocabulary ('relaxed' instead of 'save'). Use 'when I paint' to show time and cause: 'I like painting because when I paint I feel relaxed.'

× Yes, I numerous uh like hobbies, uh, for example, I like riding a bike, probably uh, why I like ride a bike because uh with my friends, I feel.

✓ Yes, I had many hobbies. For example, I liked riding a bike. I probably liked riding a bike because I felt happy with my friends.

The phrase 'I numerous ... like hobbies' uses wrong quantifier and word order; this is an incorrect use of quantifiers and sentence structure. 'Numerous' must modify a plural noun with proper word order: 'I had numerous hobbies' or better 'I had many hobbies.' Also verb forms and tense were inconsistent ('I like ride' should be past 'I liked riding'). Improve by using correct quantifiers ('many' or 'numerous') and consistent past tense for childhood activities.

× Now, uh, I really want keep it because uh, sorry, uh, but I don't keep it.

✓ I really want to keep it, but I don't.

The original 'want keep' omits the necessary to-infinitive marker. This is a verb + -ing / infinitive form issue. After 'want' the correct structure is 'want to + base verb' not 'want + base verb' or 'want + -ing'. Simplify and remove unnecessary fillers: 'I really want to keep it, but I don't.'

× Now, uh, we are really, uh, different people understand. Uh, I don't know why, but uh, it's so normalizing for us.

✓ Now we are very different people. I don't know why, but that's normal for us.

The original contains awkward phrasing 'different people understand' and 'it's so normalizing for us' which are ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure error and incorrect word choice. Use simple, clear sentences: 'we are very different people' and 'that's normal for us.' 'Normalizing' is the wrong form; use 'normal' or 'that's normal'.