Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сократите и структурируйте ответ: сначала коротко ответьте на вопрос, затем приведите 1–2 конкретных причины с логическими связками. Уберите повторы и исправьте грамматику (например, «helps me relax», «I try new tastes», «another country's cuisine»).

例: Yes, I do. My favourite hobby is cooking because it helps me relax after work and I enjoy experimenting with new flavours. For example, I often try dishes from Italian and Thai cuisine to learn different techniques and ingredients.

提案: Начните с прямого ответа, затем дайте одну-две конкретные детали и используйте связки. Исправьте времена (past simple) и слова (interested → interested in). Избегайте нерелевантных замечаний (например, «saw television first time»), если они не связаны с хобби.

例: Yes. I had several hobbies as a child, but I especially enjoyed playing volleyball. I started playing at primary school and liked the teamwork and exercise it gave me.

提案: Дайте чёткий топик-сентенс и одну конкретную поддержку. Уберите паузы и говорящие «ух». Используйте правильные формы (e.g. "my mother cooked delicious food", "I wanted to learn to cook other cuisines").

例: Yes. I've loved cooking since I was a child because my mother cooked delicious meals and inspired me. From a young age I practised simple recipes and later tried to learn dishes from other countries.

提案: Ответьте прямо и добавьте конкретный пример совместной деятельности. Исправьте слово order и уберите паузы. Используйте связки: «so», «for example», «together».

例: Yes. My mother and I both enjoy cooking, so we often cook together at weekends. For example, last month we tried making a Korean meal and practised new recipes together.

× Yes I do my favorite hobby is cooking because it helps me relaxing, enjoying during cooking and also I try to new tastes and I try cooking another country's cuisine.

✓ Yes, I do. My favorite hobby is cooking because it helps me relax and enjoy the process, and I try new tastes and cook other countries' cuisines.

The sentence contains multiple sentence structure and verb form issues. Use a full stop after 'Yes, I do' to separate answers. 'Helps me relaxing' is incorrect; use the base form after 'helps' (helps me relax). 'Enjoying during cooking' is awkward; use 'enjoy the process' or 'enjoy cooking'. 'I try to new tastes' should be 'I try new tastes' (remove 'to'). 'I try cooking another country's cuisine' is better as 'cook other countries' cuisines' for plural and possessive. Improve by splitting into clear clauses and using correct verb forms. Suggestions: separate ideas into sentences, use 'helps me relax', use 'enjoy the process', remove unnecessary 'to', and use plural possessive for 'countries' cuisines'.

× Well when I was young I have more hobbies especially playing volleyball because I interested it.

✓ Well, when I was young I had more hobbies, especially playing volleyball, because I was interested in it.

The original mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'I have more hobbies' should be past 'I had more hobbies' to match 'when I was young'. 'Because I interested it' is ungrammatical; use 'I was interested in it'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use correct verb 'be interested in'.

× When I was 7 if I'm not mistaken I saw television first time and.

✓ When I was seven, if I'm not mistaken, I watched television for the first time.

Sentence structure is incomplete and uses awkward phrasing. 'Saw television first time and.' is incomplete and 'saw' is acceptable but 'watched television for the first time' is natural. Remove the trailing 'and' and add commas around the parenthetical phrase. Also spell out numbers in speech 'seven' optional.

× Yes, of course, when I was young, uh, my mother uh, cooking more delicious and tastes foods.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was young, my mother cooked more delicious and tasty food.

The clause lacks a finite verb: 'my mother uh, cooking' should be past 'my mother cooked'. 'More delicious and tastes foods' is incorrect: use 'more delicious and tasty food' or simply 'cooked more delicious, tasty food'. Remove filler 'uh' in formal responses.

× I at that time, uh, I want to cooking delicious, uh, another cuisines, uh, meals.

✓ At that time, I wanted to cook delicious meals from other cuisines.

Tense and verb form are incorrect. 'I want to cooking' mixes present 'want' with gerund 'cooking'; instead, for past narrative use 'wanted to cook' followed by the base verb. 'Another cuisines' is incorrect number and placement; use 'other cuisines'. Streamline: 'wanted to cook delicious meals from other cuisines'.

× Yes, of course my mother's hobby is cooking and me uh, we uh, cooking together new uh, meals and, and try to cook another cuisine.

✓ Yes, of course. My mother's hobby is cooking, and we cook new meals together and try to cook cuisines from other countries.

The sentence has redundant pronouns and incorrect verb forms. 'Me ... we ... cooking' is ungrammatical; use 'we cook' (present simple for habitual action). 'Try to cook another cuisine' should be 'try to cook cuisines from other countries' or 'try other cuisines'. Remove fillers and duplicate conjunctions. Maintain present simple to describe current shared hobbies.