Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement, verb forms), reduce redundancy, organize into 2–3 concise sentences, and use linking words. Be specific about what you read and how the gym helps you. Avoid vague phrases like "kind of the least my stress."

例: I have several hobbies, but my favorite is reading because it has improved my vocabulary and helped me learn new ideas. I also go to the gym three times a week to relieve stress and stay fit.

提案: Correct tense and grammar, use clear sentence structure, and give specific details (e.g., what you painted, where you painted). Use linking words to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: When I was a child, my favourite hobby was painting. I often picked flowers from my grandmother's garden to copy their shapes and colours. After finishing a painting, I would proudly give it to my parents.

提案: Answer directly and clearly using correct grammar and pronunciation. Explain briefly why your hobbies changed with specific reasons and use linking words. Avoid filler words like 'absolutely' and 'totally' consecutively.

例: No, I don't. My hobbies changed over time: I painted as a child because I enjoyed creating pictures, but now I prefer reading and working out because they fit my schedule and help me relax.

提案: Use correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and more natural phrasing. Provide a brief comparison with a linking phrase and specific details about how your hobbies differ. Keep answers concise.

例: No, my hobbies are different from my sisters'. For example, one sister enjoys shopping and another likes walking the dog, while I prefer reading and going to the gym three times a week.

× One of my favorite hobby is reading.

✓ One of my favorite hobbies is reading.

Use plural for 'hobby' after 'one of my' because you refer to one item from a group; 'one of my favorite hobbies' is correct. Also ensures subject-verb agreement with 'is'. Suggestion: Use 'one of my favorite hobbies' whenever selecting a single item from multiple hobbies.

× I love reading so much because it's improved my vocabulary and my learning skill.

✓ I love reading so much because it has improved my vocabulary and my learning skills.

The contraction 'it's' should represent 'it has' when indicating a present perfect; use 'has improved'. 'skill' should be plural as 'skills' when referring generally. Suggestion: Use 'it has improved' or 'it improves' depending on intended meaning and use plural 'skills' for general abilities.

× And I also love go to the gym.

✓ And I also love going to the gym.

After 'love' when expressing enjoyment of an activity, use the gerund form 'going' rather than the bare infinitive 'go'. Suggestion: Use 'love doing' + activity (gerund) for hobbies.

× It's kind of the least my stress.

✓ It helps me relieve stress the most.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Least my stress' is incorrect word order and word choice. Rephrase to 'It helps me relieve stress the most' or 'It's the best way for me to reduce stress.' Suggestion: Express purpose/result clearly with verbs like 'help' and correct modifiers.

× When I was a child my favorite hobbies was painting.

✓ When I was a child my favorite hobby was painting.

Subject 'hobby' should be singular; verb 'was' matches singular. Original used plural 'hobbies' with singular verb leading to mismatch. Suggestion: Use singular 'hobby' with singular verb when referring to one favorite activity.

× I love drawing and paintings and I always going to grab some flowers from the gardens to draw and paintings.

✓ I loved drawing and painting and I always went to pick some flowers from the garden to draw.

Tense consistency: discussing childhood requires past tense 'loved' and 'went'. Use 'painting' (uncountable activity) not 'paintings' when referring to the act. 'Grab' is informal; 'pick' fits here. 'Gardens' can be singular 'the garden' or 'gardens' depending on context; 'the garden' is clearer. Suggestion: Keep past tense when referring to childhood and use gerunds for activities.

× And after painting I always chose to my parents as I really happy to do that.

✓ And after painting I always showed my parents my work because I was really happy to do that.

Original has incorrect verb 'chose to my parents' and missing verb 'was' for 'really happy'. Use 'showed my parents my work' to convey presenting paintings, and past tense 'was'. Suggestion: Use clear verbs for actions and include appropriate auxiliary verbs for adjectives ('was really happy').

× No, absolutely not. My hobby is is change definitely because when I was a child I loved painting drawings.

✓ No, absolutely not. My hobbies definitely change because when I was a child I loved drawing and painting.

Double 'is is' is an error; 'hobby' vs 'hobbies' mismatch with plural idea 'change'. Use present simple 'change' to state a general truth. 'Painting drawings' is redundant; use 'drawing and painting'. Suggestion: Avoid repeated words and match singular/plural consistently.

× But when I go out I prefer reading as I prefer to go to the gyms.

✓ But when I go out I prefer reading, and I prefer to go to the gym.

Use parallel structure and singular 'the gym' for general activity. 'Prefer reading' is correct (gerund). Suggestion: Keep parallel verbs and use 'the gym' or 'gyms' depending on meaning; 'the gym' is common for a habitual activity.

× And totally.

✓ And that's all.

'And totally' is an incomplete fragment. Replace with a complete phrase like 'And that's all' or 'Totally not' depending on intended meaning. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; ensure each sentence expresses a complete thought.

× No, absolutely not. I have hobbies totally different from my siblings.

✓ No, absolutely not. My hobbies are totally different from my siblings'.

Original word order is acceptable but possessive form for 'siblings' when comparing is clearer: 'different from my siblings'' or rephrase 'different from those of my siblings.' Also 'I have hobbies totally different' is less natural than 'My hobbies are totally different'. Suggestion: Use possessive or restructure the sentence for clarity.

× My sister loves to go to the shopping all the time and one of my other sister love walking the dog.

✓ My sister loves to go shopping all the time and one of my other sisters loves walking the dog.

Use 'go shopping' (no 'to the'). 'One of my other sister' should be 'one of my other sisters' and verb must agree: 'loves'. Suggestion: Use correct preposition patterns and pluralize nouns after 'one of'.

× But for me I love reading and go to the gyms.

✓ But for me I love reading and going to the gym.

Maintain gerund form 'going' after 'love' for parallel structure. Use singular 'the gym' for general habit. Suggestion: Use parallel gerunds for multiple activities and use 'the gym' commonly for the activity of exercising.