Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答应更自然连贯，避免填充词和含糊短语（如“and so on”，“uh”）。开头用主题句直接回答，随后用一到两句话具体说明最常做的几项爱好和频率或原因，句子不超过5句。注意连接词使用使信息更连贯，例如“for example”、“such as”或“also”。

例: Yes, I enjoy several outdoor sports. For example, I go hiking every month and cycle around my neighborhood twice a week. I also play badminton with friends on weekends because it keeps me fit and is fun.

提案: 回答时注意时态一致和句子简洁。开头直接用过去时表明童年爱好，然后给出具体细节，例如开始年龄、频率或与谁一起骑车。避免重复短语（如“when I was when I was”）。

例: Yes, I enjoyed cycling a lot as a child. I started riding a bike when I was six and often cycled to the park with my friends every weekend.

提案: 注意时态一致并提供清晰具体的细节。先用主题句说明持续的爱好，再用一到两句举例说明喜好的类型并给出原因或变化。避免语法错误（如“love watch”应为“loved watching/ love watching”）和不完整短语（如“especially about. Fraction”）。

例: Yes, I've loved watching films since I was a child. I used to watch cartoons, but now I enjoy a wide range of movies, especially science fiction, because I like imaginative stories and special effects.

提案: 回答应更完整，句子流畅并修正重复和不完整成分（如“on on”和句尾不完整）。先表明是否共享爱好，然后具体说明习惯（什么时候、多久）并加一个理由或感受。保持句子不超过5句并使用连接词如“usually”或“because”。

例: Yes, we enjoy the same hobby of walking together. Usually we go for a walk after dinner in the evening, which lasts about 30 minutes, and I really enjoy spending that relaxed time with my family.

× I have many hobbies such as hiking, cycling, playing badminton. And so on.

✓ I have many hobbies, such as hiking, cycling and playing badminton.

原句中“such as hiking, cycling, playing badminton. And so on.”断句与并列连接不当。应把并列项目放在同一完整句子中，并用连词或逗号连接。这里属于句子结构和标点使用导致的复数列举不流畅，故改为一个句子并用and连接最后一项，使表达更自然。

× I really like sports.

✓ I really like sports.

该句时态和形式正确，无需修改。仅保留原句。

× Yes, of course, I can still remember I'm keen on cycling when I was when I was a child.

✓ Yes, of course, I can still remember I was keen on cycling when I was a child.

原句中混用了现在时（I'm keen）和过去时间状语（when I was a child），时态不一致。应把叙述回忆的动词用过去时，因此将“I'm keen on”改为“I was keen on”。同时删除重复的“when I was”。

× Yes, I love watching movies since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I have loved watching movies since I was a child.

句中使用“since”表示从过去持续到现在，需用现在完成时表示持续性（have loved），而不能用一般现在时“love”。因此改为现在完成时以符合时间状语“since I was a child”。

× When I was young I love watch cartoons and when now I enjoy all kinds of movies, especially about. Fraction.

✓ When I was young I loved watching cartoons, and now I enjoy all kinds of movies, especially action films.

该复合句中第一部分描述过去应使用过去时（loved），并且动词短语“love watch”缺少现在分词形式，应为“loved watching”。第二部分“when now I enjoy”时态和连接词不当，改为“and now I enjoy”。“especially about. Fraction.”不完整且不合语法，推测想表达“尤其是动作片（action films）”，故改为完整短语。

× Yes, we both like going out for a walk, especially on on the evening we usually go out for walking after dinner and I really enjoy the moments with.

✓ Yes, we both like going out for a walk, especially in the evening. We usually go for a walk after dinner, and I really enjoy those moments with them.

原句存在多处问题：重复“on on”，习惯搭配为“in the evening”而非“on the evening”；“go out for walking”不自然，应为“go for a walk”或“go walking”；句尾“enjoy the moments with.”缺少宾语，需明确和谁一起（them 或 family）。因此修正为两个完整句，修正介词与短语搭配并补全宾语。