Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and natural: state one hobby, use correct grammar (e.g., “air cooking” unclear — likely “air frying” or “cooking”), avoid repetition, and keep answers concise (max 3–4 short sentences). Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “because” or “so”). Add one specific example of a dish you cook.

例: I enjoy cooking, especially using my air fryer, because it’s quick and healthy. I often cook dinners for my husband, such as roasted vegetables and crispy chicken. When I come home from work, I usually prepare a simple meal so we can eat together.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, use past tense for childhood, avoid fillers (uh, um), and provide one specific detail about drawing (what you drew or why you liked it). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word if adding a reason.

例: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child, including singing, dancing and drawing. Drawing was my favorite because I enjoyed sketching animals and landscapes, which helped me relax and be creative.

提案: Answer directly and use present perfect or present simple to show continuity (e.g., “I have enjoyed drawing since childhood”). Remove hesitations and be specific about what you make and where you display it. Use a linking word such as “so” or “and” to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I have enjoyed drawing since I was a child, and I still paint now. I create many paintings and often hang them on the walls in my home, which makes the rooms feel more personal.

提案: Respond directly and use clearer grammar: say “I share a hobby with my mother — singing.” Avoid saying your voice is “so good” without modesty; instead give a brief example of when you sing together. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid fillers.

例: Yes, I share a hobby with my mother: we both enjoy singing. We often sing together at family gatherings, and she taught me many traditional songs, which I love to practice at home.

× Many hobbies but air cooking is my favorite hobby.

✓ I have many hobbies, but air cooking is my favorite hobby.

Missing subject and article problem: sentences need a subject and proper articles. Add 'I have' to supply the subject and make the sentence complete. Also keep 'air cooking' if it is intended; use a comma before 'but' to join clauses.

× I love to cooking for my family.

✓ I love cooking for my family.

Incorrect verb + -ing form: after 'love' use either the gerund (cooking) or the infinitive ('to cook'), but not 'to cooking'. Use 'I love cooking' for natural English.

× I make many dishes for my husband.

✓ I make many dishes for my husband.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'many dishes' correctly uses plural. No change needed.

× Whenever I go outside I I I eat a dish.

✓ Whenever I go out, I eat something.

Repetition and unnatural phrasing: 'go outside' is acceptable but 'go out' is more natural in this context, and 'eat a dish' is unnatural; use 'eat something' or 'have something to eat'. Remove repeated filler words and add a comma after the dependent clause.

× When I reach home I surely to make again this D sharp.

✓ When I reach home, I surely make this dish again.

Incorrect infinitive and word choice: 'to make' is misplaced and 'D sharp' seems to be a mishearing of 'dish'. Use simple present for habitual actions: 'I make this dish again.' Place adverb 'surely' later or better use 'always': 'I always make this dish again.'

× Yes, when I was child.

✓ Yes, when I was a child.

Article error with past tense clause: 'child' needs the indefinite article 'a' when describing past age. Keep past tense 'was'.

× I have many hobbies like singing, dancing and drawing.

✓ I had many hobbies like singing, dancing, and drawing.

Tense and quantifier consistency: the question asked about childhood hobbies, so use past tense 'had'. 'Many hobbies' is acceptable; add commas for list clarity.

× Drawing is my best hobby. Uh, I love to, uh, drawing, I love to, uh, I love to make things on our drawing sheet.

✓ Drawing is my favorite hobby. I love drawing; I love to make things on my drawing sheet.

Verb form consistency: use 'love drawing' (gerund) or 'love to draw' (infinitive) consistently. 'Best hobby' is acceptable but 'favorite hobby' is more natural. Replace 'our drawing sheet' with 'my drawing sheet' unless referring to a shared sheet.

× Yes, uh, like the uh, I uh, told you before, uh, I have a hobby of drawing, uh, now I uh, also love to make drawings and make paintings.

✓ Yes, as I told you before, I have had a hobby of drawing since childhood, and now I also love to make drawings and paintings.

Tense accuracy and redundancy: because question asks about a hobby since childhood, use present perfect 'have had' to show continuity. Remove filler words and streamline phrases. 'Make drawings and paintings' is acceptable; omit extra 'make'.

× I uh, I make many of paintings and drawings, uh, to uh, they call my home and my home halls walls when I, whenever I see anything to create.

✓ I make many paintings and drawings to decorate my home and the walls of my hall whenever I want to create something.

Plural and word order: use 'paintings' not 'of paintings'. Improve sentence structure: clarify purpose 'to decorate my home' and correct noun phrases 'hall walls'. Use 'whenever I want to create something' for clarity.

× Yes, uh, I have, I have a same hobby like my mother, uh, she loves to singing and uh, she is very passionate to singing so that's why I also, uh, I also love to singing.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobby as my mother; she loves singing and is very passionate about it, so I also love singing.

Pronoun and preposition use: 'a same hobby' is incorrect — use 'the same hobby' and 'the same hobby as my mother'. Use 'singing' (gerund) after 'love' and 'passionate about' not 'passionate to'. Streamline repeated phrases.

× I uh, sing many songs in my home and my voice was so umm, so good.

✓ I sing many songs at home and my voice is very good.

Tense inconsistency: keep present tense 'is' to match 'I sing' which is habitual. Use 'at home' rather than 'in my home' for naturalness; replace vague filler 'umm' and 'so good' with 'very good'.