Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Try to keep responses under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I mostly read non-fiction books about personal development because they help me learn new study techniques and stay motivated. For example, I recently finished a book on time management that improved my daily routine.

提案: Use correct verb tense and provide a short reason or example. Reduce pauses and fillers; use one linking phrase to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I enjoyed gardening because I liked growing flowers and vegetables. For example, I used to plant tomatoes with my mother and water them every morning.

提案: Answer directly and use past-to-present continuity language. Say how long you have kept the hobby and give a specific reason or memory. Avoid vague statements like “everyone like it.”

例: Yes, I have continued gardening since childhood. I have always preferred flower gardening because caring for plants relaxes me and watching them bloom gives me a sense of achievement. For instance, I still grow roses in small pots on my balcony.

提案: Make your stance clear and give a brief explanation with specific details. Avoid contradictory phrases and unfinished sentences. Use a linking word to expand your answer by one sentence.

例: No, my hobbies are different from most of my family. For example, I enjoy gardening while my parents prefer watching films, so I often tend the plants alone and share photos of them with my family instead of gardening together.

× Thank you for a question.

✓ Thank you for the question.

Use of the definite article 'the' is required before a specific noun phrase here. 'A question' implies any question; the speaker refers to the examiner's particular question, so use 'the question'. Suggestion: Use 'the' when referring to a specific item both speaker and listener know.

× I have a hobby, my uh, important hobby is reading because I'm, I like to study, umm, study is very important for my uh, for, for my life.

✓ I have a hobby. My most important hobby is reading because I like to study; studying is very important in my life.

Run-on and repetition make the sentence unclear. Break into shorter sentences and use correct noun forms. Use 'most important' to show emphasis and 'studying' (gerund) as a noun meaning the activity. Suggestion: Separate ideas into sentences and use gerunds for activities (studying).

× Umm, when I am child, uh, I have a hobby.

✓ Umm, when I was a child, I had a hobby.

Referring to a past time ('when I was a child') requires past tense 'was' and 'had'. Also include the article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood events.

× This uh, hobby name is uh, gardening.

✓ This hobby is called gardening.

The original uses awkward phrasing and omits necessary verb structure. Use the passive or copular structure 'is called' to name the hobby. No article needed before 'gardening' as it is an uncountable noun here. Suggestion: Use 'is called' or 'is named' to introduce names, and keep phrasing concise.

× I like gardening, umm.

✓ I liked gardening.

If this sentence refers to childhood hobby (past), use past tense 'liked'. If referring to current habit, present 'I like gardening' is fine. Based on context (answering about childhood), past tense is appropriate. Suggestion: Match tense to the time frame: use past for childhood.

× Yes, uh, I have a hobby, uh, when I was child, my uh, favorite hobby is a gardening.

✓ Yes, I had a hobby when I was a child; my favorite hobby was gardening.

Talking about childhood requires past tense ('had', 'was'). Article 'a' before 'child' is needed. 'Gardening' as hobby uses no article; 'a gardening' is incorrect. Suggestion: Use past tense and omit unnecessary articles with uncountable hobby nouns.

× Uh, yes, uh, most of the time, uh, I like uh, flower gardening because, uh, everyone like it.

✓ Yes, most of the time I liked flower gardening because everyone liked it.

When continuing to describe a childhood hobby, verbs should be past tense ('liked'). Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'everyone likes' in present, but in past use 'everyone liked'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and ensure subject-verb agreement ('everyone likes/liked').

× Uh, no. Uh, I have the same hobbies.

✓ No. I do not have the same hobbies.

The original is contradictory and uses present tense 'have' after 'no'. Use negative construction 'do not have' to express difference. Also clarify meaning: 'the same hobbies' requires context; inverted meaning intended is 'I do not share the same hobbies.' Suggestion: Use complete negative forms and precise phrasing like 'I do not share the same hobbies as my family.'

× Uh, my family members, uh, I'm only one person.

✓ Among my family members, I am the only one who likes it.

Original is fragmented and unclear. 'I'm only one person' is irrelevant. To convey that only the speaker shares the hobby, use 'I am the only one who likes it' or 'I am the only one who does it.' Suggestion: Use relative clause 'who' to describe the person and make the sentence complete.

× I like it and I create a.

✓ I like it and I grow/create plants in the garden.

Original sentence is incomplete: 'I create a.' lacks an object. Provide the object to complete the idea. If meaning is that the student creates gardens or grows plants, state it explicitly. Suggestion: Always include the object of 'create' or use a clearer verb like 'grow' for gardening activities.