Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体清晰，覆盖了多个爱好并给出原因，但存在语法和用词错误（如“make me be a more energetic person”，“build my bodies up”），句子略显冗长且有重复。建议：使用更自然简洁的表达，注意主谓一致和单复数，句子不超过5句；用连接词（for example, and, also）使细节更连贯。具体可练习将原因和效果分成短句，并替换不地道表达。

例: I enjoy weight training, listening to music and swimming in my spare time. These activities help me feel more energetic and improve my fitness. For example, weight training has strengthened my muscles and swimming is great for my stamina.

提案: 回答能传达主要意思，但存在时态和语法混用（“There are there were”），词汇搭配问题（“well equipped trails”一般用“well-equipped paths”或“trails”），以及不恰当的动词形式（“ride our bikes and running”）。建议：保持时态一致（过去时），使用恰当的词组并在句子间用连接词衔接。练习把并列动作用相同结构表达（ride our bikes and run）。

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often played with friends in the park near my home. There were many well‑equipped paths where we could ride our bikes and run together.

提案: 回答主题明确并给出例子，但存在用词和搭配错误（“experience my horizons”，“literatures”应为“literature”或“books”），以及少许冠词遗漏（“after busy day”需加定冠词或不定冠词）。建议：注意固定搭配（expand my horizons），使用单数/不可数名词正确形式，并保持短句清晰。

例: Yes. I have loved reading since I was a child because it helps me unwind after a busy day and expands my horizons. For example, I often read historical novels and other books that both entertain me and teach me new things.

提案: 回答表达了家庭共同爱好并描述了互动，但有不地道表达（“developed a lot for books”应为“developed a love of books”或“developed a strong interest in books”）。建议：使用自然短语表达情感和习惯，保持句子简洁并用连接词衔接原因与结果。

例: Yes, reading is a hobby we all share. My father used to read to me when I was young, so I developed a love of books. Now we often recommend novels or biographies to each other and sometimes discuss them at the weekend.

× In my spare time I like to do weight training, listening to music and swimming.

✓ In my spare time I like weight training, listening to music and swimming.

句子中平行结构不一致。like 后列举多项时，应保持形式一致：可用動名詞（liking + noun/verb-ing）或原形動詞搭配名詞，但不能混用 “do weight training” 与后面的动名词并列。建议将 “do weight training” 改为名詞短语 “weight training”，以与 “listening” 和 “swimming” 形成平行结构。

× I think these activities can make me be a more energetic person and build my bodies up.

✓ I think these activities can make me a more energetic person and build my body up.

存在形容词/名词使用错误与复数错误。短语 “make me be a more energetic person” 中通常用 make + 宾语 + 补语（省略不定式 to），因此应为 “make me a more energetic person”。此外 “bodies” 不应为复数，主体是单数的“my body”。建议改为 “make me a more energetic person and build my body up”。

× When I was a little child I liked to play games with my friends in the park near my home.

✓ When I was a little child I liked playing games with my friends in the park near my home.

動詞時態本身正確，但動詞搭配更自然的形式是過去時的動名詞短語 liked playing 而不是 liked to play；兩者都可用，但在描述兒時習慣時用 liked doing 更常見、更自然。此處屬於過去時使用的微調建議。

× There are there were many well equipped trails where we can ride our bikes and running.

✓ There were many well-equipped trails where we could ride our bikes and run.

句中有多處错误：首先出现重复的時態短语 “There are there were” 应该保留过去时 “There were”。其次 “well equipped” 作为复合形容词应使用连字符 “well-equipped”。动词并列应保持形式一致，不能用 “ride... and running”；应改为并列动词原形或动名词一致，这里因句子在过去时，且后半句与过去背景一致，使用情态动词过去式 “could” 并列动词原形 “ride... and run” 更恰当。最后，将 “we can” 改为过去的 “we could”。建议改为 “There were many well-equipped trails where we could ride our bikes and run.”。

× Since I was a child, I have loved reading because it helps me unwind after busy day and experience my horizons.

✓ Since I was a child, I have loved reading because it helps me unwind after a busy day and broaden my horizons.

句子中有時態與詞語搭配问题： ’Since I was a child, I have loved...’ 用現在完成時說明從過去持續至今是可以的。問題在於缺少冠詞 “a busy day”，且 “experience my horizons” 用法不當，英語通常說 “broaden my horizons” 表示開闊視野。建議加上冠詞並用更自然的動詞搭配： “unwind after a busy day and broaden my horizons”。

× For example, I often read historical novels and literatures which both entertain me and teach me new things.

✓ For example, I often read historical novels and literature, which both entertain me and teach me new things.

“literatures” 不可數，應使用單數形式 “literature”。另外在關係從句前加逗號更自然。建議改為 “historical novels and literature” 。

× My father used to read to me when I was young, so I developed a lot for books.

✓ My father used to read to me when I was young, so I developed a love for books.

原句中 “developed a lot for books” 用法錯誤。應使用固定搭配 “develop a love/interest for/in something” 或 “developed a liking for books”。因此改為 “developed a love for books” 更準確自然。

× Now we often recommend novels or biographies to each other and sometimes discuss them over the weekend.

✓ Now we often recommend novels or biographies to each other and sometimes discuss them over the weekend.

句子基本正確，但 “discuss them over the weekend” 可接受表達周末討論的情形；若需更自然可改為 “discuss them at the weekend”（英式）或保留原句。此處屬於輕微風格建議，無語法錯誤。