Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cấu trúc câu cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Hạn chế lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'S surfing' và 'many video'), sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, nối ý bằng từ nối và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về loại nội dung bạn xem. Giữ độ dài trả lời không quá 5 câu.

例: Yes, I do. My favourite hobby is surfing the internet, especially watching short educational and travel videos. I often spend an hour each evening watching vlogs or tutorials because they help me relax and learn new things. For example, I recently learned simple cooking tips from a YouTube channel.

提案: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và dùng từ chính xác (ví dụ: 'playing with doors' không phù hợp). Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề, sau đó nêu chi tiết cụ thể về đồ chơi bạn chơi (ví dụ: puzzles, building blocks), và dùng từ nối để mạch lạc. Giữ câu ngắn và rõ.

例: Yes, I did. As a child, I loved playing with puzzles and building blocks. I used to spend hours assembling jigsaw puzzles because it challenged me and improved my patience. That memory is still very vivid and makes me nostalgic.

提案: Cần sửa một số lỗi cấu trúc và phát âm trong câu (ví dụ: 'when I was a shy' → 'when I was shy'). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề, dùng từ nối để giải thích vì sao tiếp tục duy trì sở thích, và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất hoặc nơi bạn đạp xe.

例: Yes, I have. I started cycling when I was a child and I still ride regularly now. I cycle three times a week around my neighbourhood because it helps me relax and keeps me fit. Also, I enjoy exploring nearby parks on weekends.

提案: Cần nói gọn, sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'me and my brother' → 'my brother and I'), tránh tiếng lấp lửng ('umm') và thêm cụ thể về cách chơi cùng nhau (thời gian, địa điểm, lợi ích cụ thể). Dùng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, my brother and I share a hobby: we both play badminton. We practise together twice a week at the local sports centre, usually in the evenings. Playing regularly not only keeps us fit but also strengthens our relationship.

× Yes, I have. Probably my favorite hobby is S surfing the Internet.

✓ Yes, I do. Probably my favorite hobby is surfing the Internet.

The student used 'have' incorrectly to answer 'Do you have any hobbies?'. Use 'do' for general present possession questions. Also remove the extraneous 'S' before 'surfing'. Suggestion: Answer 'Yes, I do.' and say 'my favorite hobby is surfing the Internet.'

× I often watch many video from the Internet because it made me feel interesting and comfortable.

✓ I often watch many videos on the Internet because they make me feel interested and comfortable.

'Many video' is incorrect; use plural 'many videos'. Use preposition 'on' for Internet content. 'It made me feel interesting' is wrong: 'make' should match present tense 'watch' and subject 'videos' so 'they make me feel interested'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns and consistent present tense: 'I often watch many videos on the Internet because they make me feel interested and comfortable.'

× Yeah, I like it.

✓ Yeah, I like it.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.

× Absolutely yes.

✓ Absolutely, yes.

Not a modal error but phrasing: add a comma for natural speech. However original is acceptable; keep as 'Absolutely, yes.'

× My favorite hobby whenever I try was playing toys, playing with the I often play with doors or puzzles.

✓ My favorite hobby when I was a child was playing with toys, like doors or puzzles.

Original has word order and incorrect words: 'whenever I try' is wrong for childhood; use 'when I was a child'. 'Playing toys' should be 'playing with toys'. 'the I often play with doors' is ungrammatical; maybe meant 'toys' not 'doors'. Suggestion: 'My favorite hobby when I was a child was playing with toys, like puzzles.'

× It's make me feel so interesting and this memory of my life.

✓ It made me feel so interested, and it's a memorable part of my life.

'It's make' incorrect subject-verb and tense: should be past 'It made me feel'. 'Interesting' describes something that causes interest; to describe personal feeling use 'interested'. Also clarify 'this memory of my life' to 'it's a memorable part of my life.' Suggestion: Use correct tense and adjective forms.

× Yes, when I was a shy I often rode my bike every day and I still ride a bike regularly now because it make me feel uh, relax and stay healthy and it's good for me.

✓ Yes, when I was shy I often rode my bike every day, and I still ride a bike regularly now because it makes me feel relaxed and helps me stay healthy.

'When I was a shy' should be 'when I was shy' (no article). 'It make' should be 'it makes' (third person singular present). 'Relax' should be adjective 'relaxed'. Also improve parallel structure: 'makes me feel relaxed and helps me stay healthy.'

× Yes, me and my brother love umm play, play badminton to me and my brother often play together uh twice a week umm play badminton is very useful and stay healthy, so it's very good.

✓ Yes, my brother and I love to play badminton. My brother and I often play together twice a week. Playing badminton is very useful for staying healthy, so it's great.

Use correct subject pronoun order 'my brother and I' not 'me and my brother'. Use 'love to play' or 'love playing'. Break run-on sentence into clear sentences. 'Play badminton is very useful and stay healthy' incorrect: use 'Playing badminton is useful for staying healthy.' Suggestion: Use subject pronouns correctly, infinitive or -ing appropriately, and separate ideas into sentences for clarity.