Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, reduce filler words, correct grammar (e.g., "I enjoy reading"), and give a brief specific detail or example (what you read and when). Use one linking phrase if you add a reason.

例: I enjoy reading. I usually read contemporary novels and non-fiction about history because they help me relax and improve my knowledge. For example, I read for about an hour every evening before bed.

提案: Use correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence about your childhood hobby, then give specific details (what you grew, where the garden was). Avoid repetition and fillers.

例: Yes, I had a hobby of gardening when I was a child. I helped my parents plant flowers and small vegetables in a front-yard garden near our house, and I enjoyed watering the plants every morning.

提案: Answer clearly whether you still have that childhood hobby. Use simple past for discontinued hobbies and present tense for current ones. Provide a reason for stopping or switching hobbies and a brief detail about your new hobby.

例: I used to enjoy gardening when I was a child, but I no longer do it because I moved to an apartment without a garden. Now I enjoy reading instead, especially modern novels, and I read regularly in the evenings.

提案: Give a clear direct answer and expand with a short explanation and example. State whether your hobbies differ from your family's and why, using linking words like 'however' or 'but'. Avoid repetitions and filler sounds.

例: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. For instance, I like reading and my parents prefer gardening and cooking, so we each spend free time on different activities. However, we sometimes share tasks like cooking together on weekends.

× Yes, uh, I have a hobby. My favorite hobby is reading, uh, because it's very important for my life and uh, my study.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby. My favorite hobby is reading because it's very important for my life and my studies.

The noun 'study' in this context should be plural 'studies' to refer to the activity of studying in general. Use 'my studies' when talking about one's educational work. Also remove filler words and unnecessary commas for clearer spoken English.

× So, umm, I'm go out, uh, for this hobby.

✓ So, I go out for this hobby.

The original uses an incorrect auxiliary 'I'm' with base verb 'go' which mixes present continuous form and simple present. Either 'I'm going out' (present continuous) or 'I go out' (simple present) is correct; choose 'I go out' to state a habitual action. Remove fillers for clarity.

× Yes, when I was child, I have a hobby, uh, when I was child, uh, I making a garden.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had a hobby: I used to make a garden.

Missing indefinite article: say 'a child'. Tense inconsistency: 'when I was a child' refers to past, so use past tense 'had' and 'used to make' or 'made' for habitual past actions. Also 'I making' is grammatically incorrect; use 'I used to make' or 'I made'.

× This garden, uh is floor garden, uh, it's great in front my house.

✓ The garden was a flower garden; it was in front of my house and it looked great.

'Floor garden' is likely a mispronunciation of 'flower garden'. Also preposition and article errors: say 'in front of my house' and include articles 'a flower garden'. Use past tense 'was' to match 'when I was a child'.

× Yes, I have a hobby that I had since my childhood but I eliminated the hobby.

✓ Yes, I had a hobby since my childhood, but I gave it up.

Mixing present perfect 'have' with past 'had' is inconsistent. Use past tense 'had' or present perfect 'have had' depending on meaning. 'Eliminated the hobby' is unnatural; use 'gave it up' to mean stopped doing it.

× But new hobby is reading so I like it and I do it.

✓ But my new hobby is reading, so I enjoy it and I do it regularly.

Missing possessive 'my' before 'new hobby'. Add a comma before 'so'. 'I like it' is acceptable but 'I enjoy it' sounds more natural; add 'regularly' to indicate habit if intended.

× No, uh, no, uh, I have uh, no hobby, uh, of my family.

✓ No, I don't share the same hobbies as my family.

Original uses awkward phrasing 'no hobby of my family.' Use negative contraction and verb 'share' to express that hobbies are not the same. Also avoid repeating fillers.

× Uh, I like it. So just I have a hobby. I have no hobby of my family.

✓ I enjoy my hobby, so I have my own interests; I don't have the same hobbies as my family.

Fragmented and repetitive sentences; restructure to form coherent statements. Replace 'I have no hobby of my family' with 'I don't have the same hobbies as my family' for clarity and correct structure.