Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接的でよいですが、文法ミスと冗長さが目立ちます。具体性を高め、文を完結に保つこと。例えば主題文の後に1–2文で理由や具体例（どんな料理が好きか、どのように集中できるか）を加え、二重語（on on）や不完全な文を直しましょう。また接続語（because, so, therefore）を適切に使って論理を明確にします。発音や流暢さも改善するとより自然に聞こえます。

例: Yes, my main hobby is cooking. I enjoy it because it helps me relax and focus, especially when I try new recipes like Japanese soups. For example, last week I spent two hours making a miso soup with homemade dashi, which was very satisfying.

提案: 時制の誤り（現在形の like を過去形に）と反復・語順の問題が多いです。まず過去の習慣を示す過去形を使い、冗長な繰り返しを避けて一文にまとめましょう。さらに父親と一緒に遊んだ具体的なエピソード（どのくらいの頻度で、どんな思い出か）を一つ追加すると良いです。接続詞（because, so, and）で文をつなぎ、流れを改善してください。

例: When I was a child, I liked playing badminton. I often played it with my father on weekends, and he taught me how to serve and rally, which made it a fun family activity.

提案: 構成は良く、意味も明確です。ただし文を二つに分けて、接続語でつなぐとより自然になります。加えて“play the piano”について具体的な情報（どのくらいの期間、どのレベルだったか、なぜまた練習したいか）を一つ加えると深みが出ます。文法は比較的正確なので流暢さと語彙の幅を少し広げましょう。

例: I don't have a hobby that I've kept since childhood, but I used to play the piano when I was young. I studied piano for five years and enjoyed classical pieces, so I'd like to start practicing again to regain my skills.

提案: 語法と数の一致（mother also likes; family enjoys）が必要です。表現がやや不自然なのでシンプルに言い換えましょう。『料理が家族の絆を深める』というアイデアは良いので、具体例（家族でよく作る料理や一緒に料理する時間）を入れて説得力を高めてください。また冗長な表現（"cooking is a cooking place"）は避けましょう。

例: Yes. My mother also likes cooking because our family loves food. We often cook and eat together on weekends, which helps us bond and share stories.

× Cooking makes me very happy because I can concentrate on on it and.

✓ Cooking makes me very happy because I can concentrate on it.

The issue is an unnecessary repeated preposition 'on' and an extra conjunction 'and' ending the sentence. Remove the duplicate 'on' and the trailing 'and' to complete the sentence. Also ensure the verb phrase 'concentrate on' is followed by the object 'it'.

× When I was a child, I like to play the badminton, play badminton.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to play badminton.

The sentence mixes past time reference 'When I was a child' with present tense 'like'. Use past tense 'liked' for consistency. Also 'the' before 'badminton' is unnecessary in English when naming the sport, so remove it.

× I enjoyed with my enjoyed playing, playing it with my father who taught me how to play badminton.

✓ I enjoyed playing it with my father, who taught me how to play badminton.

The original has repeated words and incorrect word order ('enjoyed with my enjoyed playing'). Use the verb 'enjoy' followed directly by the gerund 'playing'. Add a comma before the nonrestrictive relative clause 'who taught me...' to improve clarity.

× I don't have any hobby that I've had since childhood, but when I was a child I played the piano, so in the future I'd like to practice it again.

✓ I don't have any hobby that I've had since childhood, but when I was a child I played the piano, so in the future I'd like to practice it again.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but watch tense consistency: 'I've had since childhood' (present perfect) is correct to describe a hobby continuing to now. No change needed. Ensure 'I'd' clearly means 'I would' for future intention.

× Yeah, my mother also like cooking because our family enjoy eating very much.

✓ Yeah, my mother also likes cooking because our family enjoys eating very much.

Subject-verb agreement error: for third person singular subjects like 'my mother' add 's' to the verb ('likes'). 'Our family' is a singular collective noun here, so the verb should be 'enjoys' if treated as a unit. Alternatively, if you mean individual family members, use 'we enjoy'. Make the subject and verb agree.

× So cooking is a cooking place, an important role to build good relations.

✓ So cooking plays an important role in building good relationships.

The phrase 'is a cooking place' is unclear and unidiomatic. Use 'plays an important role' to express function, and 'in building good relationships' is the correct prepositional phrase; use the gerund 'building' and the plural 'relationships' for natural English.