Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use present simple: “I have” or “I go to the gym”), avoid redundancy, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, mention how often you go or one activity you do at the gym.

例: I do have a hobby: I go to the gym regularly. For example, I go three times a week to do cardio and weight training, which helps me stay fit and also relax after a long day.

提案: Provide a clearer, grammatically correct response with a topic sentence and a specific supporting detail. Use linking words (e.g., “because” or “instead”) and correct expressions ("I didn't have much time").

例: Not really — I didn't have many hobbies as a child because I didn't have much free time. Instead, I preferred playing games and hanging out with my friends after school.

提案: Answer directly and correct tense errors. Use past tense for childhood ("I didn't have") and give one specific supporting detail with a linking word to explain why.

例: No, I didn't have a hobby that lasted from childhood. I focused on my schoolwork and spent most of my free time playing outside with classmates.

提案: Make the sentence grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms ("does"/"wants"), and add a specific detail about how you share the hobby (e.g., you go together).

例: Yes, I share a hobby with my sister — we both enjoy going to the gym. We often work out together twice a week, which helps us stay motivated and healthy.

× Yes I have had this. I like going to the gym because it keeps me to stay healthy and fit and it helps me to relax my mind.

✓ Yes, I have had this hobby. I like going to the gym because it helps me stay healthy and fit and it helps me relax my mind.

Issues: present perfect phrase 'I have had this' is vague — specify 'this hobby'. 'keeps me to stay' is incorrect collocation: use 'helps me stay' or 'keeps me healthy'. 'helps me to relax my mind' is acceptable but more natural without 'to'. Suggestion: use 'helps me stay' and remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps'. Use commas for clarity. Grammar Problem Type ID:6

× No, not really. I didn't much time for hobbies. I preferred spending time with my friends rather than specific to my hobbies.

✓ No, not really. I didn't have much time for hobbies. I preferred spending time with my friends rather than focusing on hobbies.

Issues: 'didn't much time' is missing the verb 'have' (past tense possession) — relates to past tense usage. 'rather than specific to my hobbies' is ungrammatical; use 'rather than focusing on hobbies' or 'rather than pursuing hobbies'. Suggestion: include 'have' after 'didn't' and replace awkward phrase with 'focusing on hobbies'. Grammar Problem Type ID:5

× No, I don't have a hobby when I was a child. I focus on my school and playing outside.

✓ No, I didn't have a hobby when I was a child. I focused on my school and playing outside.

Issues: Mixed tenses — 'don't have' (present) conflicts with 'when I was a child' (past). Use past tense 'didn't have'. 'I focus' should be past 'I focused'. Maintain past tense for events in childhood. Suggestion: change verbs to past tense to match time reference. Grammar Problem Type ID:6

× Yes I have the same hobbies which is my sister. She also want to go to the gym. She also wants to keeps to stay healthy and fit.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobby as my sister. She also wants to go to the gym. She also wants to stay healthy and fit.

Issues: 'the same hobbies which is my sister' is incorrect pronoun/relative clause and plurality — should be 'the same hobby as my sister'. 'She also want' is subject-verb agreement error — use 'wants' for third person singular. 'wants to keeps to stay' has extra 's' and unnecessary 'to' after 'keeps'; use 'wants to stay' or 'wants to keep fit'. Suggestion: correct relative structure, match singular/plural, and fix verb agreement and infinitive form. Grammar Problem Type ID:12}]} PMID:0