Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ понятен, но неестественен и содержит множество грамматических ошибок и лишних слов. Нужно дать четкое тематическое предложение, затем 1–2 конкретных детали; избегать перечислений без связки. Работайте над артиклями и формой существительных (a book, playing instruments), использованием герундиев и предлогов (walking, hanging out). Также сократите ответ до максимум 3–4 предложений и добавьте связующие слова (for example, also, and).

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. For example, I enjoy reading books and writing short stories; I also play the guitar and like going for walks with friends. These activities help me relax and improve my creativity.

提案: Ответ содержит повторения и ошибки в структуре; предложения обрывочные (When I was a child.). Нужно начать с топик-сентенции, затем дать 1–2 конкретных примера с причинами или впечатлениями, используя связки (for example, because). Исправьте грамматику: I liked having many activities / I enjoyed playing games and watching cartoons and films. Избегайте фраз вроде "it's so interesting for me" — лучше сказать why it was interesting.

例: Yes, I did. As a child I enjoyed many activities, for example playing outdoor games and watching cartoons and family films because they were fun and easy to follow. I remember spending afternoons with my friends playing hide-and-seek and laughing a lot.

提案: Ответ неестественный и содержит повторения и некорректные времена (I had vs I have). Нужна ясная формулировка: say that you have enjoyed something since childhood, give specific examples and a brief reason. Избегайте упоминания «watching the phone» — лучше «using my phone» или «watching videos on my phone». Используйте связку since/for и простые времена правильно.

例: Yes, I have enjoyed watching cartoons and films since I was a child. I also used to listen to a lot of music and watch videos on my phone, which helped me learn new words and relax.

提案: Ответ запутанный, много пауз и ошибки в грамматике (he does sports / I do not like sports). Нужно дать прямой ответ, затем краткое сравнение и причину, используя связующие слова (however, whereas, because). Уберите междометия и заполнители (umm, uh). Дайте 2 предложения: одно о различии, второе с объяснением.

例: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For example, my brother enjoys sports like table tennis, whereas I prefer studying and reading because I find them more relaxing.

× I have many hobbies, for example reading book or writing or studying or playing on the instrument and walking hangout.

✓ I have many hobbies, for example reading books, writing, studying, playing an instrument, and hanging out.

The noun 'book' should be plural after 'reading' when speaking about a general activity: 'reading books'. 'Playing on the instrument' is incorrect; use 'playing an instrument'. 'Walking hangout' is ungrammatical; the intended idea is 'hanging out' (spending time with friends). Also use commas to separate items in a list. Suggestions: use plural nouns for general activities (reading books), use 'playing an instrument', and replace 'walking hangout' with 'hanging out'.

× When I was a child. I liked have many activities, playing different games and watching TV, watching the cartoons, films and it's so interesting for me.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to do many activities, such as playing different games, watching TV and cartoons, and watching films; it was very interesting to me.

The original has a sentence fragment 'When I was a child.' which should attach to the main clause. 'I liked have' is incorrect; English requires 'liked to do' or 'liked doing'. 'Watching the cartoons' should be 'watching cartoons' (no definite article for general plural). 'It's so interesting for me' must match past time: 'it was very interesting to me'. Suggestions: connect dependent clauses properly, use 'liked to do' or gerund form, remove unnecessary articles with plural nouns used generally, and keep verb tense consistent.

× Yes I do. I had a hobby since childhood. It's watching TV and watching the phone, watching the cartoons, films, listening music and also like this.

✓ Yes I do. I've had hobbies since childhood. I used to watch TV and videos on my phone, watch cartoons and films, and listen to music.

'I had a hobby since childhood' mixes past simple with 'since'; present perfect is required: 'I've had'. 'Watching the phone' is unnatural; say 'watch videos on my phone'. 'Watching the cartoons' should be 'watch cartoons' (no 'the'). 'Listening music' requires preposition 'to': 'listen to music'. Also combine items in a natural list and use consistent tense when referring to ongoing or habitual actions. Suggestions: use present perfect for actions continuing from the past, use correct verb+preposition patterns (listen to), and natural collocations (watch videos on my phone).

× However, my brother, umm, sportsman and uh, he do sports table tennis, uh, but I not like sports.

✓ However, my brother is an athlete and he plays table tennis, but I don't like sports.

Third person singular requires the verb 'to be' in 'is' and adds -s for present simple: 'he plays'. 'He do' is incorrect. 'I not like' must be negative 'I don't like'. Also use 'athlete' instead of 'sportsman' for natural English. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement in present simple (he plays), use auxiliary 'do/does' for negatives ('doesn't/ don't'), and use 'is' for descriptions.

× Uh, I like to studying, uh, and uh, it's not.

✓ I like studying, and it's not for me.

Use either 'like to study' or 'like studying' but not 'like to studying' (mixing infinitive and gerund forms). 'It's not' is vague; clarify with 'it's not for me' meaning 'I don't like it'. Suggestions: choose correct verb pattern (like + gerund or like + to-infinitive) and complete thoughts with clear expressions.