Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific details (types of plants, activities you do), and use linking words. Avoid short choppy sentences and unclear phrases like “Their first name of.” Also correct basic grammar (e.g., “I enjoy gardening,” “I like to care for plants,” “I have many plants at home, such as roses and succulents”).

例: I enjoy gardening and I like to care for plants at home. For example, I grow roses and several kinds of succulents, and I usually spend my evenings watering them and pruning dead leaves. Because gardening relaxes me, I often set aside an hour each day to look after my plants.

提案: Give a concise past-tense topic sentence, then add a specific example and use linking words. Avoid fillers (“umm”) and repetitive phrases. Correct grammar: use past tense (“I liked to play”), specify activities and times (“in the afternoons”), and explain why it was enjoyable.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I liked to play games in the afternoons with my friends. For example, we often played football in the street or board games at home, and because we laughed a lot and shared snacks, those afternoons were always enjoyable.

提案: Answer directly with a clear statement about continuity, then give a specific supporting detail and a linking word. Use correct verb forms to show duration (e.g., “I have enjoyed playing since childhood”) and be specific about the hobby and why it continued.

例: Yes, I have enjoyed playing with friends since childhood. For instance, I used to play football and card games as a child, and I still meet friends occasionally to play sports because it helps me relax and stay active.

提案: Make your response clearer and more confident: start with a direct statement (yes/no), then contrast and give a specific example using linking words. Correct grammar and phrasing (e.g., “We don't share all hobbies, but we enjoy some activities together, such as travelling”).

例: Not exactly — we do not share all hobbies, but we enjoy some activities together. For example, my family and I all like travelling, so we often plan trips together to explore new cities and try local food.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I do.

The student used 'have' alone to answer a yes/no question. In present simple questions about possession, the correct short answer uses the auxiliary 'do' (Yes, I do). Use 'do' for affirmation when the main verb is 'have' in this context.

× I have hobbies about gardening.

✓ My hobby is gardening.

'Hobbies about' is not a natural collocation. Use 'hobby' with the verb 'is' or say 'I have a hobby: gardening.' Keep noun and preposition use natural and concise.

× I love to cure plants.

✓ I love to care for plants.

'Cure plants' implies treating sickness; the intended meaning is general plant care. Use 'care for' for maintenance and nurturing. Also 'love to' can be 'love' + infinitive or gerund; both are acceptable.

× I'm in my home.

✓ I'm at home.

Native speakers say 'I'm at home' to indicate being in one's house. 'In my home' is grammatically possible but less natural in this context.

× I have a lot of plants now.

✓ I have a lot of plants now.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It correctly uses plural 'plants' with 'a lot of.'

× Their first name of.

✓ The first one is a rose.

Original fragment lacks subject and verb and misuses 'their' and 'of.' Provide a complete clause: 'The first one is a rose.' This clarifies meaning and corrects pronoun and structure issues.

× and various kind of.

✓ and various kinds of flowers.

'Various kind of' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'kinds' with 'various' and specify the noun: 'kinds of flowers' or 'various kinds.' Ensure plurality agreement.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

When asked about past hobbies ('Did you have any hobbies when you were a child?'), the short affirmative answer should be 'Yes, I did.' Using 'have' mismatches tense.

× When I was child I like to play umm in evening, in afternoon time out UMM, but also my several friends came to my home and we play a lot of and it's a real enjoyable.

✓ When I was a child I liked to play in the afternoon and in the evening. Also, several of my friends came to my house and we played a lot; it was really enjoyable.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'child' (should be 'a child'), tense mismatch (past: 'liked', 'played', 'was'), incorrect time expressions (use 'in the afternoon' and 'in the evening'), awkward word order ('my several friends' -> 'several of my friends'), and adjective/adverb use ('real enjoyable' -> 'really enjoyable'). Correct tense consistency and natural phrasing.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I have.

For the question 'Do you have a hobby that you've had since childhood?' the short answer 'Yes, I have' is acceptable. No change needed; this confirms possession continuing from childhood to present.

× Yes, I had a hobbies enough childhood.

✓ Yes, I had hobbies throughout my childhood.

Errors: 'had a hobbies' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'hobbies'; use plural without 'a.' 'Enough childhood' is unnatural; use 'throughout my childhood' to indicate duration. Maintain past tense 'had.'

× In my childhood hobbies one of the most cheerable things is playing.

✓ One of the most enjoyable things in my childhood hobbies was playing.

Word order and tense: place 'one of the most enjoyable things' before the prepositional phrase, and use past tense 'was' to match 'childhood.' 'Cheerable' is not correct; use 'enjoyable.'

× I I love to play with my friends.

✓ I loved to play with my friends.

Talking about childhood requires past tense. Change 'love' to 'loved' to keep tense consistent. Also remove duplicated 'I.'

× I'm actually not, I don't have the same hobbies, but yeah, we like similar things.

✓ I'm actually not; I don't have the same hobbies, but we like similar things.

The original begins awkwardly with 'I'm actually not' without reference. Use a semicolon or conjunction to connect clauses. The rest is fine; minor punctuation improves clarity.

× Uh, for example, we like traveling, so it's a kind of hobbies that match my families.

✓ For example, we like traveling, so it's a kind of hobby that matches my family.

Errors: 'a kind of hobbies' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'hobbies' — use singular 'hobby.' 'Match my families' should be 'matches my family' (singular) or 'matches my family's interests.' Ensure subject-verb agreement ('hobby matches').