Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сократите повторения, стройте предложение грамотно: начните с общей темы, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных деталей. Избегайте лишних слов и пауз, используйте связку для перечисления.

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy playing volleyball and reading books, and I also like solving math problems in my free time.

提案: Уберите междометия и звуки (uh, umm). Дайте чёткое утверждение, затем конкретные примеры и одно короткое пояснение, используя связующие слова для плавности.

例: Yes, I did. As a child I spent a lot of time on my iPad, playing games like Roblox, and I also often played in the park with my friends.

提案: Формулируйте одно чёткое предложение о том, что сохранилось с детства, затем добавьте конкретику. Избегайте грамматических ошибок с временем и артиклями; используйте связку и корректные формы глаголов.

例: Yes, I have kept two hobbies since childhood: reading books and playing volleyball. I have always spent more of my free time on sports, especially volleyball.

提案: Отвечайте напрямую, затем уточняйте, как именно вы разделяете хобби с семьёй. Уберите паузы и говорящие звуки; используйте связки (for example, we often...) и точные глагольные формы.

例: Yes, we share similar hobbies. For example, my family and I often play sports together, such as volleyball and running, which helps us stay active and bond.

× I have hobby my hobby volleyball and read book and math.

✓ I have a hobby. My hobbies are volleyball, reading books, and math.

The student omitted articles and used incorrect singular/plural forms. Use 'a hobby' for one hobby and plural 'hobbies' for multiple items. Use gerund 'reading' for activities and plural 'books'. Improve by including articles before singular countable nouns and matching singular/plural forms. Grammar problem type ID: 22 and 1

× I did. I spent uh, my time in iPad, uh, and in park, umm, I, uh, played uh, in Roblox, uh.

✓ I did. I spent my time on the iPad and in the park. I played Roblox.

Use 'on' with devices (on the iPad) and 'in the park' with places; include the definite article 'the' for 'iPad' and 'park' here. For games use 'play' plus the game name without a preposition. Improve by learning standard prepositions for devices and locations and when to use 'the'. Grammar problem type ID: 11 and 22

× I do, I read a book and uh, played volleyball. Uh, I more time, uh, I spent more time sport.

✓ I do. I read books and played volleyball. I spent more time on sports.

Maintain consistent tense: 'read' (present) and 'played' (past) conflict; here student affirms ongoing hobby since childhood so use past for childhood activities or present perfect if continuing. Use 'sports' plural and 'spend time on' with proper preposition. Improve by choosing consistent tense and correct collocations ('spend time on sports'). Grammar problem type ID: 6 and 5 and 11 and 1

× Yes, I do sport, uh, as my family hobby, we spent uh, doing sports.

✓ Yes, I do. My family also enjoys sports; we spend time doing sports together.

Separately answer 'I do.' Use 'also' to indicate shared hobbies. Use present tense 'enjoy' or 'enjoys' depending on subject; 'we spend time doing sports' is correct collocation. Improve by breaking into clear sentences and using correct verb forms and connectors. Grammar problem type ID: 12 and 22 and 26