Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Mention specific activities and one brief reason. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., 'and', 'so', 'because'). Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct tense/word order.

例: Yes, I enjoy listening to music and visiting new places in my free time because they help me relax. For example, I often go to local cafés or parks while playing chill playlists to unwind.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, avoid repetition, and give a specific detail (what music, why). Use a linking word to add the detail (e.g., 'and', 'because', 'so'). Limit to 2 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoyed listening to music when I was a child. Specifically, I used to listen to pop music because it was catchy and easy to sing along to.

提案: Provide a concise topic sentence using present perfect for a hobby since childhood, then contrast past and present with a linking word like 'but' or 'however'. Give a short reason for the change. Keep sentences fluent and grammatical.

例: Yes, I've loved listening to music since I was a child. I used to listen to pop music, but now I prefer hip hop because I enjoy its rhythms and lyrics.

提案: Answer directly, correct grammar (use plural/singular properly), and include a clear contrast with a linking word such as 'however' or 'but'. Give a brief specific example of differences in taste.

例: Yes, my family and I all enjoy listening to music, but our tastes differ. For instance, my mother likes classical music, my brother prefers electronic, and I usually listen to hip hop.

× Yes, I like to visit, listen to music and in my free time and it let me feel relaxed.

✓ Yes, I like visiting and listening to music in my free time because they help me feel relaxed.

The original sentence mixed infinitive and gerund forms and had incorrect structure. 'Like' is commonly followed by gerunds for activities (visiting, listening). 'And in my free time' was misplaced; combine phrases into one clause. 'It let me feel relaxed' has tense and subject issues — use plural 'they' to refer to activities and 'help' to express general truth.

× Yes, the hobby that when I was a child is also was also listen to music and when I was a child I listened to pop music.

✓ Yes, my hobby when I was a child was also listening to music; I listened to pop music then.

The sentence contains redundant and misplaced phrases ('the hobby that when I was a child is also was also') and wrong verb forms. Use a clear subject 'my hobby' and past tense 'was' with the gerund 'listening' to describe a past habitual action. Also avoid repeating 'when I was a child' twice.

× Yes, I have had a hobby since I was a child. I'd like to listen to music, but when I was child I listened to pop music and right now I listen to hip hop music.

✓ Yes, I have had a hobby since I was a child. I like listening to music; when I was a child I listened to pop music, and now I listen to hip hop.

Use 'like listening' (gerund) after 'like' for habits. Add the article 'a' in 'when I was a child'. Use consistent tense contrast: past 'listened to' for childhood and present 'listen to' for current habit. 'Right now' can be shortened to 'now' for naturalness.

× Yes, we have the same hobby as listen to music, but the kind of music that we we have different.

✓ Yes, we share the same hobby of listening to music, but we like different kinds of music.

Original has awkward comparison and duplicated 'we'. Use 'share the same hobby of listening to music' and correct word order 'we like different kinds of music'. 'Kind of' should be plural 'kinds of' when referring to various types.